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Comment from CrystieCookie999
Thank you for the author notes. I think Japanese poetry forms can be challenging. I like the idea of a shadowed island created by the shadows of the cumulus clouds above. This poem points out there is a relationship between what is not touchable and what we can see.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the author notes. I think Japanese poetry forms can be challenging. I like the idea of a shadowed island created by the shadows of the cumulus clouds above. This poem points out there is a relationship between what is not touchable and what we can see.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
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thank you crystie! 😎👍💙🖋️🦄☁️
Comment from Treischel
Not only a Tanka, but also an ekphrastic poem - a twofur. An outstanding representation as a shade oasis. Even have a touch of alliteration (I hear that is frowned upon in Japanese poetry) which I really like. Nice artistic composition and font color.
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Not only a Tanka, but also an ekphrastic poem - a twofur. An outstanding representation as a shade oasis. Even have a touch of alliteration (I hear that is frowned upon in Japanese poetry) which I really like. Nice artistic composition and font color.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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i like alliteration LOL! thank you treischel 😂😁💙🖊️🦄
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I've always been curious about the overhead clouds, a lot of the islands I've visited have had no trees, the question is Why? The wind's too much for them, well done, great post, blessings Roy
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Oh yes, I've always been curious about the overhead clouds, a lot of the islands I've visited have had no trees, the question is Why? The wind's too much for them, well done, great post, blessings Roy
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thank you roy!! 😎👍💙🖊️🦄☁️
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Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very good poem. I know I have benefited from clouds passing over and providing shade. I noticed that your fourth and fifth lines have six syllables. The picture accentuates the poem well. Nice job.
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This is a very good poem. I know I have benefited from clouds passing over and providing shade. I noticed that your fourth and fifth lines have six syllables. The picture accentuates the poem well. Nice job.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
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thank you baltimore 🌝💗🖊️🦄
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You are welcome.
Comment from jmdg1954
Shelley.
Great contest entry besides a fantastic Tanka poem.
Cumulus clouds remind me of wispy cotton candy, white cotton candy.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Cheers,
John
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Shelley.
Great contest entry besides a fantastic Tanka poem.
Cumulus clouds remind me of wispy cotton candy, white cotton candy.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
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thank you john! ☁️😎✌️💙🖋️🦄☁️
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Cumulus clouds are my favorite because I feel like I can reach up and pluck them from the sky. Of course, I can't. LOL Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Cumulus clouds are my favorite because I feel like I can reach up and pluck them from the sky. Of course, I can't. LOL Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
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LOL! they're like big fluffy pillows lol -- thank you barbara ☁️😎✌️💙🖊️🦄
Comment from lyenochka
Very cool visual tanka! I like how you created that visual effect of the cloud that casts a "shade oasis" which by the end of the tanka becomes an "island". Best wishes in the contest!
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Very cool visual tanka! I like how you created that visual effect of the cloud that casts a "shade oasis" which by the end of the tanka becomes an "island". Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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hehe thank you helen! 😎✌️💙🖋️🦄☁️