Like A Thief In The Night
2nd Place.29 total reviews
Comment from Diana Harris
I enjoyed the timing and style of your story. It is an apt description of falling in love, with the fear and playfulness included. Good luck in the contest. Diana
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
I enjoyed the timing and style of your story. It is an apt description of falling in love, with the fear and playfulness included. Good luck in the contest. Diana
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks! It?s doing well as I think it struck a cord with the readers! I hope everyone has had their heart unexpectedly stolen at least once. 😁
Comment from royowen
Yep, I understand, there was a girl in my youth that broke my heart not once but twice, silly me, I guess I had done to others, so I paid the price, beautifully wrutten my friend, an excellent post, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
Yep, I understand, there was a girl in my youth that broke my heart not once but twice, silly me, I guess I had done to others, so I paid the price, beautifully wrutten my friend, an excellent post, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, my friend. Your reason is probably why it?s doing well. Everyone has been there or done that.
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Well done
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A heart donor, that's a very generous gesture.
Good flash fiction entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest. You followed the rules and developed an interesting story.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
A heart donor, that's a very generous gesture.
Good flash fiction entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest. You followed the rules and developed an interesting story.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks! Seems this one is ringing true with the voters. Good or bad as it may have ended.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
She stole whatever belongs to you? What a crying shame. How about you get whatever she stole returned. If she laughs, I hope it is not too loud because they'll find her. You wrote, a story that had a plot; met the requirements.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
She stole whatever belongs to you? What a crying shame. How about you get whatever she stole returned. If she laughs, I hope it is not too loud because they'll find her. You wrote, a story that had a plot; met the requirements.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you Rosemary. I bet you have stolen a few hearts in your time.
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I hope the only heart that I stole was my husband's heart!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Good job with this 75 word flash. You led me exactly where you wanted me to go and then surprised with your unexpected ending. Sweet! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
Good job with this 75 word flash. You led me exactly where you wanted me to go and then surprised with your unexpected ending. Sweet! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks. It is resonating well as most have been there and done that
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, I like the ending very well done! You set it nicely, and I do think you have a very good entry for this contest. I wish you well. I knew a woman like that once. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
LOL, I like the ending very well done! You set it nicely, and I do think you have a very good entry for this contest. I wish you well. I knew a woman like that once. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Terry! Glad it was only once. We shall see how it does.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You kept us in suspense until the final four words reveals what has been stolen and I enjoyed your inventive write and wish you luck with the contest, loved it, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
You kept us in suspense until the final four words reveals what has been stolen and I enjoyed your inventive write and wish you luck with the contest, loved it, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Dolly. I think it is doing well! Blessings.
Comment from pome lover
very good, portraying someone perhaps flighty and callous, with the full meaning of reciprocal feelings at the end. And that picture helps with the reader's feeling that she was indeed covetous. However ...
A story told in just 75 words is a neat achievement.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
very good, portraying someone perhaps flighty and callous, with the full meaning of reciprocal feelings at the end. And that picture helps with the reader's feeling that she was indeed covetous. However ...
A story told in just 75 words is a neat achievement.
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks Kate! I like these Flash contests.
Comment from Nicki Nance
This is a sweet little love story packed into 75 words. You breathed a lot of life into her playful character. I think she had an appreciation for the value of a vintage heart.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
This is a sweet little love story packed into 75 words. You breathed a lot of life into her playful character. I think she had an appreciation for the value of a vintage heart.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Nicki. Not sure why, but Flash Fiction has become one of my favorite venues to write. Feels like a tease.