The Will
This is a first chapter about a family.22 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice contest entry. A little wordy, but well written. (An example is the unnecessary exchange opening box 667.)
"There is no easy way to say this, "your mom has passed." - oops. You only need two ".
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Nice contest entry. A little wordy, but well written. (An example is the unnecessary exchange opening box 667.)
"There is no easy way to say this, "your mom has passed." - oops. You only need two ".
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from BethShelby
This is good beginning for a book. It is one I will be interested in reading so I hope to be able to find it as you complete the chapters. Scenes like the one where someone has just died is a good way to open a new beginning.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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This is good beginning for a book. It is one I will be interested in reading so I hope to be able to find it as you complete the chapters. Scenes like the one where someone has just died is a good way to open a new beginning.
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.