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Comment from gansach
This is a lovely example of a Wabi-Sabi poem. I have always liked the philosophy of wabi-sabi, the beauty of imperfection--and the practice of repairing broken objects with gold to accent the beauty in the flaws. Your broken oak becomes a beautiful natural bridge and the artwork illustrates it perfectly. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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This is a lovely example of a Wabi-Sabi poem. I have always liked the philosophy of wabi-sabi, the beauty of imperfection--and the practice of repairing broken objects with gold to accent the beauty in the flaws. Your broken oak becomes a beautiful natural bridge and the artwork illustrates it perfectly. Wonderful!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Crossing, presented with a 4-5-4 formatting, has the proper set up and shows nature creating a path between land separated by a river of division. Nice.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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This haiku, Crossing, presented with a 4-5-4 formatting, has the proper set up and shows nature creating a path between land separated by a river of division. Nice.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Bill!
Comment from royowen
I think there's nothing better than when God describes as sifting gold among the dust, rough diamonds that have not been cut, prepared for the master to bring the value to a broken vessel, beautifully written Jessica, , blessings Roy
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I think there's nothing better than when God describes as sifting gold among the dust, rough diamonds that have not been cut, prepared for the master to bring the value to a broken vessel, beautifully written Jessica, , blessings Roy
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Roy! Xoxo
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Comment from lyenochka
It's a "fallen bridge" or a "bridge because of a fall." It would be good if we could be bridges for others after we fall. Maybe that's why we leave behind poems.
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It's a "fallen bridge" or a "bridge because of a fall." It would be good if we could be bridges for others after we fall. Maybe that's why we leave behind poems.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Helen! Xo
Comment from isabelteeth
I absolutely adore this. It's so beautiful. You have a great sense of wording. The imagery you create is beautiful. You do so much with so little. I've seen so many unfortunate haiku, but yours is awesome and emotional. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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I absolutely adore this. It's so beautiful. You have a great sense of wording. The imagery you create is beautiful. You do so much with so little. I've seen so many unfortunate haiku, but yours is awesome and emotional. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Thank you, that truly means so much to me!! Xoxo
Comment from kahpot
I am reading your poem then reading the rules for the prompt, and found that the broken is/has become useful, I was getting confused with
"Repaired with gold" (in the notes) so I just went back and read your words for what they are, how very clever, hard sometimes to give a six for short works, but not this time, very well written, (broken can still be useful) love it****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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I am reading your poem then reading the rules for the prompt, and found that the broken is/has become useful, I was getting confused with
"Repaired with gold" (in the notes) so I just went back and read your words for what they are, how very clever, hard sometimes to give a six for short works, but not this time, very well written, (broken can still be useful) love it****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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This means the world, thank you so much!!
Xoxo
Jess