Unrestrained
Couplet24 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is a nice form that you have written for the couplet contest. I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a very wonderful, beautiful and happy and merry Christmas. May your choice be full and may your new year be blessed and healthy. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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This is a nice form that you have written for the couplet contest. I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a very wonderful, beautiful and happy and merry Christmas. May your choice be full and may your new year be blessed and healthy. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much, Patricia. I so appreciate your lovely words and well wishes. May the Lord bless you richly this Christmas!!
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Ciao sugarray !
this is a well-thought-out poem.
Without wind, waves stop growing but they still travel.
Time never stops either, we grow up and then we start to get older and our death gets closer.
PS.just a reminder no picture is allowed in this contest. Not sure about the inner rhyme...I don't see/hear it.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Ciao sugarray !
this is a well-thought-out poem.
Without wind, waves stop growing but they still travel.
Time never stops either, we grow up and then we start to get older and our death gets closer.
PS.just a reminder no picture is allowed in this contest. Not sure about the inner rhyme...I don't see/hear it.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Franca. I have edited it and taken the picture out... the internal words in the first line are shore..poor and the second line the words are end .. friend. I hope it makes sense now. Hugs!
Melissa
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Ciao!
You now have 4 votes!
I really love this revised version.. the new part is a great addition
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Thank you sweet, Franca! I'm so glad you liked it. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
This is a great response to the time couplet challenge! My favorite so far that I've read. Being a senior I can certainly relate to these words. Well done!
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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This is a great response to the time couplet challenge! My favorite so far that I've read. Being a senior I can certainly relate to these words. Well done!
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Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Hello June. Thanks so much. It was a lot more complicated than I thought it would be ~ whew! But it's always fun to twist and turn words on their ears. LOL. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You have something here I adore, and yet, it seems a tad off. You also included a picture which the creator's instructions said not to add.
I would have written it a little differently, like:
"As unceasingly as waves flow to the shore,
Time, too, moves unrestrained for rich or poor.
No ill intent. It's a suggestion for I know literary license is unique to anyone.
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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You have something here I adore, and yet, it seems a tad off. You also included a picture which the creator's instructions said not to add.
I would have written it a little differently, like:
"As unceasingly as waves flow to the shore,
Time, too, moves unrestrained for rich or poor.
No ill intent. It's a suggestion for I know literary license is unique to anyone.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Hey Tom... thanks so much for the heads up... I have done a revision and hope you will look at it to see if it seems ok now.
Melissa
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Masterfully written
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Post you a bonus star