Queen of River Denial
Vulnerability revealing pain in the past30 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I learned living a life of regret is self punishment enough is. A brilliant poem, this expresses emotions to the extreme the fig leaf is what Adam and Eve experienced that they had never experienced before, sin. They were always going to know that experience until they died, beautifully written, good luck, Esther blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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I learned living a life of regret is self punishment enough is. A brilliant poem, this expresses emotions to the extreme the fig leaf is what Adam and Eve experienced that they had never experienced before, sin. They were always going to know that experience until they died, beautifully written, good luck, Esther blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thanks Roy. I have been saved by Grace and am not in that place anymore but sharing it is bumpy none the less. Glad you take the time to read my offerings. Esther
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Yes I can imagine, I was in that same place.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is a powerful poem. It is hard to let others in. Your emotions are well expressed in your poem. I like your choice in the picture. It goes well.with your poem. It is well written. Great job.
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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This is a powerful poem. It is hard to let others in. Your emotions are well expressed in your poem. I like your choice in the picture. It goes well.with your poem. It is well written. Great job.
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thank you so much Brenda for your review. I am having a tough time with remembering things. Not there anymore, but triggers emotions. Esther
Comment from Sally Law
Don't be. I find that honesty with oneself is the best way to live. Only then can we be ourselves before others and have healthy relationships. I find your honesty refreshing. Thanks so much for the beautifully brave poem.
Sending you my best today as always, Esther dear, and my very best for the upcoming contest.
Sal Xoxo
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Don't be. I find that honesty with oneself is the best way to live. Only then can we be ourselves before others and have healthy relationships. I find your honesty refreshing. Thanks so much for the beautifully brave poem.
Sending you my best today as always, Esther dear, and my very best for the upcoming contest.
Sal Xoxo
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thanks ever so much Sally.
Comment from gansach
There is definitely a lot of emotion in this poem, perfect for the Emotions competition. It is hard to bare your soul to others, hoping they'll understand and not judge. It's rare to find people--friends, family or strangers--who will do just that. And heartbreaking when you've trusted and been betrayed. You've expressed this so well with your descriptive words, especially the comparison with Eve, which paints a vivid picture. Excellent effort!
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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There is definitely a lot of emotion in this poem, perfect for the Emotions competition. It is hard to bare your soul to others, hoping they'll understand and not judge. It's rare to find people--friends, family or strangers--who will do just that. And heartbreaking when you've trusted and been betrayed. You've expressed this so well with your descriptive words, especially the comparison with Eve, which paints a vivid picture. Excellent effort!
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thanks so much. I was feeling especially overwhelmed when I wrote the poem and it bubbled out of no where. Esther
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Ester,
Every time we write things, whether they are obviously about us or not, we are putting a little bit of ourselves into them. It leaves us exposed. If anyone is judging you, then then need to remember what Jesus said to do with stones people wanted to throw at the adulteress woman, and I'm pretty sure no one on this site is without sin, least of all me. You're a good and honest person and that's refreshing. I love your openness, but it probably does make you feel exposed. Good reference to Eve and the fig leaves.
Hugs,
Rhonda
By the way, your poem is very well written!!
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Hi Ester,
Every time we write things, whether they are obviously about us or not, we are putting a little bit of ourselves into them. It leaves us exposed. If anyone is judging you, then then need to remember what Jesus said to do with stones people wanted to throw at the adulteress woman, and I'm pretty sure no one on this site is without sin, least of all me. You're a good and honest person and that's refreshing. I love your openness, but it probably does make you feel exposed. Good reference to Eve and the fig leaves.
Hugs,
Rhonda
By the way, your poem is very well written!!
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thanks so much Rhonda. I have been given forgiveness and grace, moved on long ago but revisiting the past triggers old shame. As one pastor said, we don't need to "dig up the dead man".
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Thanks so much Rhonda. I have been given forgiveness and grace, moved on long ago but revisiting the past triggers old shame. As one pastor said, we don't need to "dig up the dead man".
