Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

The picture choice was perfect. Being wise never means without feelings. Weeping for the death of something beautiful is quite wise. I liked the simplicity of this poem. Not that the subject was simple. But your poem was cleanly and concisely written. Thank you for posting. Gretchen

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you, Gretchen. I appreciate the review and you wise and understanding words.
Beth

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Exceptional

This image is so meaningful, touching. Your words are definitely for us to see. The little girl must have a touch of compassion for God's creatures. A gracious characteristic to experience.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you, Rosemary. I really appreciate the review and six stars.
I enjoyed reading your meaning words.
Beth

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Oh yes indeed, even God notices the sparrow falling to earth, I know He cares, because He knows His creation is part of Him, but not as much as He loves us, we are valued, beautifully written entry in this cinquain contest, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you, I seldom write unrhymed poems but I appreciate your comments.
Beth

reply by royowen on 09-Mar-2023

Well done

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Did the picture inspire this? The little girl has a wonderful combination of wisdom and compassion. Alliteration with wise, ways and weeps. Rhyme with ways and nature. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you for the review and comments. Actually the poem just came to me. I went looking for picture and was happy to find this one.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Aw, I can understand this little girl's distress when the little sparrow falls down to earth. To encounter something like that would be upsetting. Good luck in the contest
Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you Ulla, Kids have tender hearts and they feel things deeply.
Beth

reply by Ulla on 09-Mar-2023

That is so very true. I forgot to ask you. How is your wrist? Did you have to go to the doctor?

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank Ulla. I did go to the doctor to get a perscription filled. It is still painful but I think it will heal eventually. The doctor left it up to me about an xray and I said Let's wait and see.

reply by Ulla on 09-Mar-2023

Okay. I hope for the best. Please do let me know. :)))

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very sweet and precious Cinquain poem you have penned. You used very good imagery from the picture you chose and very good descriptive words. The little girl in the picture looks so sad. I can so relate to her. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you, Teri. I was like that as a child. I cried over a lot of birds and disceased animals.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

She is a gentle soul. Very well captured in your cinquain. Confronting death, so young, must be most upsetting!

Good luck in the contest!

Karenina

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thanks Karenina. Death is something a lot of children have a problem with. I know I did as a child.
Beth

reply by karenina on 10-Mar-2023

Me too....

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

The innocence of a child came through in your poem and well accompanied were your words by the photo of the little girl.

It can also be a scary event for a young innocent child.

Fine line/balance is drawn.

Well penned.
John

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you John, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very lovely poem, and goodbye for the contest. I do wish you the best in the contest as well. May you have a day that is blessed richly that God. Patricia

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you Patricia. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Kids are sensitive to this kind of scene as all of us are as we don't like to think of things dying Beth, your words are endearing and sympathetic here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you, Dolly. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth