Comment from estory

Excellent

I thought this was imaginative in concept an execution. I liked how you used this conversation with yourself to invite the reader to your own personal experience of the creative process, and I thought the use of incomplete sentences highlighted this theme of being unable to finish the creative process of writing a poem. All the returns to that phrase "What was I writing about?" achieved the same thing. Then there's all those distractions that drag us from the process; that phone call invite for lunch at the end, for example. Interesting use of form to provide a framework for the theme. estory

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback - much appreciated!

Comment from L. Kalere

Excellent

This was so darling, and I bet lots of fanstorians can identify with it...I know I can. Days later, it all comes back, but if I don't write it down quickly it's gone again. I love the way you wrote it, as if the words are thinking, and the yellow makes it whimsical. Well done.
Linda

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023

Thank you so much, Linda - I really appreciate your feedback!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hahaha ... you made me laugh.

Excellent entry for the Writers Block writing prompt contest. You did a good job expressing the way our minds work sometimes... so random.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023

Thank you so much! xx

Comment from leather

Excellent

What a cute cartoon illustration.
The poem did a great job of interrupting itself, but it seemed to go on for a long time. I kept thinking it was coming to a close, and then it would start up again. Still fun to read.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Thanks, leather. I was trying to replicate the unstructured mental fog that accompanies writer's block. I appreciate your feedback!

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

Is this writers block or just signs of a busy scattered brain. Ha! Great piece. I enjoyed the pace.

Thank you for sharing and good luck in your competition.
D

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Hi, Douglas. I think there's evidence that both are at play! In my experience, they often co-exist or one tends to propagate the other. Thanks so much for your feedback.

Comment from créateur d'histoire

Excellent

This was great ! You describe the humor and pain of writer's block at the same time. It does feel as if the character's procrastinates as well as have writer's block.Those are intertwined.Good Luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Thank you! Yes, I believe the two are often related. One probably gives birth to the other. Thank you so much for your feedback.

Comment from Mark Childs

Good

I like the story, but I'm having trouble reading this as any form of poetry. You deliver on the frustration of a writer with a humorous touch, and maybe I'm just out of touch with this style of poetry.

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Thanks, Mark. This is an example of free verse. It's certainly very different from other forms with more measured syllables, metre and rhyming schemes. They are fun and challenging as well, and I write frequently in those forms too, but free verse gives you a liberty of expression that I found helpful when trying to express the mental fog of writer's block. Thank you for your feedback.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh dear this is one disappointing muse as the laptop closes and the muse is dead here, you made me smile with this marathon march through your mind, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

"Marathon march through your mind". What lovely alliteration! :) Sometimes the muse deserts us entirely. Thank you so much for your feedback, Dolly.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

This is a great entry for the contest. It just says it all and in the end an impromptu lunch with a friend yet again distracts her from writing. Good luck. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Thanks so much, Ulla. Funnily enough, I am just about to go out to lunch with a friend right now!! Appreciate your feedback!

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Yes, Writer's Block can be exactly as you describe it--on the tip of your tongue but unable to recall. And it's so easy to get distracted as you pointed out. This was amusing and all too true. Rod

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023

Thank you very much, Rod!