Life, Death, Up, Down
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Comment from Sallyo
This one is a hard-hitting story, and one that will make many readers think about knee-jerk and mob reactions.
I suggest you proof it again, though... I found a couple of tyypos.
clesaning
All I knew was she Polish
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This one is a hard-hitting story, and one that will make many readers think about knee-jerk and mob reactions.
I suggest you proof it again, though... I found a couple of tyypos.
clesaning
All I knew was she Polish
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you. I have trouble with my left hand fingers and often make typos. Thanks for letting me know!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an excellent story. I wish I had six stars to give you. This is the kind of story that can work in religious Sunday school lessons. There are a lot of them you can find online. This story of regret and trying to make things right is always popular.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This is an excellent story. I wish I had six stars to give you. This is the kind of story that can work in religious Sunday school lessons. There are a lot of them you can find online. This story of regret and trying to make things right is always popular.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your humbling words. Unfortunately, it was loosely based on a true story.
Comment from Wendy G
An incredible story of her bravery and resilience, as contrasted with the one who simply voted with the other teachers because it was too hard to stand against the others. Yet that person had the decency and integrity to feel remorse and to seek her out, to discover her life story and to try to ask for forgiveness. That showed amazing compassion and care. We all act like the teachers at times, too busy to care what our words and actions might do to another, so this story is a personal challenge to me and to us all. Beautifully written, with honesty and thoughtfulness.
Wendy
Edit: the clesaning lady had to go. (cleaning)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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An incredible story of her bravery and resilience, as contrasted with the one who simply voted with the other teachers because it was too hard to stand against the others. Yet that person had the decency and integrity to feel remorse and to seek her out, to discover her life story and to try to ask for forgiveness. That showed amazing compassion and care. We all act like the teachers at times, too busy to care what our words and actions might do to another, so this story is a personal challenge to me and to us all. Beautifully written, with honesty and thoughtfulness.
Wendy
Edit: the clesaning lady had to go. (cleaning)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your humbling words. Unfortunately, it was loosely based on a true story.
Comment from Julie Helms
Your story tells of an amazing juxtaposition between the superficiality of the decision to fire a woman for some missed dirt compared to the horror of her earlier life. It's a really good reminder for all of us to put things in perspective before we get too upset about something.
clesaning lady had to go.
(Cleaning)
Excellent and original entry for the prompt.
Julie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Your story tells of an amazing juxtaposition between the superficiality of the decision to fire a woman for some missed dirt compared to the horror of her earlier life. It's a really good reminder for all of us to put things in perspective before we get too upset about something.
clesaning lady had to go.
(Cleaning)
Excellent and original entry for the prompt.
Julie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you so very much! I believe I "cleaned up" the "cleaning" typo.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
If this one doesn't win, I will never care about another contest on this site for as long as I remain a member. This is absolutely exquisite in its heart-wrenching perfection. It teaches the most important of lessons without once preaching even one word to me, directly.
Outstanding job, Mystery Contestant. Loved the gorgeous cello music that you chose, too, in tunes of my Tribesmen.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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If this one doesn't win, I will never care about another contest on this site for as long as I remain a member. This is absolutely exquisite in its heart-wrenching perfection. It teaches the most important of lessons without once preaching even one word to me, directly.
Outstanding job, Mystery Contestant. Loved the gorgeous cello music that you chose, too, in tunes of my Tribesmen.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I am so humbled by your wonderful words! There are many with talents on this site, and I would truly be honored if this one won!
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Same!! xo
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Thank you! So far it isn't doing too well in the vote, but I wrote it for God's glory, not the judges.
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There you go. These contests are NEVER a mirror to the real talent that's being offered. There's one family voting block, plus there's people who vote-fish, and they have tons of followers. I'm with you all the way on this: the One who matters sees it. xo
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I just gave it my vote!! xoxox
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I'm very thankful. I don't want to disappoint anyone. Awards are not as important as my being true to the art of writing. That's what God gave me a desire to do.
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I'm very thankful. I don't want to disappoint anyone. Awards are not as important as my being true to the art of writing. That's what God gave me a desire to do.
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Very wisely put.
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I appreciate your kindness always.
Comment from Esther Brown
That hurt. Feels sharp inside my brain. Wonder if Nicodemus and Joseph of Arimathea felt that way when Jesus died? They were religious leaders, and likely didn't speak up for Jesus until it was too late. But they did claim His body.
Cleaning is spelled incorrectly but still worth 6.
Esther
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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That hurt. Feels sharp inside my brain. Wonder if Nicodemus and Joseph of Arimathea felt that way when Jesus died? They were religious leaders, and likely didn't speak up for Jesus until it was too late. But they did claim His body.
Cleaning is spelled incorrectly but still worth 6.
Esther
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your kind review! I have to watch the typos. My left hand is slightly numb often.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is truly a creative and poignant story about voting. But I must mention, your included video took me back almost 60 years when I was in my high school choir. One of the songs we sang was Shalom Aleichem in its authentic language. Thank you for the message of your story, and my trip down memory lane. Best wishes in the contest.
They all said the clesaning lady had to go. (cleaning)
All I knew was she Polish; (she 'was' Polish)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is truly a creative and poignant story about voting. But I must mention, your included video took me back almost 60 years when I was in my high school choir. One of the songs we sang was Shalom Aleichem in its authentic language. Thank you for the message of your story, and my trip down memory lane. Best wishes in the contest.
They all said the clesaning lady had to go. (cleaning)
All I knew was she Polish; (she 'was' Polish)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Wow! You must have been 3 or 4 years old in high school! Thank you very much!
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Lol! I guess I'm a little older than you think.
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Only in your mind!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story. Great sentiment.
They all said the clesaning lady had to go. - (cleaning?)
Not wanting to create any waves since I didn't have tenure, - A comma after 'waves' would make it read better.
All I knew was she Polish; - (was that she was Polish?)
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Very nice story. Great sentiment.
They all said the clesaning lady had to go. - (cleaning?)
Not wanting to create any waves since I didn't have tenure, - A comma after 'waves' would make it read better.
All I knew was she Polish; - (was that she was Polish?)
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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I appreciate your kind words. It's not an excuse, but I have difficulties with my left hand being a bit numb and often make typos.
Comment from Begin Again
Now that would haunted me forever...After learning what she had been through and knowing I only voted what the others wanted me to do and not what I thought was right. Wow!
Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Now that would haunted me forever...After learning what she had been through and knowing I only voted what the others wanted me to do and not what I thought was right. Wow!
Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Many thanks for your kind words!
Comment from Sally Law
This is magnificent. I'm so relieved to find something of exquisite worth in this contest. I'm so over the politics here. A beautiful story set in post-wartime Poland.
Typo: clesaning. Cleaning lady. My vote for sure.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally Law xo
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is magnificent. I'm so relieved to find something of exquisite worth in this contest. I'm so over the politics here. A beautiful story set in post-wartime Poland.
Typo: clesaning. Cleaning lady. My vote for sure.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally Law xo
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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I appreciate your words very much! I'm sorry. It's no excuse, but I have trouble with my left hand at times.
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No worries. You are welcome. Beautifully penned story. Sal :))
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Thank you again!
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