Forgive Anyway
Potlatch Poetry Club ~ Canzonetta ~ week of 6-17-20 2340 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Will you look at that! What a piece of art and feeling and from the heart work this is!
I can identify completely with this. It is a mirror of my own. I choose to live a separate life from my family as they remain toxic today. Obviously brings a chord with me and is very well written. I must say you have exquisite word choice and you're lay out and you're repeated line after each stanza is extremely well done.
There was only one solution to this problem that requires a star rating! Hope you have a great day!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Will you look at that! What a piece of art and feeling and from the heart work this is!
I can identify completely with this. It is a mirror of my own. I choose to live a separate life from my family as they remain toxic today. Obviously brings a chord with me and is very well written. I must say you have exquisite word choice and you're lay out and you're repeated line after each stanza is extremely well done.
There was only one solution to this problem that requires a star rating! Hope you have a great day!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, lea. I thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Jessica,
what a powerful poem... it resonates with me so much.
The presentation and construction is impeccable... the message in your refrain, sublime!
A true wordsmith and amazing poet... a true pleasure to read your craft Jessica.
With our thoughts we create...
healing grace.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Hi Jessica,
what a powerful poem... it resonates with me so much.
The presentation and construction is impeccable... the message in your refrain, sublime!
A true wordsmith and amazing poet... a true pleasure to read your craft Jessica.
With our thoughts we create...
healing grace.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, James, as does your opinion. Thank you so much!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Paul Manton
A really wonderful Canzonetta, Jessica, with a heartfelt repeated refrain.
I won't go through the technical stuff as your notes do it perfectly.
I didn't review it first time I saw it because it looked like it was going to be too painful to read, but second time round I can see how beautifully it is constructed, and with allusions rather than vivid descriptions. Phew!
It recalls Dolly Parton, Loretta Lynn and in particular Tammy Wynette's 'Stand by your Man' - though your version is more subtle.
It's interesting that you use 'And' rather than 'But' in your chorus, which begs the question of just how ironic that chorus is. It could be self-denying and sacrificial, but it could be said through clenched teeth, a blunt instrument in waiting. Either way you'll break free - but not if they arrest you later.
Perhaps I'll never know, but my guess is that you have already broken free by drawing a line under this part of your life.
A very skillful, heartfelt poem, which will resonate with many people.
Thank you, Jessica.
Paul
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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A really wonderful Canzonetta, Jessica, with a heartfelt repeated refrain.
I won't go through the technical stuff as your notes do it perfectly.
I didn't review it first time I saw it because it looked like it was going to be too painful to read, but second time round I can see how beautifully it is constructed, and with allusions rather than vivid descriptions. Phew!
It recalls Dolly Parton, Loretta Lynn and in particular Tammy Wynette's 'Stand by your Man' - though your version is more subtle.
It's interesting that you use 'And' rather than 'But' in your chorus, which begs the question of just how ironic that chorus is. It could be self-denying and sacrificial, but it could be said through clenched teeth, a blunt instrument in waiting. Either way you'll break free - but not if they arrest you later.
Perhaps I'll never know, but my guess is that you have already broken free by drawing a line under this part of your life.
A very skillful, heartfelt poem, which will resonate with many people.
Thank you, Jessica.
Paul
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Paul, I love that you recognized the significance behind my use of "and". Thank you for this thoughtful review!
Comment from JSD
This is beautiful Jessica. I'm thinking hard about the characters here. I'm guessing you are the little girl and this is a man, or is this your little girl and this is about the experience of parenting. It doesn't matter as the writing is superb.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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This is beautiful Jessica. I'm thinking hard about the characters here. I'm guessing you are the little girl and this is a man, or is this your little girl and this is about the experience of parenting. It doesn't matter as the writing is superb.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Unfortunately this is a truth of my childhood... Involving a parent and stepparent. But I've since healed! Your kind words are so appreciated.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Jessica
A powerful Canzonetta ,well constructed and easy to read.
To forgive is to be the better person and your refrain is a clear message
Well done nice worka six from me
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Hi Jessica
A powerful Canzonetta ,well constructed and easy to read.
To forgive is to be the better person and your refrain is a clear message
Well done nice worka six from me
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, Chris, thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Wendy G
It takes much courage and grace to forgive some-one who has wronged you - but it is healing and freeing to do so, and one can move on with head held high. I think you have chosen an excellent refrain line, and have developed the reason for the need of forgiveness (abuse, neglect, lack of care) very well throughout. Well done!
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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It takes much courage and grace to forgive some-one who has wronged you - but it is healing and freeing to do so, and one can move on with head held high. I think you have chosen an excellent refrain line, and have developed the reason for the need of forgiveness (abuse, neglect, lack of care) very well throughout. Well done!
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, Wendy, thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from CD Richards
Outstanding piece of work, Jessica. I wish I had a six left.
That's two excellent pieces in a row I've read from Potlatch Club members; something must be going right in that group.
Perfect rhyme and meter, straightforward and appropriate language -- nothing to fault.
I think back to those who wronged me as a child (not my parents), and many decades later, I haven't gotten around to forgiving them... so well done on that front too :)
Craig
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Outstanding piece of work, Jessica. I wish I had a six left.
That's two excellent pieces in a row I've read from Potlatch Club members; something must be going right in that group.
Perfect rhyme and meter, straightforward and appropriate language -- nothing to fault.
I think back to those who wronged me as a child (not my parents), and many decades later, I haven't gotten around to forgiving them... so well done on that front too :)
Craig
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, Craig, thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Yes, let the past be the past, as you said: " What's done is done; I can't undo
But I won't waste another day."
You made the right decision to make peace by " And I'll forgive you anyway."
To forgive is the most generous option... good choice.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Yes, let the past be the past, as you said: " What's done is done; I can't undo
But I won't waste another day."
You made the right decision to make peace by " And I'll forgive you anyway."
To forgive is the most generous option... good choice.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Whoa. This so totally needs a six; I'm very sorry I used mine up already this week. This is exceptional, Jessica: so taut with emotion and strength yet with an undertow of a childhood steeped in vulnerability and pain. Your talent is immense; sometimes that is a writer's trade-off for her pain. xoxox
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Whoa. This so totally needs a six; I'm very sorry I used mine up already this week. This is exceptional, Jessica: so taut with emotion and strength yet with an undertow of a childhood steeped in vulnerability and pain. Your talent is immense; sometimes that is a writer's trade-off for her pain. xoxox
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Rachelle I am so moved by your words, thank you for this wonderful review. It truly means so much to me!!
Xo
Jessica
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My pleasure. You earned every word. xo
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The hurt of abuse and neglect come through in your Canzonetta poem Jessica but more importantly getting past that and moving on with forgiveness in your heart. A lovely, emotional write about a topic too many know first hand. Well written, Cheers
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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The hurt of abuse and neglect come through in your Canzonetta poem Jessica but more importantly getting past that and moving on with forgiveness in your heart. A lovely, emotional write about a topic too many know first hand. Well written, Cheers
Very
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica