Hell in the First Grade
My first grade of school.35 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
This is a well written narrative about your 1st grade experience learning how to take on life. The story is a fine description of your feelings and about the circumstances you confront. That hangs on to the reader. The climax of the story is well written. Your closing description is what one would expect from a bunch of first graders getting into a fight. Good job. The story is quite entertaining, and it is a learning vehicle for first graders.
Z
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is a well written narrative about your 1st grade experience learning how to take on life. The story is a fine description of your feelings and about the circumstances you confront. That hangs on to the reader. The climax of the story is well written. Your closing description is what one would expect from a bunch of first graders getting into a fight. Good job. The story is quite entertaining, and it is a learning vehicle for first graders.
Z
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Robert. I really appreciate your great review!
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You're welcome.
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Roger that!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
this is a well told story that keeps your reader engaged. I am no great writer but I do have a thought. Something to think about. So many "I''s
how about: Walking very slowly towards the front door like a man on death row, nervous and shaking, my dad's car was ..........
Starting sentence with "I" slows it down.
Just a thought.
Mary
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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this is a well told story that keeps your reader engaged. I am no great writer but I do have a thought. Something to think about. So many "I''s
how about: Walking very slowly towards the front door like a man on death row, nervous and shaking, my dad's car was ..........
Starting sentence with "I" slows it down.
Just a thought.
Mary
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much Mary for your great review and for catching my oops! You are so right. Thank you and I appreciate that!
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like this story. It must have been a nightmare for you that year. I'm glad you were finally able to stand up for yourself. You father sounds like a wise man. I don't know why some students pick another to threaten and abuse, or why your teacher didn't notice and do something. I taught school for eighteen or so years and it was never difficult to figure out which child was being picked on, or who the bully or bullies were and step in. Intervening doesn't always work but one must at least make the effort. Your teacher was no prize either. It sounds as if she might have been a bit of a bully too. I'm glad you survived it. Hopefully the rest of your school experiences were not so bad.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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I like this story. It must have been a nightmare for you that year. I'm glad you were finally able to stand up for yourself. You father sounds like a wise man. I don't know why some students pick another to threaten and abuse, or why your teacher didn't notice and do something. I taught school for eighteen or so years and it was never difficult to figure out which child was being picked on, or who the bully or bullies were and step in. Intervening doesn't always work but one must at least make the effort. Your teacher was no prize either. It sounds as if she might have been a bit of a bully too. I'm glad you survived it. Hopefully the rest of your school experiences were not so bad.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Yes, Mary. The teacher was just as bad as the boys. I hated walking into that room every morning. I really appreciate your great review!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
The teacher in me makes me want to punch Ms. Paddocks in the nose on your behalf.
I pictured your dad as Ward Cleaver. He taught you a very important lesson. Did those boys ever bother you again? Gang up on you for having humiliated them?
Interesting read.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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The teacher in me makes me want to punch Ms. Paddocks in the nose on your behalf.
I pictured your dad as Ward Cleaver. He taught you a very important lesson. Did those boys ever bother you again? Gang up on you for having humiliated them?
Interesting read.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Lol! Well, thank you Rachelle. Those boys never bothered me again the rest of the year. I really appreciate your review!
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Funny how that happens, isn't it? Your dad was right!!
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Yes, Rachelle he sure was. Thank you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Don't Ms. Piddocks have a nose??????????? (I'm prob'ly not the first to ask you that.)
Great story. Well told.
I'm afraid that these days, 'you' would be labeled the bully and your dad would go to jail, or get sued.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Don't Ms. Piddocks have a nose??????????? (I'm prob'ly not the first to ask you that.)
Great story. Well told.
I'm afraid that these days, 'you' would be labeled the bully and your dad would go to jail, or get sued.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Yes, Wayne. You are so right. Today people are so sensitive you even look at them wrong and they have something to say. I was never the bully type, but the U.S. Army did teach me how to handle myself today. I don't have to worry about bullies today. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I wouldn't re-live my elementary school days for any amount of money. Bullying was so common place and often it was done by the teachers in their own way. You gave a great description of the way things happened. Your dad did things the right way in my opinion. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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I wouldn't re-live my elementary school days for any amount of money. Bullying was so common place and often it was done by the teachers in their own way. You gave a great description of the way things happened. Your dad did things the right way in my opinion. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much Marilyn. I really appreciate your review. And yes, you are so right. The teachers were more bullies than the kids were.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a very good story. Kids can he so cruel. I was a teacher for 18 years, I know. The teacher shouldn't be in thar position if she was going to treat students bad. Your story was well written. Great writing.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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What a very good story. Kids can he so cruel. I was a teacher for 18 years, I know. The teacher shouldn't be in thar position if she was going to treat students bad. Your story was well written. Great writing.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much Brenda. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I am sorry that you had to go through that situation with a teacher that seem to be against you and students who seem to be against you as well, but you had a wonderful father who taught you the very important lesson of not running away from a fight. You did well and I must say that somewhere along Schooling became something that was very important to you because I can tell by your writing that you are very proficient with the English language. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is very well written, and I am sorry that you had to go through that situation with a teacher that seem to be against you and students who seem to be against you as well, but you had a wonderful father who taught you the very important lesson of not running away from a fight. You did well and I must say that somewhere along Schooling became something that was very important to you because I can tell by your writing that you are very proficient with the English language. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much Patricia. I really appreciate your great review. Yes, I educated myself no matter how mean the teachers were.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This was a fascinating story that reminded me of my first school year.
Girls are bullies just as much as boys. A girl in an older class told me she was going to bring a knife to school and get me. I told my mother I didn't want to go to school and told her why. The next day, my mother went to school with me and talked to the principal. He walked with me to every classroom to identify the girl. She hadn't come to school that day. When she returned, she said nothing to me.
Your story was very well written, and included a powerful lesson learned. You never know what you can achieve until you try.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This was a fascinating story that reminded me of my first school year.
Girls are bullies just as much as boys. A girl in an older class told me she was going to bring a knife to school and get me. I told my mother I didn't want to go to school and told her why. The next day, my mother went to school with me and talked to the principal. He walked with me to every classroom to identify the girl. She hadn't come to school that day. When she returned, she said nothing to me.
Your story was very well written, and included a powerful lesson learned. You never know what you can achieve until you try.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, thank you so much LJbutterfly. I am sure there are many of us that endured the "Bullies" at school. I really appreciate your review!
Comment from Gunner Lil
You keep trying.
A three- foot ruler is called a yard stick.
What happened to kindergarten?
You should spend your money on a writing class rather than spending it on getting fake critiques.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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You keep trying.
A three- foot ruler is called a yard stick.
What happened to kindergarten?
You should spend your money on a writing class rather than spending it on getting fake critiques.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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You should shut your pie hole before someone rearranges your dental work pal! The U.S. Army taught me how to handle idiots like you!