Budding Feelings
Atom poem. Potlatch Club27 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Joan.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A good job with the form.
-I like the verse about the daisy.
-A very nice verse about the
lilac and faith.
-A good concluding verse ties
everything together with the
array of flowers, feelings expressed,
all about a bud.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Joan.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A good job with the form.
-I like the verse about the daisy.
-A very nice verse about the
lilac and faith.
-A good concluding verse ties
everything together with the
array of flowers, feelings expressed,
all about a bud.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thanks for the thorough review, Pam. The nice comments and all the stars are much appreciated.
Joan
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You are very welcome, Joan.
Comment from Chip Whitley
This looks to follow the proper formatting with the correct number of syllables. I like the word usage and placement on the page. It is easy to follow from top to bottom by simply starting left to right at the top.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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This looks to follow the proper formatting with the correct number of syllables. I like the word usage and placement on the page. It is easy to follow from top to bottom by simply starting left to right at the top.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thanks for reading and reviewing this, Chip.
Joan
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Joan
I use the read button and the top left when I review. I don't remember seeing your work for a long time and now I see two in the same day.
That's interesting about the flowers. I didn't know that Daisy meant happy. I knew about the roses and I love pansies, but I didn't know this particular detail about them.
It was very educational and I don't understand why you say it's 575 because it seems to me that it was other lines too, but maybe each stanza is Independent
It seems like this one was 57555. So only the first three lines were taken and were in the format of 575
So I'm not sure why you're calling at 5751 it's got two extra lines that are five each
But it's good nonetheless about flowers. I love flowers. I wish I could be a flower.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Hi, Joan
I use the read button and the top left when I review. I don't remember seeing your work for a long time and now I see two in the same day.
That's interesting about the flowers. I didn't know that Daisy meant happy. I knew about the roses and I love pansies, but I didn't know this particular detail about them.
It was very educational and I don't understand why you say it's 575 because it seems to me that it was other lines too, but maybe each stanza is Independent
It seems like this one was 57555. So only the first three lines were taken and were in the format of 575
So I'm not sure why you're calling at 5751 it's got two extra lines that are five each
But it's good nonetheless about flowers. I love flowers. I wish I could be a flower.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thanks for reading and commenting, Pam. Both are much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from Dawn Munro
I don't have any knowledge of this format, so all I can do is comment on the enjoyment reading your poem gives me. I love the topic, and your choice of artwork is sublime!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I don't have any knowledge of this format, so all I can do is comment on the enjoyment reading your poem gives me. I love the topic, and your choice of artwork is sublime!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thanks for the kind comments and all the stars. It is a new form for me too.
Joan
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My pleasure!
Comment from shelley kaye
love this!
a great way to to use flowers and their meanings...
great job with the flowers you chose (love daisies)
cool pic of the daisy, too
a suggestion i have is to maybe try a black background and either white or yellow font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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love this!
a great way to to use flowers and their meanings...
great job with the flowers you chose (love daisies)
cool pic of the daisy, too
a suggestion i have is to maybe try a black background and either white or yellow font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thanks for the nice review, Shelley. I will think about changing the background.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
I didn't know that the form required actual letter count. My goodness - that's much harder than a 5-7-5 syllabic poem! I like your theme of the meanings of flowers.
In your title: Buding Felings (Budding Feelings?)
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I didn't know that the form required actual letter count. My goodness - that's much harder than a 5-7-5 syllabic poem! I like your theme of the meanings of flowers.
In your title: Buding Felings (Budding Feelings?)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thanks for the encouraging words, Helen.
Joan
Comment from royowen
The letter count doesn't seem to agree with the notes Joan, especially with the last line of each stanza Joan, unless I'm confused, well dons through, apart from that it's fine, blessings Roy
Title : Building (felings) feelings?
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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The letter count doesn't seem to agree with the notes Joan, especially with the last line of each stanza Joan, unless I'm confused, well dons through, apart from that it's fine, blessings Roy
Title : Building (felings) feelings?
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thanks for the review, Roy.
Joan
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Welcome
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I made changes to make the letter count match the rules and corrected the title.
misspelling.
Joan
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Well done
