The Checkup
A frightening dental experience40 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author words are humorous, descriptive and creative. This long poem
kept me reading right to the end - each stanza convinced me to read on and made smile. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with these words. Great Poem, Paul!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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The author words are humorous, descriptive and creative. This long poem
kept me reading right to the end - each stanza convinced me to read on and made smile. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with these words. Great Poem, Paul!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Maria. My dental experiences are much better today than they were years ago.
Comment from DonandVicki
I just love the humor in your well rhymed poem. I assume this is fiction ? If it is a real experience then I guess I would be horrified. Just kidding, a master work of poetic rhythm and rhyme.
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I just love the humor in your well rhymed poem. I assume this is fiction ? If it is a real experience then I guess I would be horrified. Just kidding, a master work of poetic rhythm and rhyme.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks Don and Vicki. I have had some scary moments, but not as bad as I have portrayed.
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, this is the way a person feel when they go to the dentist. I am always glad when it is over.
Your couplets are nice and good luck with your poem.
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Yes, this is the way a person feel when they go to the dentist. I am always glad when it is over.
Your couplets are nice and good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Art. It is always a great feeling to get out of that dentist chair.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! This story is really funny. You included lots of imagery (in rhyme), that allowed me to envision the horrors I'm so familiar with at the dentist's office. I really enjoyed your trip to the dentist, since I couldn't feel your pain. This story sounds like a winner. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Haha! This story is really funny. You included lots of imagery (in rhyme), that allowed me to envision the horrors I'm so familiar with at the dentist's office. I really enjoyed your trip to the dentist, since I couldn't feel your pain. This story sounds like a winner. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Lorraine. The story is funny, but the experience is not.
Comment from pome lover
holy cow! I'm surprised you didn't leave when she grabbed your arm!
I'm hoping this is fiction, but if not, I do have to say that your rhymes are good; meter, too, and it read smoothly and cleverly. (And I hope your mouth has healed.)
And you found a new dentist!
Katharine
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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holy cow! I'm surprised you didn't leave when she grabbed your arm!
I'm hoping this is fiction, but if not, I do have to say that your rhymes are good; meter, too, and it read smoothly and cleverly. (And I hope your mouth has healed.)
And you found a new dentist!
Katharine
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Katharine. Mouth is all healed, but I did find some of her equipment in there.
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well, that made me laugh out loud! Still chuckling, picturing that! Too funny.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story/poem contest entry with us. My husband and I go to the same dentist. His horror stories are very similar to your entry. Mine are very different. I can't say it's a pleasant experience, but it's okay. LOL Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this story/poem contest entry with us. My husband and I go to the same dentist. His horror stories are very similar to your entry. Mine are very different. I can't say it's a pleasant experience, but it's okay. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Barb. My experiences have become better since I have taken better care of my teeth.
Comment from Begin Again
I feel like this will be a nightmare haunting me. I am terrified of a dentist. I had five children and three without meds, and I'd do it a hundred times over than sit in a dentist chair. One drill through the top of my mouth was enough for me. Your poem is still sending chills up and down my spine.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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I feel like this will be a nightmare haunting me. I am terrified of a dentist. I had five children and three without meds, and I'd do it a hundred times over than sit in a dentist chair. One drill through the top of my mouth was enough for me. Your poem is still sending chills up and down my spine.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Carol. Comparing a dentist visit to childbirth is quite something. I'll bet there is a poem there.
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LOL... I'll take childbirth any day,though I might have to reconsider, seeing as how teenagers have changed so much nowadays.
Comment from Sally Law
Paul,
This is hilarious! It's completely relatable too because it's real. I loved the dental hygienist's credentials:
She was a recent graduate of night school dentistry.
The ink was not completely dry on her brand new degree.
You won the contest in my eyes!
Sending along my very best.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Paul,
This is hilarious! It's completely relatable too because it's real. I loved the dental hygienist's credentials:
She was a recent graduate of night school dentistry.
The ink was not completely dry on her brand new degree.
You won the contest in my eyes!
Sending along my very best.
Sally :))
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Sally. Luckily, my dental hygienist is a really good one.
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I figured as much. All in good fun, I know.
Sal :))
Comment from Sanku
What a poem! This will resonate with every one who reads it ,I am sure .I hate going to the dentist. All that drilling !! The story is original and well written .all the best for the contest.
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What a poem! This will resonate with every one who reads it ,I am sure .I hate going to the dentist. All that drilling !! The story is original and well written .all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Santha. I don't know anyone who enjoys a dental appointment. Well, maybe the dentist.
Comment from Nicki.B
Oh goodness me the dreaded dentist. I really like what you have done with this, bringing through the full story from start to finish, all the different emotions and thoughts (mostly fear and dread). It gave me the heebie jeebies even thinking about the denist. Brilliant poem, you did a great job. I got a good old giggle aswell.
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Oh goodness me the dreaded dentist. I really like what you have done with this, bringing through the full story from start to finish, all the different emotions and thoughts (mostly fear and dread). It gave me the heebie jeebies even thinking about the denist. Brilliant poem, you did a great job. I got a good old giggle aswell.
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Nicki. I gave a copy of this poem to my hygienist.
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Brilliant I love it haha! Bet they loved it haha!