The Fisherman and the Whale
A Modern Fable30 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Not to mention the IRS has eyes everywhere and he was so going to be SOAKED...and not by the shiny sea! Hey, nice modern fable! I think there is a fair share of greedy types who'd be quite happy for quite a while...
(It's hard to fight that keeping up with the Jones's thing)---but all in all, I enjoyed the premise of the magic whale... (At least it's not the HUMAN "spouting" off!)---and this made me smile. Creative and entertaining!
Way to go!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Not to mention the IRS has eyes everywhere and he was so going to be SOAKED...and not by the shiny sea! Hey, nice modern fable! I think there is a fair share of greedy types who'd be quite happy for quite a while...
(It's hard to fight that keeping up with the Jones's thing)---but all in all, I enjoyed the premise of the magic whale... (At least it's not the HUMAN "spouting" off!)---and this made me smile. Creative and entertaining!
Way to go!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Karenina, thank you very much. Yes, the dilemma of practical needs being met and the mass mind consciousness of keeping up with the Joneses.
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You're welcome!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. Your moral to this story is very wise. Many people never learn that lesson. Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to make this entry bette.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. Your moral to this story is very wise. Many people never learn that lesson. Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to make this entry bette.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you Barbara.
Comment from nomi338
Ah yes. A familiar tale of caution. Be careful of what you seek. The apple may well have a worm inside. The sweet things you devour may cause you to become afflicted with diabetes. The drugs that make you feel so good, could well become an addiction to dangerous drugs which could cause your death. The list goes on and on. But the picture has already been painted. Enough said.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Ah yes. A familiar tale of caution. Be careful of what you seek. The apple may well have a worm inside. The sweet things you devour may cause you to become afflicted with diabetes. The drugs that make you feel so good, could well become an addiction to dangerous drugs which could cause your death. The list goes on and on. But the picture has already been painted. Enough said.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thanks, Nomi! Hope all is well...
Comment from jenintorre
A great story with a really good moral. I really enjoyed reading it and think it is an excellent entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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A great story with a really good moral. I really enjoyed reading it and think it is an excellent entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Jen, thank you for this extra special six stars! Much appreciated!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good story, well written. I think, though, that I would drop the phrase: "... who will love me" since you make clear that she did not.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Good story, well written. I think, though, that I would drop the phrase: "... who will love me" since you make clear that she did not.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Wayne thank you I take it to the edit room,
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smiley face here
Comment from jessizero
You expressed your idea well. I have to wonder what the whale had to do with the moral, though. Still, it was a good story with a good lesson. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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You expressed your idea well. I have to wonder what the whale had to do with the moral, though. Still, it was a good story with a good lesson. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Jessi, the whale was the procurer of the fisherman's wishes. This put into action the events that resersed his lifestyle which I. His case brought about negative impacts.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a delightful fable with a story line as remarkable as any Grimm's fairytale. The fast moving story culminates with a thought=provoking moral, "material possessions are not what makes someone happy." Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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This is a delightful fable with a story line as remarkable as any Grimm's fairytale. The fast moving story culminates with a thought=provoking moral, "material possessions are not what makes someone happy." Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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LJ Butterfly, Thank you!
Comment from Terry Broxson
Dang it, I was pulling for him. I hoped he would find true happiness. But that is what happens when you come across a talking whale. Just kidding. This is very creative and does deliver a fine message. Good luck. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Dang it, I was pulling for him. I hoped he would find true happiness. But that is what happens when you come across a talking whale. Just kidding. This is very creative and does deliver a fine message. Good luck. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you, Terry.
Comment from Douglas Goff
What an interesting Fable contest entry. I do think you missed the moral though. It should be : if you have a whale in your sights...take the shot.
Ha!
Nice work and good luck!
D
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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What an interesting Fable contest entry. I do think you missed the moral though. It should be : if you have a whale in your sights...take the shot.
Ha!
Nice work and good luck!
D
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Doug that is more like it!
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You know you laughed too?..
Comment from Ginda Simpson
The moral of this story is one that needs repeating in both traditional fables and modern ones like this one. Yours is well written, with good sentence structure and descroptive imagery.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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The moral of this story is one that needs repeating in both traditional fables and modern ones like this one. Yours is well written, with good sentence structure and descroptive imagery.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thak you, Ginda!