Afghani Love Affair
With Uncle Joe27 total reviews
Comment from QC Poet
It is your privilege to be able to write about the opposition clearly with my initial rating It was a bit harsh and written with my opinion on other than structure and writing schemes excetra Thank you and I am working on my focus issue obviously my rating was misdirected as a result of a similar rating I received here on FanStory
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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It is your privilege to be able to write about the opposition clearly with my initial rating It was a bit harsh and written with my opinion on other than structure and writing schemes excetra Thank you and I am working on my focus issue obviously my rating was misdirected as a result of a similar rating I received here on FanStory
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Hello and thank you for reading! It is likewise your privilege to write anything you like in a review with no consequences, with no regard for the quality of the writing itself, and I am required to thank you and not defend my work. Thus work is about the current President of the United States, who has stated that the buck stops with him, and you can decide whether to take that seriously or not. You will find other material in my portfolio attacking the so-called "other side", such as this piece.
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QC, thank you for the post update -- I appreciate it. -H
Comment from Lisasview
Oh my goodness Haram,
This is really quite a mouthful (no pun intended) actually I should really say a thought provoking clever ~ well written Valentine Contest poem...
Good luck in the contest....
Lisasview
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Oh my goodness Haram,
This is really quite a mouthful (no pun intended) actually I should really say a thought provoking clever ~ well written Valentine Contest poem...
Good luck in the contest....
Lisasview
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much Lisa!
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You are so welcome..
Lisa
Comment from royowen
I was a little apprehensive at first but like a of so called daring limericks stop slightly short of absolute bawdiness, such as 'Canterbury tales' but gives enough room for clever suggestion, this is skilfully written, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I was a little apprehensive at first but like a of so called daring limericks stop slightly short of absolute bawdiness, such as 'Canterbury tales' but gives enough room for clever suggestion, this is skilfully written, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much Roy. I appreciate being thought of in conjunction with a work of such literary significance. If you ever get a chance to be in a choir (or hear one) performing Carmina Burana's rendering of that text, it takes that to another level which I aspire to achieve someday as well.
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Well done
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Okay, you out did yourself with this contest entry. It is creative and well written. I do believe you would probably do a better job as president than the people who are running. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Okay, you out did yourself with this contest entry. It is creative and well written. I do believe you would probably do a better job as president than the people who are running. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you Barbara! My official Presidential announcement will be coming soon. This is definitely up there among the edgier/riskier pieces I have put out thus far and certainly won't be winning any contest awards so I'll consider it an accomplishment if it simply SURVIVES.
Comment from LyndaS
Love the author notes. It's like you're a translator or something.
You are clearly unfiltered, but damn if you can't rhyme.
You tell truth, Mr. President. I haven't read any of your reviews for this, but the absence of a sixer is very telling.
I was going to comment on my favorite line, but it's all a cohesive rant. I loved this. You have woven sarcasm, truth and humor into something that the tower must be wailing in earnest that they can't pull this. Sheep and all.
Thanks for the affirming smile that now dances on my face.
Off to read your reviews.
Nice job. ð???
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Love the author notes. It's like you're a translator or something.
You are clearly unfiltered, but damn if you can't rhyme.
You tell truth, Mr. President. I haven't read any of your reviews for this, but the absence of a sixer is very telling.
I was going to comment on my favorite line, but it's all a cohesive rant. I loved this. You have woven sarcasm, truth and humor into something that the tower must be wailing in earnest that they can't pull this. Sheep and all.
Thanks for the affirming smile that now dances on my face.
Off to read your reviews.
Nice job. ð???
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much Lynda. I've got my bananas crossed on that one. Yeah for the site-sponsored contests, if an entry got pulled out of consideration I wouldn't know. It's a big mystery who reads it and decides what goes, and they would only say something if it was getting pulled from the site. Not sure if it goes through the CEC. Some things just gotta be written -- if they make me sweat when hitting the publish button, that's usually a good indicator.
This piece was partially inspired by a shorter and much funnier limerick one of my brothers wrote many years ago about Biden and a goat, which I have since lost. Maybe someday I'll find it.
Comment from Treischel
You have no shame, but a fine political perspective. On Valentine's Day no less, you provide psilocybin induced romance with Biden (clever rhyme there). Great use of a Limerick format. Not sure though that he can get it up anymore. Maybe if he sniffs her wool.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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You have no shame, but a fine political perspective. On Valentine's Day no less, you provide psilocybin induced romance with Biden (clever rhyme there). Great use of a Limerick format. Not sure though that he can get it up anymore. Maybe if he sniffs her wool.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Haha nice suggestion. In my pre-edited version I had "and blacked out" instead of "wish a shout". It was funnier, though I decided something more vile was in order. Tried to get in sniffing too but it wasn't flowing well. Thanks for this kind review -- I appreciate it very much.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is political satire at its finest, H. It's a bold, hard-hitting Limerick mission with the theme convoyed by skillfully deployed metre and rhyme. Biden's abandoning the Afghani people holds tragic and long-lasting consequences, and it was at that point that I could no longer believe him to be a man of empathy.
The withdrawal was a humanitarian disaster and unbelievably he had no plan A or B.
Wishing you luck with the Contest Committee. It will definitely stand out as a unique entry into the Valentine Day contest. :)
Gloria
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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This is political satire at its finest, H. It's a bold, hard-hitting Limerick mission with the theme convoyed by skillfully deployed metre and rhyme. Biden's abandoning the Afghani people holds tragic and long-lasting consequences, and it was at that point that I could no longer believe him to be a man of empathy.
The withdrawal was a humanitarian disaster and unbelievably he had no plan A or B.
Wishing you luck with the Contest Committee. It will definitely stand out as a unique entry into the Valentine Day contest. :)
Gloria
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you Gloria for this really thoughtfully written review. Yeah, Biden was certainly not the one who started the Afghanistan problem, but others now have to live with the consequences of his execution of it. I'm sure my piece won't win any prizes from the Committee; it will be celebration enough for it to stay listed -- there were consequences the last time I did a piece this visceral ("Party Pooper", on Trumpism). I probably won't be promoting this piece to the top of the site though, hahaha.
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I know you are fair in your assessment, so if it's okay with you, I would like to promote your post.
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That's incredibly gracious of you, and I gratefully accept the offer. If it causes some trouble, it will be worth it! -H
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Done and done. :)
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Thanks so much Gloria. I can only imagine the explosive reactions tomorrow morning when folks read this with their 6am coffee and oatmeal. LOL.