His Song
A musical love story38 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
This sounds like a bittersweet love song in your well written poem. My husband has been very ill this past year and many of my poem have that ring to them. He is getting better but I felt a somber tone to this well written piece.
Well done. Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This sounds like a bittersweet love song in your well written poem. My husband has been very ill this past year and many of my poem have that ring to them. He is getting better but I felt a somber tone to this well written piece.
Well done. Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes, at the end it's somber but in every relationship, no matter how old the people are. One of them is going to die first normally anyway. so they are on the ride together until one of them dies
Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and that extra star. It is much appreciated.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written. I enjoyed very much reading it every wish you a very good day. I wish you a wonderful week. May God bless you and may you have a wonderful evening. Patricia.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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This is very well written. I enjoyed very much reading it every wish you a very good day. I wish you a wonderful week. May God bless you and may you have a wonderful evening. Patricia.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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May God bless you as well, Patricia
Thank you for the great review
Comment from Shanbreen
Love this musical love story. Pam, where do you come up with it. You have such wonderful imagination, so many wonderful songs to share.
Some memorable lines for me:
"Emotions sent; emotions caught,"
and, you're the tick but I'm the tock,
Thanks for sharing. I wish I could write poems like you.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Love this musical love story. Pam, where do you come up with it. You have such wonderful imagination, so many wonderful songs to share.
Some memorable lines for me:
"Emotions sent; emotions caught,"
and, you're the tick but I'm the tock,
Thanks for sharing. I wish I could write poems like you.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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But you already write poems like me, my friend you are very gifted. Your palms are so emotional.
Thank you for the wonderful comments and the extra star
The two lines you chose is your favorite were also my favorites. I remember being so happy when I thought of them.
Comment from Chip Whitley
This is such a touching piece that explores the depths of human emotion and connects the reader to a seemingly concrete setting that a reader could touch. I felt connected and entertained. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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This is such a touching piece that explores the depths of human emotion and connects the reader to a seemingly concrete setting that a reader could touch. I felt connected and entertained. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your heartfelt review and generous rating
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the way the music is a metaphor for true love. This poem was enjoyable to read. I really enjoyed this one. One of your best.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the way the music is a metaphor for true love. This poem was enjoyable to read. I really enjoyed this one. One of your best.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your enjoyable comments and your five star rating
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
This is a well rhymed and metered love poem/song. I like the description of the true love between them with the extended metaphor of music. It shows how much love can change a life.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the day.
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Hi Pam,
This is a well rhymed and metered love poem/song. I like the description of the true love between them with the extended metaphor of music. It shows how much love can change a life.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the day.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and excellent rating
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You are most kindly welcome, Pam.
Joan
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
There is definitely a musical rhythm to your words in this poem. The ending was sort of bitter-sweet like the ending of most love songs. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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There is definitely a musical rhythm to your words in this poem. The ending was sort of bitter-sweet like the ending of most love songs. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and excellent rating
Comment from Ulla
Hi Pam, I really loved this poem. It's bittersweet, of course, but it also shows that hope is always there even when great sorrow hits. I enjoyed this well written poem. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Hi Pam, I really loved this poem. It's bittersweet, of course, but it also shows that hope is always there even when great sorrow hits. I enjoyed this well written poem. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Well I think with any couple, one of them will die first. I did not indicate that he was young or she was young and could've been in old age.
Thank you for your wonderful comments and this extra star. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was wonderfully written. It flowed so well, and the rhyme scheme was excellently carried out. It also told a sweet story. Beautiful job!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This was wonderfully written. It flowed so well, and the rhyme scheme was excellently carried out. It also told a sweet story. Beautiful job!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for always encouraging me, for these wonderful comments and for the extra star. It is much appreciated.
Comment from forestport12
Not sure I understand the whole of the love story. It seemed like it needed more meat and depth to chew on it. I caught the part about how separation from each other works into this and I think understood the vehicle or analogy of how we our voice/our song lives on and others then hold our memory. Not sure if I caught this correctly. Just wished you could fuse more emotion, but with so few words, I respect and admire those who can do poetry with such restrictions.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Not sure I understand the whole of the love story. It seemed like it needed more meat and depth to chew on it. I caught the part about how separation from each other works into this and I think understood the vehicle or analogy of how we our voice/our song lives on and others then hold our memory. Not sure if I caught this correctly. Just wished you could fuse more emotion, but with so few words, I respect and admire those who can do poetry with such restrictions.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Are you a storyteller or novelist?
It's true that in poetry there's less room for verbosity
This is simply a love story and it's told in musical fashion. There's nothing more to it than that.
Thank you for your great comments and inquisitive nature