Stay Back
An unfortunate late night occurrence42 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I truly enjoyed reading your work. It's an excellent story and presentation! You've used imagery and specific words that draw in a reader. Funny and relatable . Best wishes! Alexandra
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I truly enjoyed reading your work. It's an excellent story and presentation! You've used imagery and specific words that draw in a reader. Funny and relatable . Best wishes! Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Your kind words are very welcome at this time. I appreciate you.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I feel for the poor child who got so scared that he had an accident. Unfortunately, this happens to a lot of children when they get scared out of their wits.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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I feel for the poor child who got so scared that he had an accident. Unfortunately, this happens to a lot of children when they get scared out of their wits.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Yes, I tried to be compassionate in the telling, placing no blame on the poor unfortunate child.
Comment from Pantygynt
Shock does have that effect o some people. It did on me once a very long time ago but I had just entered my teens and I remember feeling very ashamed.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Shock does have that effect o some people. It did on me once a very long time ago but I had just entered my teens and I remember feeling very ashamed.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Show me anyone over 21 who has not suffered the embarrassment of some unfortunate accident, and I will show you an above average individual.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, that was sad, sweet and such a beautiful story. And yes, it is possible, and it does happen. My nephew had many 'accidents' in bed when his parents were going through a particularly awful divorce. I was cross that they couldn't keep their hatred of each other without their young son having to witness it all. You have written this in such a gentle way, my friend. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Aww, that was sad, sweet and such a beautiful story. And yes, it is possible, and it does happen. My nephew had many 'accidents' in bed when his parents were going through a particularly awful divorce. I was cross that they couldn't keep their hatred of each other without their young son having to witness it all. You have written this in such a gentle way, my friend. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your generous comments.
Comment from mermaids
You have written a true to life tale and I imagine that many children are afraid of thunder. Your words create a clear image of what is taking place and one feels bad for the little boy.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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You have written a true to life tale and I imagine that many children are afraid of thunder. Your words create a clear image of what is taking place and one feels bad for the little boy.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It is fiction but with young children entirely possible. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You hit all the necessary requirements, characters, plot, and solution, and used only a few words. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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It is fiction but with young children entirely possible. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You hit all the necessary requirements, characters, plot, and solution, and used only a few words. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you my friend. I always appreciate your fine support.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Unexpected surprises are part of being a parent, whether it's daytime falls, scrapes and cuts, or nighttime accidents. At least Jack was old enough to get himself to the bathroom to shower and change his own clothes. I must admit, your author's note made me realize things were worse than I originally thought. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Unexpected surprises are part of being a parent, whether it's daytime falls, scrapes and cuts, or nighttime accidents. At least Jack was old enough to get himself to the bathroom to shower and change his own clothes. I must admit, your author's note made me realize things were worse than I originally thought. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from jenintorre
Ah poor little mite. I am not surprised that it happened after he had such a fright. You told a complete story in just 100 words and chose good artwork to accompany it. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. J.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Ah poor little mite. I am not surprised that it happened after he had such a fright. You told a complete story in just 100 words and chose good artwork to accompany it. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. J.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Stay Back, tells this personal bodily malfunction tale of thunderclaps and PJ craps. I'm sure the name was changed to protect the author. : )
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Stay Back, tells this personal bodily malfunction tale of thunderclaps and PJ craps. I'm sure the name was changed to protect the author. : )
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Oh no, it was not me nor one of my children. We are a fearless bunch.
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a great way to start off my day. A hearty laugh and a lasting smile that I can share with everyone I come in contact with throughout this freaky Friday. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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What a great way to start off my day. A hearty laugh and a lasting smile that I can share with everyone I come in contact with throughout this freaky Friday. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your supportive comments.
