The Myth of Andrasta
The conception and birth of the Cerberus ...22 total reviews
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is superb.
I have a love for the Greek and Roman mythos and this telling of the creation of Cerberus is very well done..
Only one line made me stumble a touch,
for Damon's kiss, a year this day was lost.
I didn't quite get the sense, should it be a day this year was lost?
Anyway.
I have written an epic, mine is a modern epic touching on the style of the classics but set in toady's conflicted world. Maybe one day I will put it up on here but its several chapters long, so I shall have to consider it.
It's actually the title work of my published book 'Whispers of Albion'
Anyway, I digress from my review.
The meter and rhyme of this, the difficulty of creating an epic especially one that requires considerable knowledge of or research into Greek mythology, and then does that classic tradition proud is why I have given this the 6 it honestly deserves.
Tim
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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This is superb.
I have a love for the Greek and Roman mythos and this telling of the creation of Cerberus is very well done..
Only one line made me stumble a touch,
for Damon's kiss, a year this day was lost.
I didn't quite get the sense, should it be a day this year was lost?
Anyway.
I have written an epic, mine is a modern epic touching on the style of the classics but set in toady's conflicted world. Maybe one day I will put it up on here but its several chapters long, so I shall have to consider it.
It's actually the title work of my published book 'Whispers of Albion'
Anyway, I digress from my review.
The meter and rhyme of this, the difficulty of creating an epic especially one that requires considerable knowledge of or research into Greek mythology, and then does that classic tradition proud is why I have given this the 6 it honestly deserves.
Tim
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the review and exceptional rating, Tim! I am so happy tou liked it, my friend! 😊
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an epic horror story Patrick, skilfully written with good metre and clever rhyming. I loved the (pedigree) and (memory) pairing and the (earned) and (spurned). That three headed dog is a scary thought! You told the story with such detail that it sent a shiver down my spine.
This is my favourite stanza, but they are all very good:
O goddess Aphrodite, what's my sin?
You stilled my hand to gift another chance
at love, yet tossed me to the hounds of men
like bloody meat upon the spit, betrayed!
This faithless void, Andrasta fell within.
This poem showcases your talent as a poet and this is one of the best poems I have read recently. A winner for the contest for sure. Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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This is an epic horror story Patrick, skilfully written with good metre and clever rhyming. I loved the (pedigree) and (memory) pairing and the (earned) and (spurned). That three headed dog is a scary thought! You told the story with such detail that it sent a shiver down my spine.
This is my favourite stanza, but they are all very good:
O goddess Aphrodite, what's my sin?
You stilled my hand to gift another chance
at love, yet tossed me to the hounds of men
like bloody meat upon the spit, betrayed!
This faithless void, Andrasta fell within.
This poem showcases your talent as a poet and this is one of the best poems I have read recently. A winner for the contest for sure. Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hi Dolly! I have been very busy last two days, so I am late to answering my reviews. I really appreciate your comments and your exceptional raring. It means a lot to me that you liked it! 😊