Cry of a Refugee
The greatest movement of people in history is upon us.32 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a powerful and moving poem about the impact of war on families and the ever growing armies of refugees fleeing war all over the world and the uncertain future they face.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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a powerful and moving poem about the impact of war on families and the ever growing armies of refugees fleeing war all over the world and the uncertain future they face.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Jake,
Thanks for your review. A very sad topic but one that will not go away for quite some time. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Ulla
Absolutely, that is the big question, what to do? There's only so many we can take in an absorb. It's become a foe to the western world. It's tragic. Yes, what to do? Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Absolutely, that is the big question, what to do? There's only so many we can take in an absorb. It's become a foe to the western world. It's tragic. Yes, what to do? Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. As you say, it is tragic.
Take care and have a great day.Thanks for the good luck.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Shanbreen
This is such a heartbreaking true depiction of the state of refugees in your rhyming poem. I have often wondered what we can do. It is a sad state of affairs, but the number grows, some because of circumstances and others because of intentional creation of circumstances.
The problem is compounded by some who don't even know (or ignore) the refugee problem: "They look away as if I am a lie."
Your rhyming is good. Best for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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This is such a heartbreaking true depiction of the state of refugees in your rhyming poem. I have often wondered what we can do. It is a sad state of affairs, but the number grows, some because of circumstances and others because of intentional creation of circumstances.
The problem is compounded by some who don't even know (or ignore) the refugee problem: "They look away as if I am a lie."
Your rhyming is good. Best for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. A sad topic but it is one that is relevant and growing.
In any event, take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment from June Sargent
That is the question. What to do about human suffering caused by senseless wars. The human toll is not just about the dead, but also those struggling to live. Thank you for the reminder to be compassionate.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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That is the question. What to do about human suffering caused by senseless wars. The human toll is not just about the dead, but also those struggling to live. Thank you for the reminder to be compassionate.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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June,
Thanks so much for your review. There is no immediate solution to this issue. Compassion is at least something we can give.
Take care
Barry Penfold
Comment from patcelaw
Nicely rhymed poem about refugees. It moves along very well when it is read aloud and your presentation is good. May you have a very pleasant week. Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Nicely rhymed poem about refugees. It moves along very well when it is read aloud and your presentation is good. May you have a very pleasant week. Patricia
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Patricia,
Thanks for your review. Although a sad topic I am glad you enjoyed the read.
Take care and have a good day.
Regards,
Barry Penfold
Comment from QC Poet
Good rhyming lines that tell of the sad unsafe surroundings of refugees across many lands unfortunately this world seems to be unwelcoming of foreigners even in their own homeland areas depending on who controls them Thanks for Sharing this tragic reality
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Good rhyming lines that tell of the sad unsafe surroundings of refugees across many lands unfortunately this world seems to be unwelcoming of foreigners even in their own homeland areas depending on who controls them Thanks for Sharing this tragic reality
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. Yes, a very sad topic. I am feeling better that I wrote it. Let us hope there will be an end solution.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. This is a powerful poem bringing to light the damages of war upon the human race and hateful way humans treat each other these days. It has become a self-centered way of existence for many with a complete lack of empathy for the plight of the less fortunate. Such a sad way to live and one that I pray I will never succumb to. Nicely written. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. This is a powerful poem bringing to light the damages of war upon the human race and hateful way humans treat each other these days. It has become a self-centered way of existence for many with a complete lack of empathy for the plight of the less fortunate. Such a sad way to live and one that I pray I will never succumb to. Nicely written. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Marilyn,
Thanks so much for your review. A sad topic for sure. I am not sure there is a solution. Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very sad commentary on what is going on around the world, Barry.
Ukraine's Child
Oh, my dear child, why do you weep?
Do falling bombs keep you from sleep?
Why don't you go outside to play?
Are soldiers in your street today?
What do you see, my little child?
Are those dead bodies being piled?
Where are your folks? Are you alone?
I hear the blasts and siren's tone.
I see that you are on your knees
And asking God, "Dear Father, please,
Just stop this war, and if you would,
I promise, God, I will be good.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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A very sad commentary on what is going on around the world, Barry.
Ukraine's Child
Oh, my dear child, why do you weep?
Do falling bombs keep you from sleep?
Why don't you go outside to play?
Are soldiers in your street today?
What do you see, my little child?
Are those dead bodies being piled?
Where are your folks? Are you alone?
I hear the blasts and siren's tone.
I see that you are on your knees
And asking God, "Dear Father, please,
Just stop this war, and if you would,
I promise, God, I will be good.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Paul,
What a good poem- Ukraine's Child. Thanks for the review. Yes, a sad topic and I am not sure there is a solution. Topping the major wars going on at the moment would be a good start.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from royowen
I think the influx of refugees has always been a fillip for Australia, at least economically, because we have a culture of entitlement, we will always have trouble from within and without, this is a terrific poem, Barry. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I think the influx of refugees has always been a fillip for Australia, at least economically, because we have a culture of entitlement, we will always have trouble from within and without, this is a terrific poem, Barry. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Roy,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read, despite the sad topic. I am not sure there is a solution.
Regards
Barry
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Well done Barry
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
Your touching poem tells of the horrid lot of being a war refugee.
I watch the news and am saddened that war (on both sides) rues nothing but destruction.
I just have one suggestion: in the third stanza, instead of repeating the word "nice" two times, you could tell of the awful "price" one's pays as a refugee.
Great entry for the contest.
Good luck!
Cindy
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Author,
Your touching poem tells of the horrid lot of being a war refugee.
I watch the news and am saddened that war (on both sides) rues nothing but destruction.
I just have one suggestion: in the third stanza, instead of repeating the word "nice" two times, you could tell of the awful "price" one's pays as a refugee.
Great entry for the contest.
Good luck!
Cindy
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your review. Also, thanks for your suggestion. I will seriously consider such advice.Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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You?re welcome.
