Willing Hearts
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Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and was a joy to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good week and may God bless you as you continue to write. Patricia .
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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This is very well written and was a joy to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also wish you a very good week and may God bless you as you continue to write. Patricia .
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a sensuous, inviting, alluring chapter. Who knows where this could have progressed to? I am glad they finally did this. A sort of release of built up emotions. Well done. No spags.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Wow! What a sensuous, inviting, alluring chapter. Who knows where this could have progressed to? I am glad they finally did this. A sort of release of built up emotions. Well done. No spags.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well now, Barbara, you have left quite a cliff hanger of awakened passion here. I am glad she initiated it. I honestly thought it was going to be Noah who couldn't stand it and would succumb to his desires first. Nice surprise. Your romance scene was well done. Not corny or cliche. Very real. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Well now, Barbara, you have left quite a cliff hanger of awakened passion here. I am glad she initiated it. I honestly thought it was going to be Noah who couldn't stand it and would succumb to his desires first. Nice surprise. Your romance scene was well done. Not corny or cliche. Very real. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Barbara
I really appreciate the trouble you take for your readers. The cast of characters always helps and bringing us into the chapter also helps too
I know I miss some chapters to review. I either don't see them or just reviewing at the wrong time when they're not there
I'm interested to see where this relationship between Sami and Noah goes. But, also interesting is what's gonna happen with Big T.
I'm assuming that Noah and the team can keep her safe. But, only you know the answer to that. You're a fortuneteller.
I really enjoyed reading your story. And, I look forward to more.
Here. Maybe. I have A few more
" . I have few more things to discuss and don't want Sami hearing.""
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Hi, Barbara
I really appreciate the trouble you take for your readers. The cast of characters always helps and bringing us into the chapter also helps too
I know I miss some chapters to review. I either don't see them or just reviewing at the wrong time when they're not there
I'm interested to see where this relationship between Sami and Noah goes. But, also interesting is what's gonna happen with Big T.
I'm assuming that Noah and the team can keep her safe. But, only you know the answer to that. You're a fortuneteller.
I really enjoyed reading your story. And, I look forward to more.
Here. Maybe. I have A few more
" . I have few more things to discuss and don't want Sami hearing.""
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have added that missing word. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Ulla
No, I don't blame Noah being somewhat confused. He's only a man after all. I loved this chapter , Barbara, and I can't wait to be reading on. The story has a lot of potential. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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No, I don't blame Noah being somewhat confused. He's only a man after all. I loved this chapter , Barbara, and I can't wait to be reading on. The story has a lot of potential. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from estory
The speed with which Sami melts in Noah's arms after she expresses her wish to leave in the morning seems a bit unbelievable to me. It's a hot, steamy scene, the adjectives boil, but I don't know if people change course like that in real life. The opening dialogue seemed a bit awkward to me too. Noah seems a bit too resigned to Big T's interest in Sami. I still don't think this is proper police etiquette. You can set criminals up but you can't work with them. estory
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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The speed with which Sami melts in Noah's arms after she expresses her wish to leave in the morning seems a bit unbelievable to me. It's a hot, steamy scene, the adjectives boil, but I don't know if people change course like that in real life. The opening dialogue seemed a bit awkward to me too. Noah seems a bit too resigned to Big T's interest in Sami. I still don't think this is proper police etiquette. You can set criminals up but you can't work with them. estory
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Undercover agents do it all the time. They also work with drug dealer and buy drugs from them. I will check the opening dialogue. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This was a wonderful description of a searing kiss. However, for me, forgetting about the passage of sound through the air vent didn't work. It was such an important effect I would have expected the team to shut things down quicker, or Sami to go totally ballistic. kay
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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This was a wonderful description of a searing kiss. However, for me, forgetting about the passage of sound through the air vent didn't work. It was such an important effect I would have expected the team to shut things down quicker, or Sami to go totally ballistic. kay
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check into that area.
Comment from BethShelby
Sami is a very passionate woman. I think Noah has more restraint than she does. I'm thinking in 17 days of being held by these men her friend, Myra must have gone through a lot of abuse. Will she still be the same innocent girl she once was if she is ever rescued?
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Sami is a very passionate woman. I think Noah has more restraint than she does. I'm thinking in 17 days of being held by these men her friend, Myra must have gone through a lot of abuse. Will she still be the same innocent girl she once was if she is ever rescued?
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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No, Myra is not and it will come out later what she'd undergone. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Worthy of the six and then some, Barbara. You had me sizzling right along with Sami. It was done beautifully and definitely got the message across. Now how will they handle it? Sami already struggles and Noah continues to teeter between rules and his feelings for her. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Worthy of the six and then some, Barbara. You had me sizzling right along with Sami. It was done beautifully and definitely got the message across. Now how will they handle it? Sami already struggles and Noah continues to teeter between rules and his feelings for her. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.