Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Very cool imagery. I love to watch clouds. Have since I was a child. Your poem put a different face on an age old entertainment. Origami is a very unique and cool paper art. I enjoyed this. Gretchen

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024

Thanks so very much Gretchen!
Katiemae1977

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the Haiku Poetry Contest.

Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the 'origami satori.

The juxtaposition between the clouds and origami is very good.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024

Thanks so much Gypsy for reading and reviewing!

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

What a fun idea. Clouds crease like pieces of paper into shapes like origami that make for a beautiful sky. I've never heard of such a metaphor before for cloud shapes that join each other to form other shapes like origami pieces of paper.
Thanks for the idea.
Jesse


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 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024

Thanks so much Jesse for your lovely comments and review!
Katiemae1977

reply by Jesse James Doty on 20-Aug-2024

You're welcome, Katiemae.
Have a lovely day,
Jesse

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello KatieMae :)
I enjoyed reading your haiku. Nice use of alliteration and imagery.
I love to watch the clouds - they ARE fascinating.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra

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 Comment Written 20-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024

Hi Debra
Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review.
I love writing haiku!
Katiemae1977