What We Need
And then give it back46 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
The rhythm is soothing and the words are comforting. During today's tumultuous times, a poem that reminds us of God's peace, love, and blessings is inspiring and encouraging. Thank you for your "Ray of Sunshine Poem."
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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The rhythm is soothing and the words are comforting. During today's tumultuous times, a poem that reminds us of God's peace, love, and blessings is inspiring and encouraging. Thank you for your "Ray of Sunshine Poem."
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Hi Sweetie, I sure appreciate this wonderful review. Thank you so much for all the kind comments for "What we Need." You are so very thoughtful!
Thanks again, my very dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing this poem, Debi! I can see that the Spirit has been talking to you and you are sharing with us what we need to hear and to be sensitive to others who feel they need to hide their pain. But you know you have many here who will hold your hand and pray with you!!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Thank you for sharing this poem, Debi! I can see that the Spirit has been talking to you and you are sharing with us what we need to hear and to be sensitive to others who feel they need to hide their pain. But you know you have many here who will hold your hand and pray with you!!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Helen, I thank you for this awesome review and such kind comments for this poem about what we all need. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Ric Myworld
"Phrase God for all our blessings." Something we need to do throughout every day and night. When we think things are bad for us, all we have to do is stop and take a look around us at everyone less fortunate. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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"Phrase God for all our blessings." Something we need to do throughout every day and night. When we think things are bad for us, all we have to do is stop and take a look around us at everyone less fortunate. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Right now, Ric, I am praising God to see you reviewing again. I just hope you aren't overdoing it. But gosh it is so good to see you. I certainly have been praying for you to get better.
Thank you so much for the very thoughtful comments and review, my very dear friend.
Thanks again. Love, Debi
Comment from June Sargent
This poem was exactly what I needed today. One of our dear friends who moved away a few years ago passed away this morning. I was thinking about what to write in a card to his wife when another friend called me to thank me for the care package I had sent her. She'd been going through some difficult health issues. We all need to know someone cares and even the littlest gesture can mean a lot. I appreciate your sentiments.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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This poem was exactly what I needed today. One of our dear friends who moved away a few years ago passed away this morning. I was thinking about what to write in a card to his wife when another friend called me to thank me for the care package I had sent her. She'd been going through some difficult health issues. We all need to know someone cares and even the littlest gesture can mean a lot. I appreciate your sentiments.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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You are too kind, June. I am so very sorry for your loss. Gosh, that is hard to deal with and you are so sweet that you sent a care package to another friend. Sounds like we are on the same page. It is so much easier to be kind, isn't it?
Also, thank you so much for the very thoughtful comments and review. I appreciated the generous six stars too, my friend. Hugs!! Take care.
Thanks again. Love, Debi
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Debi!
I especially loved the final two lines, but your entire message and presentation was thoughtful and timely.
Geeat work!
Thank you for sharing.
Kim
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Debi!
I especially loved the final two lines, but your entire message and presentation was thoughtful and timely.
Geeat work!
Thank you for sharing.
Kim
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Kim, I thank you for this awesome review and such kind comments for this poem about what we all need. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Ulla
Yeah, we do need some healing right now, Debi. I think the whole world does right now. We are being tested to capacity. Let's see who wins this game. All best, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Yeah, we do need some healing right now, Debi. I think the whole world does right now. We are being tested to capacity. Let's see who wins this game. All best, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Ulla, It really does seem that way, doesn't it? On a positive note, I'd like to say that every time I see your name show up, I am always so thankful to see you didn't leave. You mean to much to all of us.
I thank you for this awesome review and such kind comments for this poem about what we all need. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a lovely poem with a Christian theme. Have you ever thought about selling some of your poems to Christian magazines. This one is good enough to sell, although they may want you to change a word of two.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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This is a lovely poem with a Christian theme. Have you ever thought about selling some of your poems to Christian magazines. This one is good enough to sell, although they may want you to change a word of two.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Haha, Carol, I just changed a whole bunch of it to make it sound better. So I am glad you mentioned it. And it was just a couple things, but I think it helped.
And thank you for saying that about a Christian magazines. That is so kind of you. Thanks again, Sweetie. Love and hugs, Debi
Comment from BethShelby
This is a lovely poem reminding us of all the things we might we will get with God in our life who is a friend we can always count on. All of the things in your bouquet are freely given if we ask and are worth more than money can buy.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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This is a lovely poem reminding us of all the things we might we will get with God in our life who is a friend we can always count on. All of the things in your bouquet are freely given if we ask and are worth more than money can buy.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Beth, I must say it is so good to see you back again. You have been missed and we were praying for you. I thank you for this awesome review and such kind comments for this poem about what we all need. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from royowen
There's a couple of scriptures that actually tell us that the Lord gives sleep to His beloved ones, but still some don't receive the sleep they might get, but I believe that's still true for those who believe. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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There's a couple of scriptures that actually tell us that the Lord gives sleep to His beloved ones, but still some don't receive the sleep they might get, but I believe that's still true for those who believe. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
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Hi Roy, I thank you for this awesome review and such kind comments for this poem about what we all need. Thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
** rating revised following edits by author **
Hi Debi, great picture and sentiments. Rhymes are all good and most of your lines (except two) have good meter.
