Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

The raw emotion of your poem is so powerful. I thought you paitned a picture of solitude and yearning for belonging so well. The word choices are excellent. This flows so well.

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 Comment Written 04-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024

Thanks so very much Michael for your lovely comments and review!

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

This is the second entry I've seen for the contest both about loneliness but from different angles

The other one talked about loneliness from a relationship point of view. A spouse left him and he is having trouble. He's very lonely.

In your case it's someone who's alone all the time regardless of any relationship, can't have any relationship. That is sadder. But both suffer. One might be able to repair himself I think I think in the poem there was reference to the time being served.

I feel really sorry for your character. You did a good job of showing how lonely he or she was. Somehow, I think it's a she, but I could be wrong

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 04-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024

Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!