The Makeover
A WITSEC Dribble Flash45 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
This interesting. But I think you add in the author's notes what WITSEC is or what it stands for. I think that would help explain why this person underwent such a drastic change, and it not being for the other reason.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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This interesting. But I think you add in the author's notes what WITSEC is or what it stands for. I think that would help explain why this person underwent such a drastic change, and it not being for the other reason.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Point taken. I added a definition to my notes.
Thank you for pointing that out and for reading.
John
Comment from Jim Wile
Ah, very clever, John. Great solution to being in WITSEC. Now you've got me wondering how many trans women are actually men in WITSEC. This was a good surprise ending to this dribble flash story. - Jim
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Ah, very clever, John. Great solution to being in WITSEC. Now you've got me wondering how many trans women are actually men in WITSEC. This was a good surprise ending to this dribble flash story. - Jim
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Jim,
Thank you for reading this dribble post.
I appreciate your time.
Note- I am trying to get to yours also.
John
Comment from pome lover
well, that deserves a 6 for the shocker ending I did not see coming, plus you lead up to it, setting the stage perfectly for the reader's belief that she's a natural she. UGH, but good. Another plus, you got a lot of info in, in a Dribble Flash. But I have to ask, what does WITSEC stand for?
Katharine
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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well, that deserves a 6 for the shocker ending I did not see coming, plus you lead up to it, setting the stage perfectly for the reader's belief that she's a natural she. UGH, but good. Another plus, you got a lot of info in, in a Dribble Flash. But I have to ask, what does WITSEC stand for?
Katharine
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Katherine. Thank you for all those glittering stars?.
Yowza!
The United States Federal Witness Protection Program (WPP), also known as the Witness Security Program or WITSEC.
I do appreciate your stopping to read and share.
Cheers,
John
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ah, that was easy enough if I had just put my mind to it WITSEC= witness security thanks!
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so very funny! I loved it! The last line had me laughing hysterically. I read it out to my husband and he laughed, too. This is such a good contest entry, and if it doesn't win, I will be very surprised. Well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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That was so very funny! I loved it! The last line had me laughing hysterically. I read it out to my husband and he laughed, too. This is such a good contest entry, and if it doesn't win, I will be very surprised. Well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Wow, Sandra. A fantastic review. I?m glad you both got a laugh from it. Thank you for those well wishes.
Cheers,
John
Comment from eliz100
LOL! You did a complete story in fifty words. That is quite a feat. Good luck in the contest. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed nday.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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LOL! You did a complete story in fifty words. That is quite a feat. Good luck in the contest. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed nday.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Liz? thank you so much for this outstanding review.
John
Comment from Thesis
LOL, That's a good one. You set up the surprise ending well, adding lots of detail to lead the reader down another path. Interesting direction with the mob reference. It was a good short read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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LOL, That's a good one. You set up the surprise ending well, adding lots of detail to lead the reader down another path. Interesting direction with the mob reference. It was a good short read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Great review! Many thanks and much appreciated.
John
Comment from rama devi
Funny closing twist. It never occurred to me the makeover was that all-inclusive. great gotchya effect...and the closing line is classic showing not telling. Perfect.
Strong entry! Good luck.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Funny closing twist. It never occurred to me the makeover was that all-inclusive. great gotchya effect...and the closing line is classic showing not telling. Perfect.
Strong entry! Good luck.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Wow! Thank you, Rama. Your review has made my day.
Cheers,
John
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Yay!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well.... how about by making a big mess every time you do (stand to pee). That ought to break you of the urge soon enough.
What is WITSEC?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Well.... how about by making a big mess every time you do (stand to pee). That ought to break you of the urge soon enough.
What is WITSEC?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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WITSEC is the government witness protection program.
Thank you for reading and sharing.
John
Comment from Jesse James Doty
So, a man turned himself into a beautiful woman to escape the mob. That is what I gather from the last surprising line in the dribble flash fiction. A twist to be sure but are there any hidden messages? I am not sure.
Anyway, this is readable and the picture is easy on the eyes as they say.
Thanks for participating in this contest.
Jesse
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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So, a man turned himself into a beautiful woman to escape the mob. That is what I gather from the last surprising line in the dribble flash fiction. A twist to be sure but are there any hidden messages? I am not sure.
Anyway, this is readable and the picture is easy on the eyes as they say.
Thanks for participating in this contest.
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Jesse.
Much appreciated.
John
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You're welcome, John.
Jesse
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent story for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent story for the challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Alexandra for reading and enjoying.
All the best.
John