In an effort to help you assess your metering, I have annotated each of your lines with capital letters showing where the beats fall when spoken with a binary rhythm, which I assume is what you intended as a rhythm.
we Need a Little Courage To help Get us Through our Day <= good
some OptiMism So the Sun will Try to Shine our Way <= good
those Days we Feel like Hiding And we Put on A disGuise <= good
we Need those Who inStinctiveLy are So thoughtFul and Wise <= fine until you get to "so". The correct accent of "thoughtful" is on the first syllable, not the second. Consider something like: **to hide from those who sometimes are not thoughtful, kind or wise**
take Time to Listen QuietLy to Someone In deSpair <= good
there Is a Strength in Knowing There are Those that Really Care <= good, but change "that" to "who". If you want to put less emphasis on "is", which is a weak word to accent, you could write: "for There's a Strength" etc
a Peace will Fill your Heart when There's a Friend to Hold your Hand <= good
it Helps to Know there's Hope in Finding One who'll UnderStand <= meter is good, though "who'll" seems like a lot to pack into one syllable, just to avoid the imperfect "s" on the end.
we Need the Rest and Healing That onLy jeSus can Give <= you can see the issue here. But if you remove "that", this will shift your accent up, and then and add an extra syllable later on (I've added "Christ" in the example below):
**we Need the Rest and Healing Only Jesus Christ can Give**
And with the wonder of His love, forever we can live <= good
Praise God for all these gifts and there's a thankfulness we keep <= a little confusing but the meter is fine
Each night He'll give us comfort as He helps us fall asleep <= good meter
Message me if you adjust the metering (you are certainly welcome to use the examples I provided, or use your own) and I'll revisit the rating! Thanks for sharing and best regards,
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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** rating revised following edits by author **
Hi Debi, great picture and sentiments. Rhymes are all good and most of your lines (except two) have good meter.
In an effort to help you assess your metering, I have annotated each of your lines with capital letters showing where the beats fall when spoken with a binary rhythm, which I assume is what you intended as a rhythm.
we Need a Little Courage To help Get us Through our Day <= good
some OptiMism So the Sun will Try to Shine our Way <= good
those Days we Feel like Hiding And we Put on A disGuise <= good
we Need those Who inStinctiveLy are So thoughtFul and Wise <= fine until you get to "so". The correct accent of "thoughtful" is on the first syllable, not the second. Consider something like: **to hide from those who sometimes are not thoughtful, kind or wise**
take Time to Listen QuietLy to Someone In deSpair <= good
there Is a Strength in Knowing There are Those that Really Care <= good, but change "that" to "who". If you want to put less emphasis on "is", which is a weak word to accent, you could write: "for There's a Strength" etc
a Peace will Fill your Heart when There's a Friend to Hold your Hand <= good
it Helps to Know there's Hope in Finding One who'll UnderStand <= meter is good, though "who'll" seems like a lot to pack into one syllable, just to avoid the imperfect "s" on the end.
we Need the Rest and Healing That onLy jeSus can Give <= you can see the issue here. But if you remove "that", this will shift your accent up, and then and add an extra syllable later on (I've added "Christ" in the example below):
**we Need the Rest and Healing Only Jesus Christ can Give**
And with the wonder of His love, forever we can live <= good
Praise God for all these gifts and there's a thankfulness we keep <= a little confusing but the meter is fine
Each night He'll give us comfort as He helps us fall asleep <= good meter
Message me if you adjust the metering (you are certainly welcome to use the examples I provided, or use your own) and I'll revisit the rating! Thanks for sharing and best regards,
🦍
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Gosh, I love you. You are so timely, as my poem says, when I needed a friend, there you were. You see I have to screw up a little so you'll come and visit me. LOL..
Seriously, my problem is if I say it and it seems to sound smooth to me, I never look at the stress and unstressed words. And it's not because I am lazy, cause I feel kind of uncomfortable with those exact places, but never think about doing the every other one stressed. I have to start doing that. Thanks so much. You are awesome.
And it's not for the changed score that I am doing this. I truly do appreciate your help. In a half hour they should be changed. Love, Debi
So I will go and fix these and yes, I see it when you point it out to me so that is why I am so grateful to you for your help.
