Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

"Cherry" - a colorful description of the mist.

"gymnastic skies" another good description.

Poem depicts your feelings about the colors of nature and we'll written.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you so much Brett, i'm glad you liked it! Thank you as well for your time going over my home and I'm glad for your review and look forward to further conversation hope you have a wonderful day. Thank you again!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I loved your word skilful choices here Lea and you painted quite a vivid picture with your words here. I would suggest that the longer lines keep to the same syllable count to bring some continuity to your poem. This is just a suggestion and it is one step closer to perfecting our poetry I think. A fine post for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you Dolly I'll probably be like it. I'll definitely look at the line link and see what I can do if possibly break them up. You shall see but thank you again for your time and for your kind words. I'm always appreciative hope you have a great day!

Comment from Julie Lau

Excellent

I love this oh so original poem which breathes new life into a beloved well-worn subject. Lea, your imagery just blows me away - the gopher's shout, the purple breeze... and the spare, unusual rhythm which works so well.
Your work is outstanding - keep it up!
Julie L

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you Julie for your time and prayer lovely comments very much appreciated. I also thank you for your review and for the time. It takes to do so and Uplifting commentary is very much appreciated so thank you again have a great day!

reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thank you Julie for your time and prayer lovely comments very much appreciated. I also thank you for your review and for the time. It takes to do so and Uplifting commentary is very much appreciated so thank you again have a great day!

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Nice...

(Slightly larger font would make me happy--smile)

I like your abab rhyme scheme.

You almost made it through with a 10/2/10/2 syllable count... (and you still could if you wanted to tweak a bit--although it's not required)

I find your unique metaphors to be sharp and inventive...

Karenina

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

So I did a little tweak and I change out the one word from depleted to devoured. That should make things attend to also increase the font a bit when I get to the darker. Thank you again you're very helpful. I'm very pleased to privilege that you're going through and reading my poetry from one fighting. Poet to one very talented and professional 1. I thank you,

reply by karenina on 09-Mar-2023

This is one of my favorites.
I sat and read it many times!

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a good rhyming poems for the contest. I wish you the very best in the contest to enjoy the autumn the best of all the seasons because of the beautiful color changes. However, I live in the desert now and there's not a lot of color change in the trees here, Patricia.

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 Comment Written 19-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023

Thank you Patricia for your wonderful review and taking the time to read it appreciate it and the desert from what I can see is has its own beauty here in Vancouver British Columbia Canada we tend to row our boats down the street lol. Thank you again and I hope you have a great day!

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

A nice poem about changing seasons. I assume you live in the southern hemisphere?

One line I did not understand,

"Absent birth."

I was unsure of the context.

I did, however, enjoy the read.


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 Comment Written 19-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023

While springtime is usually the time for birth the end of summer there isn't so summer's you know not happy crying away because there's no birth so absent birth. I'm glad you enjoyed my post and I'm happy for your review and for taking the time! thank you again and have a wonderful day!

reply by JT traveller on 19-Feb-2023

My pleasure and thank you for the explanation. Have a great day. Jacqueline