Avian Patrol
Free verse poem on nene: Hawaiian/Kauai geese26 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent free verse, something to show those who think an essay or article in prose is a free verse. Some of the places we visit on vacation are memorable, some more than others, this is a superbly written piece my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent free verse, something to show those who think an essay or article in prose is a free verse. Some of the places we visit on vacation are memorable, some more than others, this is a superbly written piece my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your super review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Douglas Goff
This piece is really quite beautiful. I had never really given birds much thought until I got in this site. Now my love for them has grown exponentially.
I could really visualized this:
They occasionally honk while listening to the newest symphony of rain,
Good luck in the Free Verse Contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This piece is really quite beautiful. I had never really given birds much thought until I got in this site. Now my love for them has grown exponentially.
I could really visualized this:
They occasionally honk while listening to the newest symphony of rain,
Good luck in the Free Verse Contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine descriptions of this birds habitat here and your well researched poem tells a fine story of this bird to bring it to life for us here, a fine free verse Crystie, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Fine descriptions of this birds habitat here and your well researched poem tells a fine story of this bird to bring it to life for us here, a fine free verse Crystie, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your awesome review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The geese are nature's waddling ducks who like the rippling water and also the shores next to it. They usually waddle when they walk, and they are known for their pooping grounds.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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The geese are nature's waddling ducks who like the rippling water and also the shores next to it. They usually waddle when they walk, and they are known for their pooping grounds.
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Navada
I really enjoyed your precise and beautiful language choices and the way these captured the behaviour and potential thoughts of the geese as they patrolled the area. Snippets such as "some posse of dark-eyed sailors", "waddle-pad" and "intermittent tail-waggle" were my favourites. :)
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I really enjoyed your precise and beautiful language choices and the way these captured the behaviour and potential thoughts of the geese as they patrolled the area. Snippets such as "some posse of dark-eyed sailors", "waddle-pad" and "intermittent tail-waggle" were my favourites. :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your generous and detailed review.
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray for the nene goose, Hawaii's state bird! Thank you for shining a light on them. They were endangered once. I like the Guard role that they take. In fact, in a nearby pond, one goose lives with all the ducks and chases away all the other geese for some reason. He/She is the guardian there.
I wondered why you chose the metaphor of a "coin" in " held up like darkened coins"
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Hooray for the nene goose, Hawaii's state bird! Thank you for shining a light on them. They were endangered once. I like the Guard role that they take. In fact, in a nearby pond, one goose lives with all the ducks and chases away all the other geese for some reason. He/She is the guardian there.
I wondered why you chose the metaphor of a "coin" in " held up like darkened coins"
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I must have passed a fountain just before writing that poem, where a variety of coins of different shades had been tossed. It's been a while since I was there in Kauai, but the coin reference may have come from something in the area or upon returning to my home state again.
