Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the way you've run the Greek gods into your story, but I suspect Echo is very important to the integrity of the story, and now Diantha and Phoebus are going in to battle, and depending on their success, or failure, it's very important to the story, well done, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 18-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024

Hi Roy, and thank you so much for the excellent review. Diantha and Phoebus, who are the main characters in a prequel I'm going to post on here, will fade a bit in their roles while the kids forge their own fight, and build their own stories.
Thank you so much, dear friend,
Rhonda

reply by royowen on 18-Feb-2024

Well done

Comment from lyenochka

Exceptional

Well, Diantha is quite the strong woman, mortal or immortal. I was a bit confused why she would be worried about Phoebus's safety as he is an immortal. But you show us it's not safe for immortals battling other immortals. I am curious about the vision. But now Echo and Theo have the opportunity partner together in taking care of the kingdom.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024

Hi Helen, and thank you so much for the six shining stars. I know there are only 6 to grant and it's so hard to spread them out, so I appreciate them so much.
You've gotten the idea of the immortals being deadly to each other, and the reason Diantha is so worried about his safety, and he hers. To go to Mount Olympus is to level the playing field with immortality.
The vision will sort of play itself out as the story progresses, and you absolutely nailed it on the kids now taking over the helm with the older immortals out of the way, so to speak. I will be writing a prequel about them once this book is finished.
Thank you, again, dear friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda