Sailor Dad
This is a rhyme poem.27 total reviews
Comment from royowen
When my elder child was born, it was one of the most exhilarating days of my life. She was beautiful, and grew up as a beauty not only physically but internally. The day I gave her away I was happy for her and yet sad as well, but that sadness turned into joy, she gave us three of the best grandsons and made us very happy indeed, the bonus was our younger daughter gave us two grandchildren as a bonus, beautifully written, thanks for sharing, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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When my elder child was born, it was one of the most exhilarating days of my life. She was beautiful, and grew up as a beauty not only physically but internally. The day I gave her away I was happy for her and yet sad as well, but that sadness turned into joy, she gave us three of the best grandsons and made us very happy indeed, the bonus was our younger daughter gave us two grandchildren as a bonus, beautifully written, thanks for sharing, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Hello Roy, that is such a lovely story about you and
your beloved daughter. I loved reading it. Thank you
for the 5 star review, and
many of God's blessings to
you and your family. ~
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Bless you
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a beautiful love story and poetic tribute to Mike, the Sailor Dad. Your words allows the reader to envision you and Mike from the time you met, to the birth and then marriage of your daughter. You have written a delightful Father's Day tribute to the Sailor Dad. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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This is a beautiful love story and poetic tribute to Mike, the Sailor Dad. Your words allows the reader to envision you and Mike from the time you met, to the birth and then marriage of your daughter. You have written a delightful Father's Day tribute to the Sailor Dad. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, LJ.
Mike is very missed. I really
appreciate the 5 star review.
You're so kind. Many of God's
blessings to you.
Comment from Dawn Munro
My sincere condolences on your loss -- what a wonderful tribute you have written though -- I feel as if I know him. "Sailer Dad" was obviously a man well-loved.
"On a sunny autumn day
with mums in bloom,
Mike proudly walked her
to her groom..." ---> So sweet! I can picture it easily!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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My sincere condolences on your loss -- what a wonderful tribute you have written though -- I feel as if I know him. "Sailer Dad" was obviously a man well-loved.
"On a sunny autumn day
with mums in bloom,
Mike proudly walked her
to her groom..." ---> So sweet! I can picture it easily!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Dawn.
Mike is very much missed.
I really appreciate the 5 star
review. Many blessings to
you.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Julie Lau
A lovely summary of a happy Navy life. Just one item, last line of 3rd stanza: could HAVE had, not 'of'. Apart from that, fine. Best of luck in the Fathers' Day comp. Julie Lau
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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A lovely summary of a happy Navy life. Just one item, last line of 3rd stanza: could HAVE had, not 'of'. Apart from that, fine. Best of luck in the Fathers' Day comp. Julie Lau
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Julie, for this very
kind and thoughtful review.
Mike is very much missed.
I made the grammar correction, thank you for letting me know about it.
May you have a lovely
upcoming weekend. Many
blessings to you and your
family.
Comment from Terry Broxson
You have written a wonderful poem for this contest, and good luck. One of the things I like about the way you wrote the poem is how you gave us, the readers, some great details about the life of Sailor Dad. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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You have written a wonderful poem for this contest, and good luck. One of the things I like about the way you wrote the poem is how you gave us, the readers, some great details about the life of Sailor Dad. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Terry.
Mike is very much missed.
I'm so glad you like the poem. Many blessings to you
and yours. Have a splendid
upcoming weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a touching write and brought a tear to my eye, I am so sorry for your loss and you have some wonderful memories here of your husband, I really enjoyed you well chosen, skilful words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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This is a touching write and brought a tear to my eye, I am so sorry for your loss and you have some wonderful memories here of your husband, I really enjoyed you well chosen, skilful words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you, dear Dolly. You're
very kind and thoughtful. I
teared up penning it. We miss him so much. I hope
you have a lovely afternoon.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your verse started off with such a jaunty, 'sea-faring' tone with the happiness of the Navy life you shared together vividly conveyed. As the story expanded there were more proud and memorable events with your daughter Adrienne and your lives together so obviously complete. I am so sorry to hear of his passing but what emerges from this is such a wonderful image of what obviously became integral to his life - his Navy experience - and your imagery at the end is beautiful in its testament to that. Love the last sentence! Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Your verse started off with such a jaunty, 'sea-faring' tone with the happiness of the Navy life you shared together vividly conveyed. As the story expanded there were more proud and memorable events with your daughter Adrienne and your lives together so obviously complete. I am so sorry to hear of his passing but what emerges from this is such a wonderful image of what obviously became integral to his life - his Navy experience - and your imagery at the end is beautiful in its testament to that. Love the last sentence! Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie.
We miss him dearly. I really
appreciate the 5 stars and
very thoughtful review. It's
made my day.
