O Woman
Free Verse37 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
the woman in that picture has the most hypnotic eyes!
anyway, this was a good free verse poem - thought-provking with smooth flow
one suggestion i have is to maybe try the black background with a light blue font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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the woman in that picture has the most hypnotic eyes!
anyway, this was a good free verse poem - thought-provking with smooth flow
one suggestion i have is to maybe try the black background with a light blue font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hello Shelley. Thanks so very much for your lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa,
This free verse has good line breaks and uses repetition well to enhance the emotion. Women bleed for everyone around them, whether they are family or not. You allude to the real bleeding of menstruation to conceive and then go into all the metaphoric ways our heart bleeds.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hi Melissa,
This free verse has good line breaks and uses repetition well to enhance the emotion. Women bleed for everyone around them, whether they are family or not. You allude to the real bleeding of menstruation to conceive and then go into all the metaphoric ways our heart bleeds.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Joan! I really appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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Don't mention it, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about an Afghan Girl, and all afghan women in general. The picture is beautiful and haunting.
The free verse forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Excellent poem about an Afghan Girl, and all afghan women in general. The picture is beautiful and haunting.
The free verse forced flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hello Gypsy. Thank you so very much!! I really appreciate it.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
One sees a lot of normally dark skinned aboriginals here with those striking grey eyes, usually from whites "marrying" into the blood lines, this is a beautifully written abstract poem Melissa, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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One sees a lot of normally dark skinned aboriginals here with those striking grey eyes, usually from whites "marrying" into the blood lines, this is a beautifully written abstract poem Melissa, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy. I really appreciate it.
Melissa
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
A moving poem! And everyone knows that picture. How awful that a twelve-year-old has to live with the full responsibilities of a woman and all the burdens of life and war placed on her. This should do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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A moving poem! And everyone knows that picture. How awful that a twelve-year-old has to live with the full responsibilities of a woman and all the burdens of life and war placed on her. This should do well in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Helen. It is a little rough and real, but I felt it, and wanted to write it. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Beautiful, dear Melissa. The photograph has always haunted me especially knowing how old the she was yet forced to marry and bear children... a child herself. Moving poem and so heartbreaking.
Sending you my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Beautiful, dear Melissa. The photograph has always haunted me especially knowing how old the she was yet forced to marry and bear children... a child herself. Moving poem and so heartbreaking.
Sending you my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Sally. It is a little rough and real, but I felt it and wanted to write it.
Melissa
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You wrote an awesome poem, Melissa. I remember the picture
from years ago. The young girl looked older that her time. The
culture she was born into hasn't changed in thousands of years.
Woman are still considered second-class or worse or just property.
However, a woman's worth is immeasurable. Your words were
well thought out and descriptive. They covered any/all women
from all time. I liked the formatting of your lines and the repeated
phrase.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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You wrote an awesome poem, Melissa. I remember the picture
from years ago. The young girl looked older that her time. The
culture she was born into hasn't changed in thousands of years.
Woman are still considered second-class or worse or just property.
However, a woman's worth is immeasurable. Your words were
well thought out and descriptive. They covered any/all women
from all time. I liked the formatting of your lines and the repeated
phrase.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Jan!! I am delighted you 'got it' and appreciate your point of view!!!
Melissa
Comment from Terry Broxson
Wow, this is a very well-written poem that creates a strong and powerful image of women. The photograph and the poem seem they were destined to go together. Excellent entry for the contest, good luck. Terry.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Wow, this is a very well-written poem that creates a strong and powerful image of women. The photograph and the poem seem they were destined to go together. Excellent entry for the contest, good luck. Terry.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hello Terry. Thank you so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
I hardly ever give six stars to free verse, but this one is outstanding, Melissa. That picture is amazing. It goes really well with your poem. You should win the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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I hardly ever give six stars to free verse, but this one is outstanding, Melissa. That picture is amazing. It goes really well with your poem. You should win the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Paul!! I know its a bit rough and real, but I felt it and needed to write it. :)
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
The poor Afghan girls are it seems dumb to a life of male domination. And do not have much hope in the things that they can do. I enjoyed this poem. It's rather sad to think about a young girl at the age of 12 being married. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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The poor Afghan girls are it seems dumb to a life of male domination. And do not have much hope in the things that they can do. I enjoyed this poem. It's rather sad to think about a young girl at the age of 12 being married. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank Patricia. It is a tough poem about our lot in life, but it is a woman that keeps humanity moving forward, and for that, we can take joy. I really appreciate your thoughts.
Melissa