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Michael Ludwinder
This is great. I love how you use humor in it. I read this several times. The way you go from a body trapped in flesh to the consequences of extreme weight loss is great. The warning at the end brings everything together. It's a clever poem! Well done!
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
Thank you, michael, we're happy you like it! I tried to make it a little bit fun and macabre at the same. I appreciate your thoughts and your awesome review and your great writing too! Thank you very much! Hope you have the best of days!