Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

You stayed very well within the parameters of EB's sonnet expressing unending passion for her credit card, oh, I mean beloved, Robert, possibly.

Just one metric error in this line:

You love me purely, as long as VISA pays.

Lucky thing it wasn't Master Card.

Much enjoyed, Paul. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Gloria. I struggled with that line. I think I'll drop the first as".

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This is a humorous and creative take on a love poem. How do you love me? You don't. You love my credit card. I don't think E.B.B. will be offended. She won't know what a credit card is. I got a good laugh from this one, and the pay back at the end was perfect. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, LJ. Ms. Browning will probably be waiting for me at the Pearly Gates.

Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell

Excellent

You're really made me laugh with this clever parody. Poor Elizabeth is surely rolling in her grave. Even though she'd have no idea of credit card or VISA, she would get the point!

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Verna. She'll probably be waiting for me at the Pearly Gates.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am guessing this person was a gold digger. I enjoyed reading your love poem contest entry. I guess in this situation it was the love of money. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks for the review, Barb. I thought getting even at the very end would be interesting.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You made me laugh here Paul, loving someone just for their money never works. I had an attractive girlfriend as school and she vowed she would marry a millionaire. She did in fact achieve it and he was the ugliest man I ever met and the marriage was made in Heaven! I loved the humour here and good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

Edit:
The stress is on the first syllable on (Lady)

Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

I know that was a little awkward, but I wanted to squeeze her in.

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

LOL!!! I love this one Paul. You put a smile on my face today. Clever, creative and fun. I'm sure Elizabeth is smiling too from the great beyond.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Janet. She's either smiling or gritting her teeth.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Ha ha! You're getting as bad as me for plagiarism, Paul (but classier than Elton). This is a clever and fun take on her verse and your brief for the contest. I'm sure a love poem can include the material attributes of a lover. Some lovely rhyming in the last stanza in particular. But a bit of a hiccup in the last 2 lines of the first stanza in your enjambment. That said, an excellent entry and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

You are right, Debbie. I'm going to work on those two lines.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I hope E.B.B. accepts your apology and doesn't haunt you from the beyond.
This was to be a legit entry to a love poem contest, no? Humorous, it was. Romantic - buzz!
It was a fun read.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Tom. Before I enter the pearly gates (if that is the entryway that I'll be approaching) I'll throw my hat in first. I think Liz will be waiting for me.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is a hilarious, really fabulous love poem for the contest, the best! I daren't read it out to my hubby, he'd probably say 'I know how he feels! LOL, I don't think I've laughed this much at a poem in a long time, I really enjoyed it. Super well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Sandra. I haven't read this poem to my wife. Probably won't.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 24-Oct-2023

Coward!! 🤣😂

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

The ultimate revenge for someone shallow and greedy. LOL Your creative flow has reached the high water mark for tears of amusement. Still, I seriously doubt Elizabeth could relate to much of this. Big smiles, Lily

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks, Daylily. Probably Elizabeth will be waiting for me when I pass over to the other side. I hope she has a smile on her face.