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Lol, I'll have to remember that quote. I have some old bones in my past as well.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's never easy to spill your guts without putting your own spin on the happenings, but the difference between and good writer, and a great one is, complete honesty. It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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It's never easy to spill your guts without putting your own spin on the happenings, but the difference between and good writer, and a great one is, complete honesty. It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Mark Jackson
This poem captures a profound sense of vulnerability and the fear of judgment that often accompanies revealing one's true self. I liked the title but liked the way you had added the second 'of' to the final line: The Queen of the River of Denial.
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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This poem captures a profound sense of vulnerability and the fear of judgment that often accompanies revealing one's true self. I liked the title but liked the way you had added the second 'of' to the final line: The Queen of the River of Denial.
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Thanks Mark. I am taking an emotional rest for a bit from my story. Need to regroup. Naked souls need to stay in the shadows and find fig leaves.
Comment from Begin Again
Not one person on this site or anywhere else can say they have lived a perfect life. That's what makes us human. We make mistakes and hopefully we learn from them. Sometimes it takes more than one time, but that's life. Never be ashamed of who you were....instead be proud of who you became and what you learned. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Not one person on this site or anywhere else can say they have lived a perfect life. That's what makes us human. We make mistakes and hopefully we learn from them. Sometimes it takes more than one time, but that's life. Never be ashamed of who you were....instead be proud of who you became and what you learned. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Hugs back. I need to write happy stuff for a bit. I have not gotten to the good times in my writing yet but my sweetheart Gary has been a delight. I don't live in chaos anymore.
Comment from jim vecchio
I appreciate your candid tales of yourself. There are many things I'm just too ashamed to revel. And your writing always encourages me to elevate mine. Just letting you know I care!
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I appreciate your candid tales of yourself. There are many things I'm just too ashamed to revel. And your writing always encourages me to elevate mine. Just letting you know I care!
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Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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I appreciate knowing that. It occurred to me I need to take a break for a bit.
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I won't bug you but remember to keep on writing whenever possible.
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I will. And please, do bug me. Just knowing someone is waiting to read what I write gives me inspiration,
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I always look forward to anything you write.
Comment from jlsavell
Esther,
It so happens free verse is my all time favorite type of poetry.
To me, it gives the BBC author such freedom to develop a work free from the constraints of perfect form.
It's the perfect catalyst for cathartic expression and you have demonstrated its value with this exceptional poem.
Transparency and humble introspection are the hallmarks of a great, resilient, and empathetic human being.
Yes, we are all imperfect and our journey through life does not come with an instruction manual which tells you how to fit the godzillion pieces together and troubleshoot any issues.
All too often people do use the imperfect excuse to not take responsibility for their life's choice.
This is not so with the hallmark of humble beings.
My dear late and wise Grandmother would always tell me
Jimi, imperfect is not excuse, but rather it is an opportunity to do the right thing. To rise above the uncomfortable, admit our mistakes and strive to amend them regardless of the cost to you. This is what moves us from the animal kingdom to be a true human. Thus is one who honors Christ ( if this is their religion) and understands as well as mimics his wise counsel.
Impressive work. You are a great writer.
Jimi
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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Esther,
It so happens free verse is my all time favorite type of poetry.
To me, it gives the BBC author such freedom to develop a work free from the constraints of perfect form.
It's the perfect catalyst for cathartic expression and you have demonstrated its value with this exceptional poem.
Transparency and humble introspection are the hallmarks of a great, resilient, and empathetic human being.
Yes, we are all imperfect and our journey through life does not come with an instruction manual which tells you how to fit the godzillion pieces together and troubleshoot any issues.
All too often people do use the imperfect excuse to not take responsibility for their life's choice.
This is not so with the hallmark of humble beings.
My dear late and wise Grandmother would always tell me
Jimi, imperfect is not excuse, but rather it is an opportunity to do the right thing. To rise above the uncomfortable, admit our mistakes and strive to amend them regardless of the cost to you. This is what moves us from the animal kingdom to be a true human. Thus is one who honors Christ ( if this is their religion) and understands as well as mimics his wise counsel.
Impressive work. You are a great writer.
Jimi
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 07-May-2024
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That is the very best review I have ever received. I have been writing my story and suddenly just thought enough. Maybe too much. I saw the contest and wrote the poem. I have no clue about how to write poems. Esther