Life, Death, Up, Down
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Comment from jmdg1954
Jim, it appears to me that you are able to write stories on so many topics. And write them extremely well.
You captured me from the first sentence straight to the end. Riveting!
Thank you for sharing this with us.
John
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Jim, it appears to me that you are able to write stories on so many topics. And write them extremely well.
You captured me from the first sentence straight to the end. Riveting!
Thank you for sharing this with us.
John
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much! I do pray daily for inspiration from The Lord.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your story. It is well written and very descriptive. I wish there would be no more war. I'm afraid our country is headed for another one. Great job on this story.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed reading your story. It is well written and very descriptive. I wish there would be no more war. I'm afraid our country is headed for another one. Great job on this story.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I appreciate your kindness. Unfortunately, even at this moment, we are heading towards WWIII.
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Do you really think we are?
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I believe sincerely that this country will face ruin if we turn our backs on Israel and now, with Russia sibling a few miles from our coasts and holing up in Havana, i think they are testing our president and the stage is being set for a world war unless God does not will it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
In just a few words, you painted a vivid war picture and story, filled with love, emotions, and regret. This is a story that tells us to cherish every moment we have with loved ones so there are no regrets when we are apart from them. This is written so the reader can identify with and feel the emotions of the protagonist.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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In just a few words, you painted a vivid war picture and story, filled with love, emotions, and regret. This is a story that tells us to cherish every moment we have with loved ones so there are no regrets when we are apart from them. This is written so the reader can identify with and feel the emotions of the protagonist.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I am so thankful for your very kind review!
Comment from GoWiSt
"There wasn't much of anything to collect from Oliver." Why not? Didn't he have a dogtag as well? Or was he just blown to unrecoverable bits?
"he returned with a bullet in his chest." Oh my, how tragic.
"I must've gotten it, too, but not as bad as Sarge" Had the speaker been shot also?
"Then I remembered my father, what I had done to him." I wonder what this was and how bad it was.
Sad, but interesting war short here.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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"There wasn't much of anything to collect from Oliver." Why not? Didn't he have a dogtag as well? Or was he just blown to unrecoverable bits?
"he returned with a bullet in his chest." Oh my, how tragic.
"I must've gotten it, too, but not as bad as Sarge" Had the speaker been shot also?
"Then I remembered my father, what I had done to him." I wonder what this was and how bad it was.
Sad, but interesting war short here.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much! Your words always humble and honor me.
Comment from pome lover
That whole scenario is so sad. And as you said, not worth the loss of lives.
I know your title is Daddy, but when you were talking about Sarge and his kids, I thought maybe your protagonist was going to redeem himself by helping sarge's family. But your ending is really powerful.
Katharine
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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That whole scenario is so sad. And as you said, not worth the loss of lives.
I know your title is Daddy, but when you were talking about Sarge and his kids, I thought maybe your protagonist was going to redeem himself by helping sarge's family. But your ending is really powerful.
Katharine
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you! I prefer open ended stories which allow the redder to imagine what will happen next.
Comment from royowen
What a sad story, there are all sorts of things that can be a weight that will pull us down into the pit, but God rescued me, He knew when the moment was the right moment, and you do too Jim, you display the gratitude of someone who doesn't deserve it like me. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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What a sad story, there are all sorts of things that can be a weight that will pull us down into the pit, but God rescued me, He knew when the moment was the right moment, and you do too Jim, you display the gratitude of someone who doesn't deserve it like me. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Anything I do is on borrowed time from The Lord. By right, I shouldn't be alive. But, I believe He saved me to write as best I could.
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Yep, you were born for good works Jim, Ephesians 2:10
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Yes. We all are God's workmanship. I'm thankful God opened my eyes to His service.
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Bless you
Comment from Mintybee
This story is an interesting emotional journey. The narrator isn't clear on all the plot points, as we jump in midway through the story, and end after some time of unconsciousness, but his emotional clarity and growth is intriguing.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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This story is an interesting emotional journey. The narrator isn't clear on all the plot points, as we jump in midway through the story, and end after some time of unconsciousness, but his emotional clarity and growth is intriguing.
Mintybee
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thank you. I often like to highlight a human situation without telling too much, so the reader can think it out for him/her self.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
Let's do a good job of grabbing my attention and holding it all the way to the end. The graphic fit very well you too it helps further the story. Best of luck overall
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Let's do a good job of grabbing my attention and holding it all the way to the end. The graphic fit very well you too it helps further the story. Best of luck overall
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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I appreciate your kind words very much.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, Jim, what an emotional story. A son, who had been through such a terrible experience, losing so much, in the end thinks of his own father and has the desire to see him again, to be with him.
Great post, my friend,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Wow, Jim, what an emotional story. A son, who had been through such a terrible experience, losing so much, in the end thinks of his own father and has the desire to see him again, to be with him.
Great post, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much, my second favorite Rhonda.
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Awww, my favorite Jim!
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Your words make me so content!
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Awwww
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Someday, I'll have to write something just for you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely told story. I just wish you hadn't killed the sarge. (smiley face here)
I used to have that song on a Jim Reeves album. I can hear Gene Autry singing it too.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Very nicely told story. I just wish you hadn't killed the sarge. (smiley face here)
I used to have that song on a Jim Reeves album. I can hear Gene Autry singing it too.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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I was going to use Gene Autry but I used this video because it made the lyrics clear to all.