Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Kersplat!"Musing of an old man
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Comment from jmdg1954
Poor dumb toad...
A cute 25 word poem for the entry with the "ode" as the rhyme scheme and it told a story.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to a great day.
John
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Poor dumb toad...
A cute 25 word poem for the entry with the "ode" as the rhyme scheme and it told a story.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to a great day.
John
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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John, thanks
Comment from zanya
A-h-h yes a tale is told here through a mere twenty-five words - it's a great title for the poem and rhyming adds an extra dimension to the creation
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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A-h-h yes a tale is told here through a mere twenty-five words - it's a great title for the poem and rhyming adds an extra dimension to the creation
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Zanya, thanks and rest in Peace, poor, poor Kermit
Comment from JT traveller
Haha. Yes! I can relate. In Australia came toads do implode. What a thoroughly enjoyable, relatable read. Great illustration to accompany your ditty and the green background fits perfectly.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Haha. Yes! I can relate. In Australia came toads do implode. What a thoroughly enjoyable, relatable read. Great illustration to accompany your ditty and the green background fits perfectly.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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a great abundance of gallows humor at play here, thank you
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this sounds rather messy and I wonder if the driver skidded? Your rhyming poem made me smile but how sad it is for the toad, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Oh my goodness, this sounds rather messy and I wonder if the driver skidded? Your rhyming poem made me smile but how sad it is for the toad, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Yes poor, poor Kermit. 🥲🥲
Comment from karenina
Yew. Toad roadkill.... (Reminds me of "Frogger" an ancient arcade game I used to enjoy! ) You sure conjured an image in 25 words!
Maybe we need toad crossings?
Smile--
Karenina
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Yew. Toad roadkill.... (Reminds me of "Frogger" an ancient arcade game I used to enjoy! ) You sure conjured an image in 25 words!
Maybe we need toad crossings?
Smile--
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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ahh, yes the next big government project in the making..
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Our tax dollars at work!!!
:))
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Good contest entry. That was cute. Good rhyming pattern and flow of your words. Thank yy for sharing. Your poem was well written and I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Good contest entry. That was cute. Good rhyming pattern and flow of your words. Thank yy for sharing. Your poem was well written and I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
Well, you did it! 25 words later, you've told the story of the last seconds of a toad's hopping life. All it knew was that it needed to cross that road. Why? What was over there that was so important? A girlfriend? A wife? or maybe just a pond with lots of yummy bugs! Splat!
Good rhymes, and a tragic loss. For all we know, that toad was the leader of the toads of Gabriel Gorge! And now they'll have to have an election. Speeches... signs... and other toads that can count the ballots!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Hi Mystery Author,
Well, you did it! 25 words later, you've told the story of the last seconds of a toad's hopping life. All it knew was that it needed to cross that road. Why? What was over there that was so important? A girlfriend? A wife? or maybe just a pond with lots of yummy bugs! Splat!
Good rhymes, and a tragic loss. For all we know, that toad was the leader of the toads of Gabriel Gorge! And now they'll have to have an election. Speeches... signs... and other toads that can count the ballots!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Kimbob, alas the frogspawn will be actively seek8ng. We leadership.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, your poem rhymed all three lines but told a very sad story from the toad's point of view. But since this is not a children's poem, perhaps it would be judged not by the outcome of the toad.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Well, your poem rhymed all three lines but told a very sad story from the toad's point of view. But since this is not a children's poem, perhaps it would be judged not by the outcome of the toad.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Yes, perhaps, poor, poor Kermit 🥲🥲🥲
Comment from harmony13
The author's are sad, descriptive and creative. The author's words made me think about how animals go through difficult times too. I am sure many times no one see this happen. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the words of this poem.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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The author's are sad, descriptive and creative. The author's words made me think about how animals go through difficult times too. I am sure many times no one see this happen. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the words of this poem.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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harmony, true to your point, take any trip across America and the roads are littered with roadkill.
Comment from Douglas Goff
What a smushy entry for the Twenty-Five Word Poetry Contest. You even nailed the color scheme down to perfection.
I hope the toad didn't croak when it got hit. (Yeah, I know . . . but I still did it anyways.)
Good stuff. May the writing muse smile good fortunes upon you in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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What a smushy entry for the Twenty-Five Word Poetry Contest. You even nailed the color scheme down to perfection.
I hope the toad didn't croak when it got hit. (Yeah, I know . . . but I still did it anyways.)
Good stuff. May the writing muse smile good fortunes upon you in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Douglas, now that is funny! I wished a I had been smart enlightened to somehow incorporate that 🤣🤣. Poor, poor Kermit