Don't Mess with Retirees
A older man takes a stroll back to his pond.29 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Good one. Guess those gals got out of the water fast. Plus the farmer got a delightful eye full. The bucket served two useful purposes here. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Good one. Guess those gals got out of the water fast. Plus the farmer got a delightful eye full. The bucket served two useful purposes here. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the review and comments. I certainly wouldn't swim with a gator but I would go skinny dipping either.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
Beth, This is a very cute and funny 80 Word Flash Fiction you have penned for the contest. I wonder what the girls when they heard the word gator? lol I would have somehow jumped out and ran however I looked! Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Beth, This is a very cute and funny 80 Word Flash Fiction you have penned for the contest. I wonder what the girls when they heard the word gator? lol I would have somehow jumped out and ran however I looked! Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Teri. I would be swimming with a gator but I wouldn't be skinny dipping either. lol I'm glad you like this. I appreciate you comments.
Beth
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lol you are so funny my friend! I am thankful you are my friend! I love you, but Jesus loves you so much more! Teri
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Oh, this is clever, and it made me smile. These very short stories are somewhat difficult for me, so I kind of leave them alone. Yet, you show here how to do it!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Oh, this is clever, and it made me smile. These very short stories are somewhat difficult for me, so I kind of leave them alone. Yet, you show here how to do it!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Verna. I glad you liked my little flash. I find them difficult too until I think of something that I might can work in a punch line at the end.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
You deserve the prize for this. You had me laughing out loud with this! Had I an extra star, you'd get it. Sorry I have no influence with the judges. A different kind of writing for you.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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You deserve the prize for this. You had me laughing out loud with this! Had I an extra star, you'd get it. Sorry I have no influence with the judges. A different kind of writing for you.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the great review. I'm glad it made you laugh
Beth
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Thanks for great writing.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
That's a good one, Beth! They can't get out and can't stay in. But he didn't really have a gator in there anyway, I guess:)) A lovely little flash that amused me. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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That's a good one, Beth! They can't get out and can't stay in. But he didn't really have a gator in there anyway, I guess:)) A lovely little flash that amused me. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I'm glad you found my flash amusing.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL In Texas there may actually be a gator in that pond. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It's adorable and very well written. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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LOL In Texas there may actually be a gator in that pond. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It's adorable and very well written. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you Barbara. There could be gators in Louisiana, Mississippi, Georgia and Florida. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
LOL awesome flash fiction with a full story in the 80 words and a twist/surprise ending that did not disappoint! Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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LOL awesome flash fiction with a full story in the 80 words and a twist/surprise ending that did not disappoint! Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Marilyn. I so glad you found it funny.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Oh, Beth, you are being very naughty today. Well, the man is really but yu put those words in his mouth. LOL Cute story and I laughed for sure. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Oh, Beth, you are being very naughty today. Well, the man is really but yu put those words in his mouth. LOL Cute story and I laughed for sure. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Carol, I appreciate your comments. It wasn't me being naughty. It was my character. He was the one that wanted to see the nude girls. lol
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, very funny, what a dilemma for the girls, and what a clever problem he created for those trespassing, albeit harmlessly, I love this.most piece as an entry in this 80 word flash fiction, well done Beth, good luck, a worthy entry, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Heh heh, very funny, what a dilemma for the girls, and what a clever problem he created for those trespassing, albeit harmlessly, I love this.most piece as an entry in this 80 word flash fiction, well done Beth, good luck, a worthy entry, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you Roy, I glad you found the humor here.
Beth
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Most welcome