The Dollar Store
A woman muses during a robbery at a dollar store38 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LoL. Funny poem. I like going to the dollar store, especially with my grand kids. It's annoying when they have items that cost more than the 99. Cents.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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LoL. Funny poem. I like going to the dollar store, especially with my grand kids. It's annoying when they have items that cost more than the 99. Cents.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wouds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your excellent comments and great review
Comment from Begin Again
One can always imagine what would go through their mind if caught up in such a situation. Would you focus on the robber or on your life and how things will be left if you don't make home? I'm sure all sorts of things would flash through mine. Great ob!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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One can always imagine what would go through their mind if caught up in such a situation. Would you focus on the robber or on your life and how things will be left if you don't make home? I'm sure all sorts of things would flash through mine. Great ob!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this wonderful review and sincere encouragement
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I began to think, if I were in that situation what would my thoughts be about? I think we have things we need to work out. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I began to think, if I were in that situation what would my thoughts be about? I think we have things we need to work out. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
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That's when i saw an angry man. & While i enjoyed my memory, (I)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for catching those little nits. I fixed them and thank you for the nice review.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I like your stuff you should have a web page or substack or medium to post your work. all three are easy to set up. Substack even does a podcast as does Spotify for free but you have to convert your work to an audio file Zamzar is a free app for that.
let me know by email at authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com if you need any help and or send me the links if you have a site so I can post it on my blog and I am always to help my fellow fan story writers with a guest posting on my blog the world according to cosmos. Check it out and get back to me
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you Jake I am interested. But am low tech
Thank you also for your review
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oh substack is easy to set up send me an email and I will show you how to do it and it is free
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How do I send you an email? I don't know your email address.
Mine is pamu2567@att.net
Thank you in advance
Comment from Neonewman
I loved her thoughts as this was going on. She fantasized about the nail guy, needed a healthy snack, and then turned to alcohol. This was a great story told in poetic form, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I loved her thoughts as this was going on. She fantasized about the nail guy, needed a healthy snack, and then turned to alcohol. This was a great story told in poetic form, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you Steve for always being so encouraging and for this nice review
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My pleasure.
Comment from Shanbreen
Pam, this is "fairly lighthearted" but it is the reality of things that have happened and can happen. I guess you are right when you state that when death stares at us one can have the feeling of guilt for something hidden, something that one would like to amend before it is all over.
The last verse was amusing. I am glad she had a chance to unburden her guilt.
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For sure sure it's been a scary tale.
It turned out towels were on sale.
My guilty mind began to bawl.
My husband needs to know it all.
Thanks, Pam. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Pam, this is "fairly lighthearted" but it is the reality of things that have happened and can happen. I guess you are right when you state that when death stares at us one can have the feeling of guilt for something hidden, something that one would like to amend before it is all over.
The last verse was amusing. I am glad she had a chance to unburden her guilt.
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For sure sure it's been a scary tale.
It turned out towels were on sale.
My guilty mind began to bawl.
My husband needs to know it all.
Thanks, Pam. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thanks my friend for your detailed and wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Caperton Tissot
Pretty frightening tale. I like how you intersperse your basic need for food and drink in the midst of a crisis. It adds a light moment along with thinking about the manicurist and his flailing arms, This would be good set to music. I find it a little too sing-song-y for a poem but set to a melody would be nice.
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Pretty frightening tale. I like how you intersperse your basic need for food and drink in the midst of a crisis. It adds a light moment along with thinking about the manicurist and his flailing arms, This would be good set to music. I find it a little too sing-song-y for a poem but set to a melody would be nice.
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hi caperton. So you're marking me down for what you consider a singsong beat? Thrn you'll mark me down on all my poems
Thank you for your review
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is a smoothly metered and well rhymed tongue and cheek poem that tells how we repent our sins when in situations that we may die. It also shows that secrets can come back to bite you. How much money did the robber think he could get at a dollar store?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hi
This is a smoothly metered and well rhymed tongue and cheek poem that tells how we repent our sins when in situations that we may die. It also shows that secrets can come back to bite you. How much money did the robber think he could get at a dollar store?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and great review
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You're welcome on both accounts, Pam.
Joan
Comment from Ulla
Hi Pam I really liked that we see the story unfolding through the thoughts of a woman who shouldn't really be when caught in a robbery. It all ended well, but guilt of cheating on her husband still lingers. I enjoyed this poem. Ulla, xcx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hi Pam I really liked that we see the story unfolding through the thoughts of a woman who shouldn't really be when caught in a robbery. It all ended well, but guilt of cheating on her husband still lingers. I enjoyed this poem. Ulla, xcx
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your lovely comments and a great review
Comment from Jacob1395
I think you did a brilliant job of showcasing the horror of this situation well but I also liked that kept it fairly lighthearted, particularly with your character thinking that she shouldn't have been really going to the store at all for what she was buying. An excellent piece Pam, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I think you did a brilliant job of showcasing the horror of this situation well but I also liked that kept it fairly lighthearted, particularly with your character thinking that she shouldn't have been really going to the store at all for what she was buying. An excellent piece Pam, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you Jacob for your wonderful comments and a great review
