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Comment from Mark Jackson
Yes, I enjoyed it. The presentation was good although I had to zoom right in to read. There is rhyming although not restricted by a scheme which fit in with the overall theme. I'm afraid I get lost at the end, but that didn't matter much. 5 stars.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Yes, I enjoyed it. The presentation was good although I had to zoom right in to read. There is rhyming although not restricted by a scheme which fit in with the overall theme. I'm afraid I get lost at the end, but that didn't matter much. 5 stars.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you, Mark.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You ask a poignant question in your notes but the last stanza mentions the word kite and I realize it rhymes with plight but otherwise, why did you use the word kite?
Does kite stand for boundaries? I agree with your remorse for the loss of love and how it eats us up inside when we wonder if the boundaries we set were a good idea.
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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You ask a poignant question in your notes but the last stanza mentions the word kite and I realize it rhymes with plight but otherwise, why did you use the word kite?
Does kite stand for boundaries? I agree with your remorse for the loss of love and how it eats us up inside when we wonder if the boundaries we set were a good idea.
Jesse
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Well kite represents the breaking of boundaries, but not completely. IE-the string. Not a good netaphor? I must say I thought that part was good.
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Sorry. I didn't see that metaphor.
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No problem, Jesse.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well said! And here I have to repeat the quote: "Stone walls do not a prison make/nor iron bars a cage (Richard Lovelace). So true that we create our own boundaries. I like the way your free verse is crafted in short, sometimes unfinished lines, reflecting, perhaps, the quite random nature of those prison walls we create. All beautifully complemented with your image, significantly suggesting (according to the footwear) this occurs from youth. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Well said! And here I have to repeat the quote: "Stone walls do not a prison make/nor iron bars a cage (Richard Lovelace). So true that we create our own boundaries. I like the way your free verse is crafted in short, sometimes unfinished lines, reflecting, perhaps, the quite random nature of those prison walls we create. All beautifully complemented with your image, significantly suggesting (according to the footwear) this occurs from youth. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2024
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Amen, sister.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Doug.
We all wish to be as free as a flying kite. But even kites have the boundary of the length of its string. Rhatbis is unless you cut it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day
Joan
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reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Hi Doug.
We all wish to be as free as a flying kite. But even kites have the boundary of the length of its string. Rhatbis is unless you cut it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day
Joan
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you, Joan. You, almost always, understand.
Which, BTW, is FAR better than the norm. LOL
Doug
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No problem, Doug.
Joan
Comment from QC Poet
Very interesting and good metaphoric poem on the boundaries between two people falling into a love relationship. The accompanying picture reminds us like love we have to stop, look and listen before we cross the next boundary to find the right pathway in life and love. Thank you for Sharing your Boundaries poem post
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reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Very interesting and good metaphoric poem on the boundaries between two people falling into a love relationship. The accompanying picture reminds us like love we have to stop, look and listen before we cross the next boundary to find the right pathway in life and love. Thank you for Sharing your Boundaries poem post
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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And thank you for reading and reviewing it.