Girl Talk
Half a Dialogue contest entry27 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
I love the reveal at the end up until that I felt like I was eavesdropping and wanted to stop. I was reading in the hope of a joke and you came good in the end. A great entry that has a good chance of winning. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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I love the reveal at the end up until that I felt like I was eavesdropping and wanted to stop. I was reading in the hope of a joke and you came good in the end. A great entry that has a good chance of winning. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Hahah awesome, thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
i am sure this qualifies to meet the criteria, but it is dizzying to me, not your story but why someone would create a challenge of a one-way dialogue. Still, I can see how the speaker speaks in describing herself - vividly.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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i am sure this qualifies to meet the criteria, but it is dizzying to me, not your story but why someone would create a challenge of a one-way dialogue. Still, I can see how the speaker speaks in describing herself - vividly.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from Kelly Louisa Balliu
I enjoyed this entry, in that the person at the other end of the conversation clearly seems to be on the same wavelength as the narrator. This is revealed by the colloquial language used and the discussion of dating and girlie shopping trips together, yet on the other hand, the issues with new technology, the hype surrounding the neighbour's cat and the words 'your daughter' reveal the generation gap between the two.
Despite this gap, the 'half'conversation flows beautifully on the narrator's part and I don't know about other readers, but I could imagine the 'invisible' person's expression to be alternating between confusion, amusement and coyness, as the conversation continues. When we discover that it is the narrator's grandmother on the other end, this gives us the insight into the beauty of the relationship between child and grandparent, one that can surpass that of the relationship between child and parent and sadly, one that often does not last long enough. That is why this little snippet strikes gold.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed this entry, in that the person at the other end of the conversation clearly seems to be on the same wavelength as the narrator. This is revealed by the colloquial language used and the discussion of dating and girlie shopping trips together, yet on the other hand, the issues with new technology, the hype surrounding the neighbour's cat and the words 'your daughter' reveal the generation gap between the two.
Despite this gap, the 'half'conversation flows beautifully on the narrator's part and I don't know about other readers, but I could imagine the 'invisible' person's expression to be alternating between confusion, amusement and coyness, as the conversation continues. When we discover that it is the narrator's grandmother on the other end, this gives us the insight into the beauty of the relationship between child and grandparent, one that can surpass that of the relationship between child and parent and sadly, one that often does not last long enough. That is why this little snippet strikes gold.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
Comment from jmdg1954
I just gave away my last six star rating, otherwise I would have given you one.
This one sided dialogue entry was fantastic. It had my mind bouncing here, there and everywhere. And then came the final line.
Perfect!
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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I just gave away my last six star rating, otherwise I would have given you one.
This one sided dialogue entry was fantastic. It had my mind bouncing here, there and everywhere. And then came the final line.
Perfect!
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, John! Xoxo
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this dialogue only competition, this is a thoughtful and witty work, it should pretty well in this fabulous contest, a really good entry, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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This is an excellent entry in this dialogue only competition, this is a thoughtful and witty work, it should pretty well in this fabulous contest, a really good entry, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
Comment from isabelteeth
Absolutely adorable. This is really really sweet. Makes me happy. Womanhood really doesn't ever end if you don't want it to. One of those poems that makes you read it twice and just keeps getting better.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Absolutely adorable. This is really really sweet. Makes me happy. Womanhood really doesn't ever end if you don't want it to. One of those poems that makes you read it twice and just keeps getting better.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
Comment from Julie Helms
Haha! This is a totally typical conversation until you get to that zinger in the last line! What a fun grandma!
Best of luck in the contest.
Julie
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Haha! This is a totally typical conversation until you get to that zinger in the last line! What a fun grandma!
Best of luck in the contest.
Julie
:-)
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Julie! Such a fun contest! Xoxo
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Congratulations on the win!
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