Comment from Ginda Simpson

Exceptional

This is the most beautiful of poems for Father's Day. The rhyming is flawless, the imagery sweet and filled with wonder and innocence. The ending line says everything we need to know about your father and the father that you became.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Ginda. This is my favorite poem.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, how very sweet, and a fine tribute to wonderful fathers. If I had any suggestion at all it would be to replace one of the four times in those first stanzas that you use the word "then". This was so easy to visualize too. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Dawn. I will certainly take a look at those first stanzas.

reply by Dawn Munro on 16-Jun-2023

You're very welcome. Best of luck!

Comment from LisaMay

Exceptional

And so a favourite pastime and book is handed from generation to generation. Your poem is delightful.... a well-constructed, flowing narrative that sets the scene well and introduces emotion. Many will relate - I certainly do.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, LisaMay. I was hoping that this poem would strike a pleasant note for many.

Comment from Paul Manton

Exceptional

Dear friend (I don't have your name on my screen), I thought that this was a really delightful poem for Father's Day. The six four line stanzas worked perfectly in telling this story, and you controlled the 4-3-4-3 meter consistently throughout, which isn't easy. The final verse was extremely poignant without tipping over into sentimentality. Well done. I don't give many 6 star ratings! Good luck in the future.
Paul

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Paul. This is possibly the best poem I have ever written, and it came so easily I thought the spirit of my father might have been involved.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

Happy Father's Day! Your poem is a really beautiful poem and the story behind it is even more beautiful. I love interactions between Generations and traditions that are uphold and kept going. To have this meaning story leads to love more poems, poetry and the entire Art of Storytelling. Your father gave you a gift and you're giving that gift to your son as well, which he can also carry on to future generations. Your Father's Day story contains a Priceless treasure, connections between generations. Best wishes!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Alex. I have a great grandchild due in a few months, and you can bet the tradition will be carried on.

reply by Alexandra Trovato on 16-Jun-2023

That's wonderful! God bless your family family and soon to be new edition! :)) Alex

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi
This poem flows well and tells of a good tradition to pass on down.
It seems that poem will mean as much to your son has it did to you.
Do you know if your grandfather read it to your father. I've heard of 'The Owl and the Pussy Cat', but not 'The Owl and the Fox'. Who wrote it?
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Joan. That poem was written by that most prolific poet, Anonymous. It is in the book, "Best Loved Poems of the American People".

reply by dragonpoet on 16-Jun-2023

You're welcome and thanks for the book title
Joan

Comment from karenina

Excellent

It's a loving and warm poem ~ such a sweet memory and an honor to your father who planted this seed within you so that you could blossom and pass it on to your own "child with golden locks." I was surprised, when "Googling" to find a number of poems with this title. I wonder--might you be referring to the "classic" by James Russell Lowell?

Best of luck in this contest!

Karenina

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks for the review, Karenina. The writer of this poem is unknown. It appears "Best Loved Poems of the American People".

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

What a wonderful poem! I enjoyed the read of this poem very much. I
like how the author tells the poem like a story and end with the beautiful
last stanza. Thank you for the author's notes - a great Father's Day poem!
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Maria. This is possibly the best poem that I have ever written.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

What an absolutely beautiful and poignant poem, a tribute to your father, and a spoken love - through poetry - for a child who will also come to love that poem.

Is that your father's poem? Did he write it?

Thank you so much for sharing this heartwarming slice of life.

Pam

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks, Pam. The original poem's writer is unknown. The poem appears in "Best Loved Poems of the American People".

Comment from GentleWind

Excellent

What a beautiful memory and legacy your father left to you. I too, love rhyming poetry as it sings a lullaby to my heart.
Great job with the rhyming phrases and the heartfelt sentiment concerning your father comes shining through!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023

Thanks for the great review. This is about my favorite memory of my father.