High Tech Intruder
Caught off guard (Fictional)38 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I had to smile. Although it's fiction it is realistic fiction because it could happen and probably has happened to somebody. I loved it.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I had to smile. Although it's fiction it is realistic fiction because it could happen and probably has happened to somebody. I loved it.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hey Barb, thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
Comment from jim vecchio
Congratulations on your expert creative talent at another poetic form! A very humorous piece and so well done, the meter and rhyme never seemed contrived. Thank you for this example of a form which is difficult to master.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Congratulations on your expert creative talent at another poetic form! A very humorous piece and so well done, the meter and rhyme never seemed contrived. Thank you for this example of a form which is difficult to master.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hi there Jim, thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
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As the King of Typos, Terrible Meter and Hohum Rhymes, I bow to your greatness!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Well that looks impressive especially to someone like me who thinks meter stands for the thing you put quarters into when you park your car. Cute poem too. thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Well that looks impressive especially to someone like me who thinks meter stands for the thing you put quarters into when you park your car. Cute poem too. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Marilyn, you are so darn cute! I love your complete honesty. Yes, you know me well enough to know I have to stay on meter, but I love different kinds of writings who do different kinds of formats. And I do love your ability to do zany posts. I have to get back your way, but have been so busy. Also I was wondering when your birthday is, my neighbor to the east. I am from MN and we love our fun Packers/Vikings rivalry. It is a lot of fun. Any chance to share your birthday with me??
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My birthday is January 26, 19 dflkjfoeortiwfmdkdgndgd oh no! weather problems! dfdfgetotigdlgkdglnoiobuo
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Hahahaha!! We are definitely getting the rain this morning so I can see how that could block out the last part of 19. Actually I have two milestones this year. So I can say that I was born in 54, as we are going to be married 50 years in a few weeks and I am turning 70 in Oct. I keep thinking if I say it out loud I will quit writing about how fast time has gone. LOL... thanks for the date. You are on my calendar and will write for you next year.
Comment from Mark Jackson
Great fun, the style and the content work together here to build a narrative that is suspenseful building to the final release as we all laugh as we have all done similar things to scare and confuse.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Great fun, the style and the content work together here to build a narrative that is suspenseful building to the final release as we all laugh as we have all done similar things to scare and confuse.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hey Mark, thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Terry Broxson
Really? A Crescendo poem? I am getting a little suspicious that these poetry clubs are sitting around drinking wine and up coming up with new forms of poetry just to confuse the masses. I do have to compliment you on the fine job you doing. Keep up the good work. Terry.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Really? A Crescendo poem? I am getting a little suspicious that these poetry clubs are sitting around drinking wine and up coming up with new forms of poetry just to confuse the masses. I do have to compliment you on the fine job you doing. Keep up the good work. Terry.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hey you! You are such a jokester! Now you are confusing my birthday poems with the club ones. But from a guy who drinks the bourbon, why would we expect him to know the difference. Ouch!! Oh, did that smarts?? LOL
Thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
Comment from GWHARGIS
Bwahaha. That was funny. You never know when something of your own creation will convince you you are the victim of some sinister action. I had a teacher in college who was convinced some crazy person was right outside of their window just tapping on it. She lost countless nights of sleep only to find out it was bugs bumping into the protective screen due to the lights inside her house. This was funny, Debi. We have definitely all been there. Gretchen
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Bwahaha. That was funny. You never know when something of your own creation will convince you you are the victim of some sinister action. I had a teacher in college who was convinced some crazy person was right outside of their window just tapping on it. She lost countless nights of sleep only to find out it was bugs bumping into the protective screen due to the lights inside her house. This was funny, Debi. We have definitely all been there. Gretchen
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hahaha, Gretchen, I love your story better. And thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Sally Law
Wow! I really like this form. It has a melodic flow to it. Beautifully crafted and presented, my dear. I'm glad to know rhyming or free verse is acceptable. (Wink, wink....)
I heard something too but realized it was Jackson, snoring. Hahaha!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Debi, and best wishes for the poetry challenge.
Love,
BBB XOs
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Wow! I really like this form. It has a melodic flow to it. Beautifully crafted and presented, my dear. I'm glad to know rhyming or free verse is acceptable. (Wink, wink....)
I heard something too but realized it was Jackson, snoring. Hahaha!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Debi, and best wishes for the poetry challenge.
Love,
BBB XOs
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Ooooh, I get it now!! It wasn't my poem that made Jack snore, it was what you heard. Duh!! Hey, like I've told you, she is still a blonde!! LOL
So thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Barry Penfold
A clever and entertaining write. Thanks for the notes. I have again learnt something. The image is spot on, and the rhyming is good. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Cheers,
Barry
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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A clever and entertaining write. Thanks for the notes. I have again learnt something. The image is spot on, and the rhyming is good. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Cheers,
Barry
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Awe, there's my wine writing, drinking friend. As I sit here on a Friday evening, with my glass of wine, I will toast you and say thank you for the awesome review and comments. Speaking of, I hope you have been reading all of yours as you have had a lot of nice things said. Thanks again, my dear friend. It is good to see you again and hope you had the best birthday ever.
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Thanks Debbi. It certainly was a great birthday. Celebrations still going. Nothing like a birthday that extends to more celebration. Cheers
Comment from jmdg1954
Dang, Sis! Is there anything you can't write? Upping each consecutive line by one syllable and telling a story that makes sense at the same time, impressed the britches off of me! Now I got to find them before I leave the room.
Seriously, I'm impressed. Excellent post to the challenge of creating a crescendo poem.
Enjoy your Friday!
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Dang, Sis! Is there anything you can't write? Upping each consecutive line by one syllable and telling a story that makes sense at the same time, impressed the britches off of me! Now I got to find them before I leave the room.
Seriously, I'm impressed. Excellent post to the challenge of creating a crescendo poem.
Enjoy your Friday!
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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And I thank you, kind sir!! Wow, I didn't expect to see sixes for something that I sang out of tune for. Haha! Even Gypsy gave me a six.
It truly was a hard one so I do appreciate it more than I can say. Thank you so very much, my dear little brother. What would I do without you?? I would never want to know. Honest!!, thanks John!! You're the Best!!
Comment from gansach
This is a very good Crescendo poem. You are correct that this type of poem is difficult to do adding one syllable at a time per line and keeping it flowing and making sense. Congratulations on your effort, you made it work. Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This is a very good Crescendo poem. You are correct that this type of poem is difficult to do adding one syllable at a time per line and keeping it flowing and making sense. Congratulations on your effort, you made it work. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hi there gansach, it has been getting so good to know you lately. Do you have a first name I could use? Only if you don't' mind. And I see that your birthday is August 5th. My grandson is the same day, and if you would like a birthday poem you can let me know before then, ok?
I noticed you are a neighbor to me in Wisconsin. I love my Wisconsin friends because we are take the packers/vikings rivalry very serious. LOL... NOT
So thanks so much for your kind words for the poem as it was a little challenging to keep some kind of meter going. I appreciate it so much, my awesome friend. Love, Debi
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Hi Debi--my first name is Gail. I've been enjoying getting to know all the Fanstory community & their talents. And it's fun finding new neighbors, too! Best wishes!