Making Friends With Grief
It gets better.30 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Wow - it takes time and reflection to arrive in this place of peace, having experienced the pain and sorrow of grief - an interesting title to engage the reader.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Wow - it takes time and reflection to arrive in this place of peace, having experienced the pain and sorrow of grief - an interesting title to engage the reader.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Zanya.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You are right. It does get better. The poem It and Grief as well, both get better from the start where it is all-encompassing and it takes you over when you least expect it to and it delivers a punch to the gut. The ending shows that life gets better than we ever possibly could imagine it could and so it goes on and on.
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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You are right. It does get better. The poem It and Grief as well, both get better from the start where it is all-encompassing and it takes you over when you least expect it to and it delivers a punch to the gut. The ending shows that life gets better than we ever possibly could imagine it could and so it goes on and on.
Jesse
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Jesse.
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You're welcome, Shirley.
Comment from GoWiSt
Good personification in the title.
Very nice scene in that complementary pixcture art choice.
Wait...if this is a poem, like it looks it is, then what's it doing in the 'prose' section of the listed works?
Nice reading flow and rhymes.
Is this a poem of cping with the loss of a loved one? So the beloved lost one still is--'you are'--in the heart of the speaker?
Nice emotional poem. Good luck in yhe contest!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Good personification in the title.
Very nice scene in that complementary pixcture art choice.
Wait...if this is a poem, like it looks it is, then what's it doing in the 'prose' section of the listed works?
Nice reading flow and rhymes.
Is this a poem of cping with the loss of a loved one? So the beloved lost one still is--'you are'--in the heart of the speaker?
Nice emotional poem. Good luck in yhe contest!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Hi,
Thank you for your review. I don't know how/why it ended up in 'prose'. Having gone back into edit I can't find a 'poetry' choice there.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem is heartfelt, emotional and inspiring. There is a gentle, calming feeling of love in every word. It encourages the reader to be vigilant in recognizing the beauty of the signs of a deceased loved one's nearness. Your words are well chosen and your artwork pairs perfectly.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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This poem is heartfelt, emotional and inspiring. There is a gentle, calming feeling of love in every word. It encourages the reader to be vigilant in recognizing the beauty of the signs of a deceased loved one's nearness. Your words are well chosen and your artwork pairs perfectly.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your words.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You certainly captured a ton of emotion with a few words. I was surprised to see this listed as prose when it is entered in poetry. Go figure. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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You certainly captured a ton of emotion with a few words. I was surprised to see this listed as prose when it is entered in poetry. Go figure. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Hi. Thanks. Where is it listed as prose?
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I was reading stories up for review and came across your story under recognized.
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OK, thank you.
Comment from karenina
I am a new but enthusiastic fan of yours! I enjoy free verse, particularly when it centers upon a common human experience. Each of us will read and draw from this what we need... I am comforted that I have not "lost" anyone who has passed. We are merely awaiting our reunion!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I am a new but enthusiastic fan of yours! I enjoy free verse, particularly when it centers upon a common human experience. Each of us will read and draw from this what we need... I am comforted that I have not "lost" anyone who has passed. We are merely awaiting our reunion!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Karenina x
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My pleasure.
Comment from jessizero
This is a beautiful poem about what is and not what has ceased to be. I also loved your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This is a beautiful poem about what is and not what has ceased to be. I also loved your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Jessi.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very pleasing and moving verse, Shirley! I love the structure you give it and the clearly expressed imagery. The only slightest niggle would be that so many lines begin with 'the,' turning it into a bit of a list (which would have worked if slightly shorter). If you could have allowed some of the imagery to flow into the next line (with an enjambment or two), it would have enhanced the read even more. But what can I say? I'm only nit-picking:) Take care Debbie. PS 'The shimmer 'neath a river's swirl' - superb
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This is a very pleasing and moving verse, Shirley! I love the structure you give it and the clearly expressed imagery. The only slightest niggle would be that so many lines begin with 'the,' turning it into a bit of a list (which would have worked if slightly shorter). If you could have allowed some of the imagery to flow into the next line (with an enjambment or two), it would have enhanced the read even more. But what can I say? I'm only nit-picking:) Take care Debbie. PS 'The shimmer 'neath a river's swirl' - superb
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you so much and please, please know I always want honest crits as we can't grow and learn otherwise, so my hearty thanks.
I did think long and hard about this because I know what you mean about the repetition and I was taking a chance. I think I made a mistake in centralising it for one thing. It didn't help. Fixed. I also considered without the 'thes' but that wasn't right, and yes, ideally it could have been shorter, but I'm a greedy poet and wanted to keep all the lines haha. It's when read slow, so I think I'll issue a set of instructions with it :) :) I know I'm on shaky ground, but I'm going to take my chances with it I think. Thank again. You can always be straight with me. I value it xx
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That should be reads ok (or better) slow.
PS. The funny thing is, mu late hubby was a narcissist. I was glad to see the back of him!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, indeed, I love this free form poem about rediscovering that you are most loved, and that you needed not worry, He is there all the time, this is a wonderful poem dear Shirley Ann, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Oh yes, indeed, I love this free form poem about rediscovering that you are most loved, and that you needed not worry, He is there all the time, this is a wonderful poem dear Shirley Ann, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy.
Comment from WORDSOFTHEHEART
I love this poem. I feel the love and the loss in your beautiful and very visual evoking poem. It flows from line to line pulling you more and more into the person you loved and lost. You keep that person and love with you every day. From sunrise to sunset in all you see and do. Beautiful way to remember and cherish.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I love this poem. I feel the love and the loss in your beautiful and very visual evoking poem. It flows from line to line pulling you more and more into the person you loved and lost. You keep that person and love with you every day. From sunrise to sunset in all you see and do. Beautiful way to remember and cherish.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your wonderful words and exceptional rating. It's very much appreciated.