A Summer Indiscretion
Keeping a questionable relationship in check.27 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
That's a quite unusual story, but cousins falling in love does happen from time to time, and this experience was based on years of close friendship. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Edits: for (a) few days
His his eyes lit up (remove one "his")
We were carefully around his mother and sister, (careful)
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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That's a quite unusual story, but cousins falling in love does happen from time to time, and this experience was based on years of close friendship. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Edits: for (a) few days
His his eyes lit up (remove one "his")
We were carefully around his mother and sister, (careful)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you Wendy. I appreciate you pointing out spags. Thanks for the review.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
This is a very neat story you have penned for the "Share Your Story" contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. The artwork you chose went well with your words. I can remember a few of my male cousins having a crush on me, but it never went anywhere. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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This is a very neat story you have penned for the "Share Your Story" contest. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. The artwork you chose went well with your words. I can remember a few of my male cousins having a crush on me, but it never went anywhere. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you Teri. It probably never went anywhere with your cousins because you were smarter than I was. LOL
Beth
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That's a pretty cool story first love oh yeah I used to have a crush on my uncle he's only a couple of years older than me my grandmother had lots of kids. Life can be funny like that Royal written though I must say and it certainly takes me to the place you are at at that time the good description and a great first experience you have shared with us thank you for that! Good job on this one I think it's a great entry I don't see any issues with grammar or aesthetics and I think you got a good shot here best of luck to you I hope your Christmas was great that your New year's even better and that you're having a great evening!
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That's a pretty cool story first love oh yeah I used to have a crush on my uncle he's only a couple of years older than me my grandmother had lots of kids. Life can be funny like that Royal written though I must say and it certainly takes me to the place you are at at that time the good description and a great first experience you have shared with us thank you for that! Good job on this one I think it's a great entry I don't see any issues with grammar or aesthetics and I think you got a good shot here best of luck to you I hope your Christmas was great that your New year's even better and that you're having a great evening!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea. I think this may have happened to more people who had rather not talk about it. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I suspect most teens
Can relate to The story told
That said though your telling such a story seems risqué
I enjoyed
Reading about it as
Much as
You did telling it I suspect
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I suspect most teens
Can relate to The story told
That said though your telling such a story seems risqué
I enjoyed
Reading about it as
Much as
You did telling it I suspect
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thanks Tom. It isn't like it doesn't happen. Franklin Roosevelt and and Mamie were first cousins and Jerry Lee married his first cousin but it is still frowned on.
Beth
Comment from royowen
The thing that struck me was wondering if he remembered or not, of course he remembers, as you do, and probably served as a lead in to growing into adulthood, one doesn't forget their early forays into forging a relational understanding of the future, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo ; for (a) few days. 2: we were careful(ly)
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The thing that struck me was wondering if he remembered or not, of course he remembers, as you do, and probably served as a lead in to growing into adulthood, one doesn't forget their early forays into forging a relational understanding of the future, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo ; for (a) few days. 2: we were careful(ly)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Roy. I wonder why we've never talked about it unless we are a little embarrassed about it happening. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
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That?s it probablyn
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a lovely coming of age story which I enjoyed reading as I do with all your work, Beth. But, sadly, there are errors strewn throughout. Had there been fewer I would attempt to list them but this really needs a proofread to refine it to the standard it deserves. Good luck in the contest. Debbie
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This is a lovely coming of age story which I enjoyed reading as I do with all your work, Beth. But, sadly, there are errors strewn throughout. Had there been fewer I would attempt to list them but this really needs a proofread to refine it to the standard it deserves. Good luck in the contest. Debbie
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I'll read it four times but my eyes are giving me trouble. I usually get my daughter to read it but I wasn't sure I wanted her to see it.
Beth
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I'm sorry. I'd usually do it but I fell on my nose (no alcohol involved!) over Christmas and have a black eye which is stinging right now:(( They're small edits but quite a number...
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I read it again word for word like I used to do when I was a proofreader. I never missed anything back then but I didn't write it so ir was easier. When I read what I've written, I see whar I mean to say and not whar i actually said. I caught a lot I missed this time. Thanks for pointing it out.
Betg
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You're welcome, Beth.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting story, and it's very typical for a young girl to fall in love with her cousin. My oldest daughter, I think had a real big crush on one of her cousins. But she like you knew that was something that we could not go anywhere. And you have a very happy and prosperous new year. Patricia
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This is a very interesting story, and it's very typical for a young girl to fall in love with her cousin. My oldest daughter, I think had a real big crush on one of her cousins. But she like you knew that was something that we could not go anywhere. And you have a very happy and prosperous new year. Patricia
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Pat. I'm glad you found my story interesting. I hope you have a wonderful New Year.
Beth