The Soul Collector
He works through deceit to achieve his goal.34 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
And thus did the Bible explain the existence of evil in the world. Great choice of phrases to feel this 'vibration': 'all hope of peace to drain', 'creates a scare', 'makes us feel we're pressed'. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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And thus did the Bible explain the existence of evil in the world. Great choice of phrases to feel this 'vibration': 'all hope of peace to drain', 'creates a scare', 'makes us feel we're pressed'. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you for the view. These borrowed rhymes weren't words I would have chosen but they seem to work okay.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Lucifer the angel of darkness. Jealous of God's favor and grace to mankind. He does thrill at chaos and insecurity. This poem told of his history and the evil deeds he has done and those things he has encouraged others to do in his name. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Lucifer the angel of darkness. Jealous of God's favor and grace to mankind. He does thrill at chaos and insecurity. This poem told of his history and the evil deeds he has done and those things he has encouraged others to do in his name. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you for an excellent review. I enjoyed reading you comments.
Comment from Ben Colder
Amazing how our loving God who wishes for all man to be like Him. "Let us make man in our image and likeness." The trials come to make us , mold, break us, all to His image. Starting with Adam.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Amazing how our loving God who wishes for all man to be like Him. "Let us make man in our image and likeness." The trials come to make us , mold, break us, all to His image. Starting with Adam.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you for the review. Satan was there determined to do whatever he could to cause man to fall. With sin came the need of a redeemer to bring us back from the fallen state. I enjoyed your comments.
Comment from karenina
I saw this contest and looked forward to the many takes on the "imposed" rhymes. I have not been disappointed! Each take is original and gives credence to each muse being a different voice in the poetic choir! Your poem reads so smoothly I would never have guessed these were not your personal choice for end rhymes! GREAT TITLE. GREAT THEME. (For my eyes the very bold, BOLD is a bit overwhelming ~ but geez, ignore me, that has nothing to do with the quality of this writing!
Way to go "anonymous" ~~ This one's my favorite so far!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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I saw this contest and looked forward to the many takes on the "imposed" rhymes. I have not been disappointed! Each take is original and gives credence to each muse being a different voice in the poetic choir! Your poem reads so smoothly I would never have guessed these were not your personal choice for end rhymes! GREAT TITLE. GREAT THEME. (For my eyes the very bold, BOLD is a bit overwhelming ~ but geez, ignore me, that has nothing to do with the quality of this writing!
Way to go "anonymous" ~~ This one's my favorite so far!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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It is interesting at the different routes our muses take us when we're all using the same rhyming words. Until I was nearly finished, I hadn't planned to write about Satan, but he just sort of slippen in when wasn't looking. LOL I"m glad you like it.
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When you get into a groove those rhymes just take you somewhere and poof, you've got a great poem!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
And why was Lucifer that way? Jealousy I read in Genesis. Where he was confounded Father chose Jesus's plan instead of his. He has been a distraction, with his third of heaven, never ever gaining a body to wreak havoc wherever those who raised their arm to the square exist.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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And why was Lucifer that way? Jealousy I read in Genesis. Where he was confounded Father chose Jesus's plan instead of his. He has been a distraction, with his third of heaven, never ever gaining a body to wreak havoc wherever those who raised their arm to the square exist.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you, Tom I appreciate your review and comments. Yes Satan was jealous that he wasn't favored by the most high. The first murder was also about jealousy. when Cain felt his offering was rejected in favor of Abel's.
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Amen. We are on the same page.
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear Poet, brilliance in the
use of borrowed rhyme. The
imagery makes me imagine
the garden of Eden and
Eve's giving in to temptation.
My best wishes for the
contest. Happy Weekend!
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Dear Poet, brilliance in the
use of borrowed rhyme. The
imagery makes me imagine
the garden of Eden and
Eve's giving in to temptation.
My best wishes for the
contest. Happy Weekend!
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you Regina, I appreciate the review and nice comments on this borrowed rhyme poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the Borrowed Rhyme contest. It reminds me of my ex-husband. LoL
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Excellent poem entry for the Borrowed Rhyme contest. It reminds me of my ex-husband. LoL
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you so much Gypsy. I'm glad you liked it. I hope your ex was't as evil as Satan.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A powerfully expressed verse with stunning visual which skilfully portrays the nemesis of God - the deceiver. I particularly enjoyed your image of 'pressed' illustrating pressure/biting of the apple. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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A powerfully expressed verse with stunning visual which skilfully portrays the nemesis of God - the deceiver. I particularly enjoyed your image of 'pressed' illustrating pressure/biting of the apple. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie. I appreciate the review and I enjoyed your thoughful comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are poignant words as man is responsible for deceit and the chaos caused on earth to disrupt the peace and commit continued sin, a poignant well rhymes write with a deep meaningful tale to tell, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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These are poignant words as man is responsible for deceit and the chaos caused on earth to disrupt the peace and commit continued sin, a poignant well rhymes write with a deep meaningful tale to tell, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you, Dolly. I really appreciate you thoughtful review and comments.
Comment from kahpot
Very well written, your words tell a story of one who is trying to change the ideas of man, Satan has been here all along, an excellent read and message, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Very well written, your words tell a story of one who is trying to change the ideas of man, Satan has been here all along, an excellent read and message, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and great comments. I didn't start out to write about Satan. He's a tricky old devil and just managed to work himself into my poem. I hope I didn't do him any favors.