Dressed to Kill
Expect the unexpected31 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a great story, Barry! And with that unexpected twist at the end. I was intrigued to see where this was leading but, because of his thorough preparation and apparent confidence and self-belief, there was never the slightest doubt about the outcome. That's why this is so clever. The reader is tricked and, in fact, it's the reader not the protagonist that should have expected the unexpected! Great job! And faultlessly expressed! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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What a great story, Barry! And with that unexpected twist at the end. I was intrigued to see where this was leading but, because of his thorough preparation and apparent confidence and self-belief, there was never the slightest doubt about the outcome. That's why this is so clever. The reader is tricked and, in fact, it's the reader not the protagonist that should have expected the unexpected! Great job! And faultlessly expressed! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Debbie,
Thanks so much for your kind review. Glad you liked it. I was pleased how it turned out. Take care and have a most wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Very clever! I enjoyed.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Barry, this is an interesting story with a twist I did not expect. I liked the picture to go with the name Shane, a good Western with a good guy. But is Shane really a good guy?
I think leaving Shane's motivation not to kill the target unclear works well. It doesn't really matter. Shane saw or read some reason not to kill him. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Barry, this is an interesting story with a twist I did not expect. I liked the picture to go with the name Shane, a good Western with a good guy. But is Shane really a good guy?
I think leaving Shane's motivation not to kill the target unclear works well. It doesn't really matter. Shane saw or read some reason not to kill him. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Terry,
Shane is really a good guy. the target was really not a bad guy so Shane spared him. Thanks for the review. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Barry, this is an interesting story with a twist I did not expect. I liked the picture to go with the name Shane, a good Western with a good guy. But is Shane really a good guy?
I think leaving Shane's motivation not to kill the target unclear works well. It doesn't really matter. Shane saw or read some reason not to kill him. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Barry, this is an interesting story with a twist I did not expect. I liked the picture to go with the name Shane, a good Western with a good guy. But is Shane really a good guy?
I think leaving Shane's motivation not to kill the target unclear works well. It doesn't really matter. Shane saw or read some reason not to kill him. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Terry,
A double up review. Not sure how that happened. Thanks again.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story, well-written and proofread. The ending was a surprise. If he had killed his subject, it would just be another unfinished story as he would go on killing people. By saving his subject, it was a completed story with a complex ending. What could he hope to do now that would end him good money for his daughter?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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This is a good story, well-written and proofread. The ending was a surprise. If he had killed his subject, it would just be another unfinished story as he would go on killing people. By saving his subject, it was a completed story with a complex ending. What could he hope to do now that would end him good money for his daughter?
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Carol,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. I was pleased with the end story. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
To commit acts like this, there is great planning which you have described in detail here with an ability to blend into the crowd afterwards without looking suspicious, a clever and interesting story Barry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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To commit acts like this, there is great planning which you have described in detail here with an ability to blend into the crowd afterwards without looking suspicious, a clever and interesting story Barry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thanks for your kind review Dolly. Glad you enjoyed it. Hope you have a great day and are well.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
Shane Dwyer's stare was laser like. - (laser-like, maybe?)
It was if he was beside him. - (as if, maybe?)
I think I would include the next-to-last paragraph that begins, 'In addition' with the previous paragraph.
So did he just wound the target, or miss altogether?
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Nicely written.
Shane Dwyer's stare was laser like. - (laser-like, maybe?)
It was if he was beside him. - (as if, maybe?)
I think I would include the next-to-last paragraph that begins, 'In addition' with the previous paragraph.
So did he just wound the target, or miss altogether?
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Wayne thanks for the kind review. Also, thanks for your suggestions. I agree with both of them. Hope you have a great day and take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from JT traveller
You're writing style is unique and highly engaging. I was thoroughly immersed in your story. It reminded me of the gritty Jack Reacher novels, but more enjoyable. This is a fantastic story. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work. I love it. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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You're writing style is unique and highly engaging. I was thoroughly immersed in your story. It reminded me of the gritty Jack Reacher novels, but more enjoyable. This is a fantastic story. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work. I love it. Jacqueline
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thanks again for the great review. I will seriously think about putting another few stories together and see how they are received. Have a great day and take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Thesis
An interesting plot twist at the end. The reader does not see it coming, especially from an experienced hitman. They seldom alter the terms of their contract, namely to make sure the target is killed.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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An interesting plot twist at the end. The reader does not see it coming, especially from an experienced hitman. They seldom alter the terms of their contract, namely to make sure the target is killed.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thanks for the review and I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes, a bit of a twist at the end. I think I will do another story based on his new path.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from oliver818
This is really well-written and interesting story, and I like the twist. You build up the atmosphere very well, and offer a lot of little details about the character which are very intriguing and bring the story to life. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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This is really well-written and interesting story, and I like the twist. You build up the atmosphere very well, and offer a lot of little details about the character which are very intriguing and bring the story to life. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thanks again for a wonderful review. I am thinking of doing some more stories based around his new life. He will be a marked man for failing to deliver on his contract.
Take care.
Cheers
Comment from Paul McFarland
Okay, Barry. I think I got it. Was it the last paragraph in the paper where it mentioned Jim Ponting's family? "He was a shooter but not a killer." This sentence puzzled me.
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Okay, Barry. I think I got it. Was it the last paragraph in the paper where it mentioned Jim Ponting's family? "He was a shooter but not a killer." This sentence puzzled me.
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Yes and the shooter not a killer statement simply refers to the fact that this time he deliberately shot away from the target. Thanks for the review and I hope you are well
Take care
Barry Penfold.