War
A scene reenacted too many times.45 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These words hit home as we send our young men off to war and leave their sweethearts at home pining for their return, fine words Paul, much enjoyed, love Christine x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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These words hit home as we send our young men off to war and leave their sweethearts at home pining for their return, fine words Paul, much enjoyed, love Christine x
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Christine. Don't forget the young women who also go off to war.
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Of course x
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done, Paul. When men and women go off to fight "as the sounds of battle start" there is always great uncertainty and faith is the only thing that carries them through until the safe return of their loved one.
The rhymes were effective in bringing this piece right to life.
Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Very well done, Paul. When men and women go off to fight "as the sounds of battle start" there is always great uncertainty and faith is the only thing that carries them through until the safe return of their loved one.
The rhymes were effective in bringing this piece right to life.
Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Gloria. You are right about including women in this review.
Comment from Sugarray77
Very poignant Paul. As a military wife (hubby retired), I remember all too well the sentiment of your verse. A very good poem for this prompt. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Very poignant Paul. As a military wife (hubby retired), I remember all too well the sentiment of your verse. A very good poem for this prompt. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Melissa, and thank your husband for his service.
Comment from Ulla
So true, Paul, and now more true than ever. You've written a beautiful poem about one of the most difficult things that anyone have to do. To part with a loved one to fight a war yo may or not believe in. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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So true, Paul, and now more true than ever. You've written a beautiful poem about one of the most difficult things that anyone have to do. To part with a loved one to fight a war yo may or not believe in. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Ulla. Fighting in some foreign land is certainly different from fighting on your native soil.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It happens way too often that a soldier must leave loved ones behind, be it a spouse, lover, or parent. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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It happens way too often that a soldier must leave loved ones behind, be it a spouse, lover, or parent. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Barb. Leaving loved ones is always difficult - especially because of war.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Paul.
-You wrote a very good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-The opening lines establish the premise.
-Good descriptive detail shows why they must part.
-You capture the feelings involved when someone
has to go to war.
-A very good closing line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Paul.
-You wrote a very good poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-The opening lines establish the premise.
-Good descriptive detail shows why they must part.
-You capture the feelings involved when someone
has to go to war.
-A very good closing line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Pam. It's funny how long it takes to write a five line poem.
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You are welcome, Paul. I think it takes a while to write anything good unless you're really lucky.
Comment from Neonewman
Yes, way too often. This is a beautifully crafted five-line poem you have crafted for this contest. The artwork pairs well, and I wish you the best in the votes.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Yes, way too often. This is a beautifully crafted five-line poem you have crafted for this contest. The artwork pairs well, and I wish you the best in the votes.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Steve. It took quite awhile to write this short poem. Five lines is not a lot of space to get a point across.
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Correct, that's half the fun of the prompt. I enjoy them. My pleasure, Paul.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oy. Simple but oh-so alarming. The way public wars change private lives is nothing short of obscene. I've always maintained that only those who enact the call to arms should be the ones who head for the battlefield. To me, that's WAY more fair an arrangement.
Wonderfully done, Paul; stark - just like war, itself. Good luck to you in the 5-Line Poem contest.
xoxox
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Oy. Simple but oh-so alarming. The way public wars change private lives is nothing short of obscene. I've always maintained that only those who enact the call to arms should be the ones who head for the battlefield. To me, that's WAY more fair an arrangement.
Wonderfully done, Paul; stark - just like war, itself. Good luck to you in the 5-Line Poem contest.
xoxox
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Rachelle. You are so right. I've got a poem somewhere that talks about the difference between the soldier and the politician.
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That had to be a mighty long poem! There's nothing that they have between them that seems even remotely similar. I have no regard whatsoever for politicians, just contempt. Soldiers, though, they are the angels who walk among us.
Comment from QC Poet
With our additional notes It would appear by the photo included that a man is saying these five lines to his wife as he appears in a police type of uniform but these days women serve in both military and police occupations Good Luck in the five line contest with your entry
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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With our additional notes It would appear by the photo included that a man is saying these five lines to his wife as he appears in a police type of uniform but these days women serve in both military and police occupations Good Luck in the five line contest with your entry
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the review, QC. The poem is written to include both men and women. I couldn't find a picture to do the same.
Comment from Shanbreen
Yes, this is a scene reenacted many a times. We, humans, never seem to learn. The last line definitely packs the punch reflecting the fear and the possibility of loss). Most importantly the poem provides hope sustained by a prayer.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Yes, this is a scene reenacted many a times. We, humans, never seem to learn. The last line definitely packs the punch reflecting the fear and the possibility of loss). Most importantly the poem provides hope sustained by a prayer.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Shan. You would think that civilized man could resolve worldly problems in some other way.