Willing Hearts
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Comment from royowen
I think Sami is just starting to get a handle on her thoughts and feelings concerning Noah, at least he's showing consistency and integrity in his maleness, which most women can live with men, I think women need to feel safe with their men, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : and ended when his (meeting) hers. Met?
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I think Sami is just starting to get a handle on her thoughts and feelings concerning Noah, at least he's showing consistency and integrity in his maleness, which most women can live with men, I think women need to feel safe with their men, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : and ended when his (meeting) hers. Met?
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you for pointing out my mistake. I have made the correction and appreciate the help.
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Well done
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I was a bit distracted by that delicious looking muffin but then enjoyed another excellent read. An awkward encounter with Baldwin and some practicalities in the grocery department before Noah questions Sami about her exercise regime which is pretty impressive. Life in the safe house is being managed while the criminal investigation continues with all the necessary caution.
Suggestion: His eyes started at her feet and ended (with?) his meeting hers.
And in your notes: I couldn't (find?) what I wanted..
Well done! I like the introduction of a more senior member of staff to emphasise the seriousness of the case.
Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I was a bit distracted by that delicious looking muffin but then enjoyed another excellent read. An awkward encounter with Baldwin and some practicalities in the grocery department before Noah questions Sami about her exercise regime which is pretty impressive. Life in the safe house is being managed while the criminal investigation continues with all the necessary caution.
Suggestion: His eyes started at her feet and ended (with?) his meeting hers.
And in your notes: I couldn't (find?) what I wanted..
Well done! I like the introduction of a more senior member of staff to emphasise the seriousness of the case.
Take care Debbie
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you for pointing out my mistake. I have made the correction and appreciate the help.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written chapter in your book and I enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well. Your sentence structure in your paragraph is very good. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and may you have a wonderful day. Patricia .
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This is a very well written chapter in your book and I enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well. Your sentence structure in your paragraph is very good. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and may you have a wonderful day. Patricia .
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you for pointing out my mistake. I have made the correction and appreciate the help.
Comment from jim vecchio
I envy you. You always manage to post an interesting new chapter tht furthers the action and leaves me wanting for more. I still have to do my fourth chapter. I keep letting other "projects" get in the way. Maybe this week, after my daughter leaves.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I envy you. You always manage to post an interesting new chapter tht furthers the action and leaves me wanting for more. I still have to do my fourth chapter. I keep letting other "projects" get in the way. Maybe this week, after my daughter leaves.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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LOl Get going on chapter 4. Thank you for the kind review.
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I hope I have 6 stars when it comes out. Don't think I have any more. Everything was so good!
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I won't post again, until next Sunday.
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FAN-tastic!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, It's well written and I do like the story, but there's something about Sami that doesn't sits well with me. She comes across far too timid. It's a bit unnatural. Also try to use the 'widening of the eyes' a bit less often. Just a suggestion. All best, Ulla xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi Barbara, It's well written and I do like the story, but there's something about Sami that doesn't sits well with me. She comes across far too timid. It's a bit unnatural. Also try to use the 'widening of the eyes' a bit less often. Just a suggestion. All best, Ulla xx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the suggestion. I will take a look at it.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great development between the two lead characters. The boss seemed like a pencil-pusher so if that was what you were going for, you nailed it.
Suggestions:
She hesitated, before she continued, "I'll figure out."
(Missing a word)
He glanced at Jasper. "Let's take out that dog."
(Seems out of order, like he wants to eliminate ate the dog. Ha! )
Great read.
D
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Great development between the two lead characters. The boss seemed like a pencil-pusher so if that was what you were going for, you nailed it.
Suggestions:
She hesitated, before she continued, "I'll figure out."
(Missing a word)
He glanced at Jasper. "Let's take out that dog."
(Seems out of order, like he wants to eliminate ate the dog. Ha! )
Great read.
D
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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LOl Your last suggestion is funny. You're right, but the adverb needs to be close to the verb, hmm, I need a rewrite. I'll work on it. Thank you for the kind review.
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I wasn?t sure. Just made me pause where I had been humming along with the nice flow. Regardless, fun chapter!
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He's now suggested to walk the dog. LOL I think only an x cop would notice it, but still changed it.
Comment from nomi338
Like Noah, I am impressed with Sami's workout routine. In my 80s I am not active at all, even though I have been advised to become more so. Easier said than done. I prefer to work mentally more than physically. This story is very pleasing to me and I pray that you will continue at a pace that works for you and away with those who want to pressure you into moving at a faster pace.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Like Noah, I am impressed with Sami's workout routine. In my 80s I am not active at all, even though I have been advised to become more so. Easier said than done. I prefer to work mentally more than physically. This story is very pleasing to me and I pray that you will continue at a pace that works for you and away with those who want to pressure you into moving at a faster pace.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful encouragement. HUGS!!!!! I do workout every morning. I don't want to stop and not be able to move.
Comment from judiverse
I frequently can't find the picture I want or else it's rejected by the site. I think the questioning by Baldwin was totally unnecessary, but it shows what kind of guy he is. Sami and Noah handled it just fine. I don't blame her for wanting and excuse to get out of there. I don't know that you need that much about the jogging, etc. That seems to be something you use frequently. (Maybe I'm just jealous because I can't do it.) The focus belongs on the case at hand. I hadn't heard it called Solitary before. Always Solitaire. Hope you don't mind my including these thoughts. I just think the heroine in each of your books should do things differently. judi
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I frequently can't find the picture I want or else it's rejected by the site. I think the questioning by Baldwin was totally unnecessary, but it shows what kind of guy he is. Sami and Noah handled it just fine. I don't blame her for wanting and excuse to get out of there. I don't know that you need that much about the jogging, etc. That seems to be something you use frequently. (Maybe I'm just jealous because I can't do it.) The focus belongs on the case at hand. I hadn't heard it called Solitary before. Always Solitaire. Hope you don't mind my including these thoughts. I just think the heroine in each of your books should do things differently. judi
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Everything you mentioned needs to be there because it's will be important in future chapters. LOL You're right about the Solitaire. I need to change that. I always appreciate your thougths.
Comment from BethShelby
This is good very good. Sami is a very active lady. That is a lot of physical activity. I'll bet you work out too. I try to go to the Y for water arobics three time a week. If you don't stay active you lose you mucles. The interaction between Gavin and his boss was interesting. It doesn't sound like a comfortable working relationship.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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This is good very good. Sami is a very active lady. That is a lot of physical activity. I'll bet you work out too. I try to go to the Y for water arobics three time a week. If you don't stay active you lose you mucles. The interaction between Gavin and his boss was interesting. It doesn't sound like a comfortable working relationship.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Another good chapter. I, for some reason, don't trust Galvin. I think he might be setting the team up. Maybe he's in cahoots with Chin, or maybe it's just a power thing between him and Noah. Loved her lune about playing solitaire. I can win on my phone edition, but with actual cards ... never. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Another good chapter. I, for some reason, don't trust Galvin. I think he might be setting the team up. Maybe he's in cahoots with Chin, or maybe it's just a power thing between him and Noah. Loved her lune about playing solitaire. I can win on my phone edition, but with actual cards ... never. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Galvin will cause problems later. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
