(Senryu) Find the Right Path
A senryu30 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A nice little twist at the end of your senryu as the reader lazily waits for the revelatory solution! It's as good an answer as any. After all, life is what happens when we're busy making plans! My only suggestion would be to make the font slightly larger and centre it so that it makes the visual impact it deserves. Well done, Pam! Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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A nice little twist at the end of your senryu as the reader lazily waits for the revelatory solution! It's as good an answer as any. After all, life is what happens when we're busy making plans! My only suggestion would be to make the font slightly larger and centre it so that it makes the visual impact it deserves. Well done, Pam! Debbie
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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hi Deb. I don't know how to make the font larger. I chose the largest possible that I could find and I don't know how to center it
Thanks for the great review either.
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Hi Pam, you must be in 'basic editor' which doesn't offer the options. Go into 'advanced editor' and you'll see at the top how to centre your text and also give you a choice of font styles and sizes. If, for whatever reason, you can't do this, have a word with Tom. But it should be straightforward:)
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
Great poem. Speaks volumes. Yes, sometimes throwing a dart at life and see where it lands. It seems like the only choice sometimes. I wonder what infrastructure that's a picture. The picture of the Dallas infrastructure looks pretty intimidating.
Great job.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Pam,
Great poem. Speaks volumes. Yes, sometimes throwing a dart at life and see where it lands. It seems like the only choice sometimes. I wonder what infrastructure that's a picture. The picture of the Dallas infrastructure looks pretty intimidating.
Great job.
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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hi Cecilia. do you think this is this a grid of Dallas, Texas? I wouldn't know what in any case thank you for your wonderful review.
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Oh no. Dallas grid looks like someone threw a bowl of spaghetti on it. We got bridges going willy nilly out here.
This is a place that if you are afraid to drive I don't recommend. You need nerves of steel to drive through Dallas and Fort Worth.
Cecilia
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Interesting. Thank you
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from DonandVicki
I can see where this could be serious, however this might be a good suggestion if when life is becomming difficult or unbearable. A very clever Senyru.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I can see where this could be serious, however this might be a good suggestion if when life is becomming difficult or unbearable. A very clever Senyru.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you, DonandVicki for your wonderful review
Comment from gramalot8
I loved this Senryu. It is indeed how life leads us so. It's easy yo hope all eill he on one good path but so many times there's all the twists and turns in the game of life chances. Sometimes that dart lands on good direction and unfortunately it can land in bad as well. Hopefully we learn to deal with it whichever way it leads us. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I loved this Senryu. It is indeed how life leads us so. It's easy yo hope all eill he on one good path but so many times there's all the twists and turns in the game of life chances. Sometimes that dart lands on good direction and unfortunately it can land in bad as well. Hopefully we learn to deal with it whichever way it leads us. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you RS for your wonderful and thoughtful review
Comment from lyenochka
That's a surprising solution senryu! These days we don't even have paper maps on our walls. It's all online and I wouldn't throw "darts" at the screen. Lol. Maybe these days we can use those screen pens. Or we could pray.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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That's a surprising solution senryu! These days we don't even have paper maps on our walls. It's all online and I wouldn't throw "darts" at the screen. Lol. Maybe these days we can use those screen pens. Or we could pray.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Helen for your lovely review
Comment from Jesse James Doty
In other words, make lemonade out of lemons. Choose a good path when there is none to choose from throw darts at the map. I like that philosophy. We need to stay positive and make love, not war. Otherwise, we are doomed to create havoc and other unseemly things that are best forgotten. Let's keep throwing darts at the proverbial map.
Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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In other words, make lemonade out of lemons. Choose a good path when there is none to choose from throw darts at the map. I like that philosophy. We need to stay positive and make love, not war. Otherwise, we are doomed to create havoc and other unseemly things that are best forgotten. Let's keep throwing darts at the proverbial map.
Jesse
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Jesse for your wonderful thoughtful review
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You're welcome, Pam.
Have a wonderful Sunday.
Jesse
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The image of throwing darts at a map brings a sense of adventure. Your words are a reminder that sometimes randomness is the best guide! This piece feels like a gentle nudge to trust the journey wherever it may lead. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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The image of throwing darts at a map brings a sense of adventure. Your words are a reminder that sometimes randomness is the best guide! This piece feels like a gentle nudge to trust the journey wherever it may lead. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Michael for your encouraging lovely review
Comment from RodG
Well, you succeeded in making me chuckle at the unexpected punch line of your senryu. I'm thinking your advice is not a bad idea for someone who can't determine his/her life's direction. Rod
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Well, you succeeded in making me chuckle at the unexpected punch line of your senryu. I'm thinking your advice is not a bad idea for someone who can't determine his/her life's direction. Rod
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
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Thank you Rod for your wonderful review
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It is humorous but has a hint of realism in it. I have often felt like just throwing a dart at a map. I think it might work out a little better. LOL Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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It is humorous but has a hint of realism in it. I have often felt like just throwing a dart at a map. I think it might work out a little better. LOL Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
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Thank you Barbara for your wonderful review
Comment from royowen
I like this Pam, when all else fails, make a wild guess and go from there, and everything will be ok, heh heh. That makes sense, I must admit I've felt like that, but the feeling goes away, too many depending on you, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
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I like this Pam, when all else fails, make a wild guess and go from there, and everything will be ok, heh heh. That makes sense, I must admit I've felt like that, but the feeling goes away, too many depending on you, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Wow. Thank you, Roy for the shiny stars and for a great review.
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Good job