Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Drips and Drops"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
36 total reviews
Comment from papa55mike
Yeah, that's a possibility but it's always fun to play in the rain, especially with a child along. What a wonderfully written poem.
Gopod luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Yeah, that's a possibility but it's always fun to play in the rain, especially with a child along. What a wonderfully written poem.
Gopod luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much, mike!
Comment from jessizero
I laughed at your senryu. Your syllable count was correct, and your story was amusing. I also liked the picture you supplied. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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I laughed at your senryu. Your syllable count was correct, and your story was amusing. I also liked the picture you supplied. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Jessi!
Comment from Mintybee
This one made me smile. I liked the punch line. I liked the phrase, "Slippery when uncoordinated." I empathize with that. I like the artful picture and the playful poem. It was a good and surprising combination.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This one made me smile. I liked the punch line. I liked the phrase, "Slippery when uncoordinated." I empathize with that. I like the artful picture and the playful poem. It was a good and surprising combination.
Mintybee
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your feedback and stars!!
Comment from w.j.debi
Ah, dancing in the rain can be a joyful thing to do and you celebrate it. Puddles are fun to jump in and splash. I love the twist in the final line.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Ah, dancing in the rain can be a joyful thing to do and you celebrate it. Puddles are fun to jump in and splash. I love the twist in the final line.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a very clever and cute poem. I have MS and I still do walk thank God my form of MS leaves me in remission mostly, but I could see me falling in mud in a gown certainly. So this poem was humorous for me to read, and your words and image created perfect imagery as well. Good writng! :)) Alex
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This is a very clever and cute poem. I have MS and I still do walk thank God my form of MS leaves me in remission mostly, but I could see me falling in mud in a gown certainly. So this poem was humorous for me to read, and your words and image created perfect imagery as well. Good writng! :)) Alex
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Alex!
Comment from Sally Law
This is beautiful and fun in this form and caught me by surprise. I loved this one and know how it feels to be carried away in the rain.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This is beautiful and fun in this form and caught me by surprise. I loved this one and know how it feels to be carried away in the rain.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Sally!
Comment from Julie Lau
Sorry, no sixes left, or you would get one for this cute and amusing senryu. You have chosen the accompanying image well; there is such joy and movement there - and did you notice she seems to be wearing black jeans and riding boots under her beautiful dress?
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Sorry, no sixes left, or you would get one for this cute and amusing senryu. You have chosen the accompanying image well; there is such joy and movement there - and did you notice she seems to be wearing black jeans and riding boots under her beautiful dress?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Julie, I did NOT notice that- however I am so glad you've pointed it out! I love that! Haha thanks so much!
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is funny. A classic senryu with humor and satire; I like your creative imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
A great choice of artwork.
Good luck in the contest, I think it should do very well.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This is funny. A classic senryu with humor and satire; I like your creative imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
A great choice of artwork.
Good luck in the contest, I think it should do very well.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Oh, this is too funny. You start with a lighthearted image and slip into a belly-laugh. I love it. Proof of how much so few words can do. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Oh, this is too funny. You start with a lighthearted image and slip into a belly-laugh. I love it. Proof of how much so few words can do. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Ginda, thank you so much!
Comment from Frank Malley
I have looked up senryu before, and I didn't look it up again, although I have forgotten what it requires. The name a form of poetry uses doesn't affect the quality of the poem. So - the experience of falling hard on one's butt in a puddle is memorable, and this senryu tells of this moment, and contrasts it with the free delight of dancing in the rain. "All good things must come to an end" is herein exemplified, and this poem has brevity, which Shakespeare tells us is "the soul of wit." "Klutz," the poem's title, is functional and suggests a topic worthy of embarrassed, rueful, and amused consideration - perhaps at greater length and with a more surprising perspective.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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I have looked up senryu before, and I didn't look it up again, although I have forgotten what it requires. The name a form of poetry uses doesn't affect the quality of the poem. So - the experience of falling hard on one's butt in a puddle is memorable, and this senryu tells of this moment, and contrasts it with the free delight of dancing in the rain. "All good things must come to an end" is herein exemplified, and this poem has brevity, which Shakespeare tells us is "the soul of wit." "Klutz," the poem's title, is functional and suggests a topic worthy of embarrassed, rueful, and amused consideration - perhaps at greater length and with a more surprising perspective.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you!