The Walrus and the Starfish
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Old Friends"They have some interesting conversations.
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Comment from Wendy G
A lovely poem for children about friendship, and about hopes and saspirations, as well as dreams and imagination. Cleverly written with smooth rhyme, and nicely flowing metre.
Wendy
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A lovely poem for children about friendship, and about hopes and saspirations, as well as dreams and imagination. Cleverly written with smooth rhyme, and nicely flowing metre.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Wendy. Hope you and yours are staying well. Kiss Sunny for me.
Comment from Jane Jane King
Delightful children's poem...light, lyrical, fun yet with a strong message about friendship. Well done. Good luck on the contest. Love the characters and title.
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Delightful children's poem...light, lyrical, fun yet with a strong message about friendship. Well done. Good luck on the contest. Love the characters and title.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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I'm so glad. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Paul Manton
Thank you Yvonne. I have studied Lewis Carroll's life and work since I was a student in Oxford - so this is a lovely 'homage' to his original pair. I do hope though, that no oysters appear (briefly) in this story!
Children will love these verses - partly because they are nonsense in the best tradition of the term. iambic 4-3, abab, as the original - faultless meter and rhyme. Here and there maybe alternative words - 'take' luncheon on the moon? But that's a matter of taste - I have no improvements to suggest.
I should have been proud of this one myself. Thank you for such a lovely, entertaining poem.
Paul
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Thank you Yvonne. I have studied Lewis Carroll's life and work since I was a student in Oxford - so this is a lovely 'homage' to his original pair. I do hope though, that no oysters appear (briefly) in this story!
Children will love these verses - partly because they are nonsense in the best tradition of the term. iambic 4-3, abab, as the original - faultless meter and rhyme. Here and there maybe alternative words - 'take' luncheon on the moon? But that's a matter of taste - I have no improvements to suggest.
I should have been proud of this one myself. Thank you for such a lovely, entertaining poem.
Paul
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the lovely comments. My name is Yvonne. 😊
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Oh dear, this is the third time in three days that I have mixed up names.
I do apologize, Yvonne. I will tweak the review to correct it.
Paul
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No need for that. It's okay. I've done it, too.
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I am such a klutz, Yvonne - but it isn't personal because I spread it around!
Love from Paul
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is perfect. This is the first time I have come across you. Boy have I been missing stuff. I will read some more. But I must tell you that as a rule, with very few exceptions, I operate on a one-for-one policy. you read and review one of mine, and I read and review one of yours. Exceptions are made for long works "I really don't belong here anymore" is almost 9000 words and I gave 8 reads for it. I wrote that when I first got here and didn't know people only wanted things in bite-size chunks. I am learning a lot about poetry here. you do amazingly good work.
Karen
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This is perfect. This is the first time I have come across you. Boy have I been missing stuff. I will read some more. But I must tell you that as a rule, with very few exceptions, I operate on a one-for-one policy. you read and review one of mine, and I read and review one of yours. Exceptions are made for long works "I really don't belong here anymore" is almost 9000 words and I gave 8 reads for it. I wrote that when I first got here and didn't know people only wanted things in bite-size chunks. I am learning a lot about poetry here. you do amazingly good work.
Karen
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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That's what is expected in reviewing. Be careful when telling others this. It might sound like you're asking for reviews which is against the rules. I'm glad you like my posts, and I appreciate your lovely comments. Thanks for all the lovely stars!
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Yes, I wrote Tom about that. It seems quite stupid that we come here to be reviewed and get comments and we cannot say, hey! I have had trouble with "I Really don't belong here
can you take a look? We can't do that. We cannot ask for a read. Bizzare Yes? Karen
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yes!
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Happy reading Happy writing
Karen
Comment from Ben Colder
Excellent, Young and old people should love this. Makes the old feel young and the young people enjoy it that much more. Good one, Arkie. Sending blessings your way.
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Excellent, Young and old people should love this. Makes the old feel young and the young people enjoy it that much more. Good one, Arkie. Sending blessings your way.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much. Sending love and hugs your way.
Comment from royowen
What an excellent story Yvonne, I'm most impressed, this is the second ditty like ode in a row, they are a Little different, but both very precious posts, they would be excellent in an open mic. This is marvellous Yvonne, blessings Roy
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What an excellent story Yvonne, I'm most impressed, this is the second ditty like ode in a row, they are a Little different, but both very precious posts, they would be excellent in an open mic. This is marvellous Yvonne, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Feel free to read them in open mic. I never thought of that. Thank you, Roy.
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I don?t go in them much