Feeding the Ducks
A Lyle and Rufus tale.34 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Beth, This is a very cute dialogue between Rufus and Lyle. You used great descriptive words and a very neat picture that looked it could be Rufus and Lyle. I love they are feeding the ducks! Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Beth, This is a very cute dialogue between Rufus and Lyle. You used great descriptive words and a very neat picture that looked it could be Rufus and Lyle. I love they are feeding the ducks! Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you so my Teri. I've used these guys before but it has been a while. Someone bought the picture to a writing group I was in for us to write about. I'm glafd you liked it.
Beth
Comment from damommy
I love them. Two good friends feeding the ducks every day. I agree with Lyle about groceries going up in price. Thinking they need a government grand to feed the ducks in hilarious!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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I love them. Two good friends feeding the ducks every day. I agree with Lyle about groceries going up in price. Thinking they need a government grand to feed the ducks in hilarious!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you Yvonne, I'm so glad you like this and got a laugh from it. I really appreciate your comments and the six stars.
Beth
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Really cute story, Beth!! Very authentic dialogue with authentic characters. You showcase your sense of humor and imagination well in this story. Best of luck in the contest,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Really cute story, Beth!! Very authentic dialogue with authentic characters. You showcase your sense of humor and imagination well in this story. Best of luck in the contest,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Rhonda. It is fun writing about these two characters. I feel like I know them and know what they might say. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
Whether or not they really exist, the dialogue is realistic and cusses me to believe in their reality. A very good offering for this "Dialogue Only" contest. No typos or concerns. Hope you do well!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Whether or not they really exist, the dialogue is realistic and cusses me to believe in their reality. A very good offering for this "Dialogue Only" contest. No typos or concerns. Hope you do well!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Jim. The people in the picture are definitely real, but I'm pretty sure that isn't their names. I tried looking up the names on google and found their is someone named Rufus Lyle. I hope he doesn't read my story. He might be insulted. LOL
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I'd be flattered, were it me!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Aww that's great, Beth! I found myself reading the dialect out loud and could really have listened some more to these old timers (Will there be a follow-up?) I wondered if you meant 'there' in the second line instead of 'they.' And grocer(ie)s 6th line from the bottom? Beautiful presentation. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Aww that's great, Beth! I found myself reading the dialect out loud and could really have listened some more to these old timers (Will there be a follow-up?) I wondered if you meant 'there' in the second line instead of 'they.' And grocer(ie)s 6th line from the bottom? Beautiful presentation. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Debbie, I have used the guys before and will probably use them again. I like them for some reason. I grew up around people who taked this ways. They would often the word "they" in place of "there" but it didn't hurt to change it to there.
Comment from Spitfire
Great entry. Good work with the dialect. This addresses an important issue too--inflation! The last line is a hoot. Perfect photo to complement the piece. Good luck to both of us.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Great entry. Good work with the dialect. This addresses an important issue too--inflation! The last line is a hoot. Perfect photo to complement the piece. Good luck to both of us.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you, You are stiff competition and maybe we can both get lucky and at least place.
Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
These are two funny characters. I don't recall reading about them before. The funniest line is when Lyle wants to make extra money but doesn't want to do anything that involves work. I enjoyed their realistic dialogue as they continue to figure out how to have more money. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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These are two funny characters. I don't recall reading about them before. The funniest line is when Lyle wants to make extra money but doesn't want to do anything that involves work. I enjoyed their realistic dialogue as they continue to figure out how to have more money. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you the nice review. It has been nearly a year since I wrote about them. I think the first time was seven or eight years ago and it was a dialogue only contest. It was before I left FanStory for six years.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Sure let Lyle be your guinea pig to see what works, right Rufus? LOL!
Your author's notes make these two sound real, but since it's "fiction", I assume this is an occasional series for you, Beth?
A fun read and I wish you luck with the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Sure let Lyle be your guinea pig to see what works, right Rufus? LOL!
Your author's notes make these two sound real, but since it's "fiction", I assume this is an occasional series for you, Beth?
A fun read and I wish you luck with the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you Pam. I've used them a couple of time before. Someone brought that picture to a meeting of a writing club I was for us to write a story about. I found them interesting. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
... and knowing how Big G likes to spend money they didn't earn, ours, this pair will likely get a grant-in-aid or subsistence pay since the ducks being fed are likely immigrants from Canada. Even they know a good thing when received as our Canadian geese are year round residents, now.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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... and knowing how Big G likes to spend money they didn't earn, ours, this pair will likely get a grant-in-aid or subsistence pay since the ducks being fed are likely immigrants from Canada. Even they know a good thing when received as our Canadian geese are year round residents, now.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you Tom, this is funny about Canadian geese being immigrants from Canada and and possibly entitled to a grant. Thank for the review..
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post Beth, you seemed to have got and written the accents well, and worked out what the aged and laconic elderly male is like with their somewhat limited wisdom and intellect is like. Well dine, a good job, blessings Roy
Typo : If I have to(o) 2: bread (curmbs) left, crumbs? 3: Rufus and Lyle are (neighbosr) neighbours?
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This is an excellent post Beth, you seemed to have got and written the accents well, and worked out what the aged and laconic elderly male is like with their somewhat limited wisdom and intellect is like. Well dine, a good job, blessings Roy
Typo : If I have to(o) 2: bread (curmbs) left, crumbs? 3: Rufus and Lyle are (neighbosr) neighbours?
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Roy, I've been around characters like these so when I saw this picture, I was sure I would know how they might sound if I could hear them talk. Thanks so much for the review.
Beth
