Good neighbours
Very helpful33 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
OH wow! what a bombshell you dropped at the end, though fiction this situation could happen so easily, what an excellent story, and read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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OH wow! what a bombshell you dropped at the end, though fiction this situation could happen so easily, what an excellent story, and read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you Kahpot. The frightening thing is that it could happen all too easily, as when people seem like "nice" people we assume the best. Fortunately only fiction. Thank you for a very encouraging review, and also for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from karenina
Oh. NO NO NO NO NO! Wendy! I so did not see this coming! Well isn't that the perfect thing to say about Flash Fiction though? I gasped. Gasped! With all the murders we've been reading about of late this could oh so easily be true, and that makes it scarier, still!
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Oh. NO NO NO NO NO! Wendy! I so did not see this coming! Well isn't that the perfect thing to say about Flash Fiction though? I gasped. Gasped! With all the murders we've been reading about of late this could oh so easily be true, and that makes it scarier, still!
Karenina
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you Karenina - a wonderful review, and it seems I must have written it convincingly. Lol. Fortunately just fiction! But yet it could so easily happen, and with "nice" people we make assumptions that they are what they seem, and it is not always so.
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
There is definitely a lesson to be learned here about security of information. 'Leave me your contact details and I will pass them on when I next see these people.
The trouble is, we want to be helpful so we tend to give information when asked for it. A good warning article this one.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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There is definitely a lesson to be learned here about security of information. 'Leave me your contact details and I will pass them on when I next see these people.
The trouble is, we want to be helpful so we tend to give information when asked for it. A good warning article this one.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your review. Yes, that would have been a better way to handle the situation, and we judge that "nice" people are sincere and good. Fortunately this was fiction, but it could so easily happen.
Violence is perpetrated by all sorts of normal looking people. Super review, very thoughtful. I appreciate it.
Wendy
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I noted that it was fiction but I still found it chilling.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a great piece for Flash Fiction. You have set things up beautifully for that last line. You should do well in the contest. That young man could have used a therapy dog.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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This is a great piece for Flash Fiction. You have set things up beautifully for that last line. You should do well in the contest. That young man could have used a therapy dog.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Lol, yes, something, anything! Glad you enjoyed it and its structure. Thanks so much for your very positive review.
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness Wendy, I did not expect that ending and I was shocked! Unfortunately this kind of thing happens as women do not always escape domestic abuse, a fine flash fiction, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Oh my goodness Wendy, I did not expect that ending and I was shocked! Unfortunately this kind of thing happens as women do not always escape domestic abuse, a fine flash fiction, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much Dolly. Great review. Lucky it's only fiction, but could easily be real, unfortunately.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
Oh that's such a scary thing! It could happen. My daughter's ex-boyfriend has violent tendencies and sometimes, the thought that he might look us up would worry me. You turned such a worry into a horror story! Yikes!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Oh that's such a scary thing! It could happen. My daughter's ex-boyfriend has violent tendencies and sometimes, the thought that he might look us up would worry me. You turned such a worry into a horror story! Yikes!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you Helen. Great review. One has to be so careful, even "nice young men" can turn out to be psyopaths or sociopaths. Praying your daughter will never see him again! Or that he has moved on.
Wendy
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Thank you, Wendy! He's in another state but his actions to my daughter did give him a police record. Then he filed papers to try to get her to remove that record. It was awful. Sigh.
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What a terrible situation for her. That doesn't help one's self-esteem! Or confidence in going out, or meetng people!
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So true. And that guy came from a Christian home. She dated since but someone much older and not interested in commitment. Appreciate your prayers. 💖
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Oh my, please do not tell anyone where I live. They may meet Smith and Wesson instead, or a Mastiff seven foot tall. I'd hate to be an accomplice to someone's demise. Well done, my Aussie friend.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Oh my, please do not tell anyone where I live. They may meet Smith and Wesson instead, or a Mastiff seven foot tall. I'd hate to be an accomplice to someone's demise. Well done, my Aussie friend.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Yes, if would be awful. Even if unintentional. Thanks for reviewing. Guns are much rarer here in Australia, not many 'ordinary' people have them. Thank you for the great review.
Wendy
Comment from Aussie
Well done honeybun. So much of this is happening in real life! Yesterday a chap was having a coffee on the balcony, she came out and stabbed him, locked the door and set the place on fire. Go figure.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Well done honeybun. So much of this is happening in real life! Yesterday a chap was having a coffee on the balcony, she came out and stabbed him, locked the door and set the place on fire. Go figure.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Good gracious! Here in Australia?! Unbelievable!
Thanks for reviewing this one. Although fiction it could easily happen.
Wendy
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Yes, in west subs. He is critical she is in the slammer. 👍
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent flash-fiction. It was predictable that the man wasn't going to be welcome at the new neighbours', but to that extent! Let that be a lesson to us all. NEVER give any information out about your neighbours. Imagine if they gave some out about jou! kay
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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This is an excellent flash-fiction. It was predictable that the man wasn't going to be welcome at the new neighbours', but to that extent! Let that be a lesson to us all. NEVER give any information out about your neighbours. Imagine if they gave some out about jou! kay
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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You are so right! One never knows what can be the result. Luckily this was fiction, but it could easily happen. Thanks so much for your excellent review.
Wendy
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Wendy,
wow!
This is a gripping flash fiction story! You masquerade the first part as a sweet tale,and the end is a grabber.
Great story, Wendy.
Good luck in the contest.(I always have trouble with stories with a word limit.
Your story reads nicely.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Wendy,
wow!
This is a gripping flash fiction story! You masquerade the first part as a sweet tale,and the end is a grabber.
Great story, Wendy.
Good luck in the contest.(I always have trouble with stories with a word limit.
Your story reads nicely.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much Cindy. I like the challenges of a word limit. This one needed 150 words, I couldn't have written it with fewer. So glad you (sort of) enjoyed it! Blessings for you too.
Wendy
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I really enjoyed it, Wendy. I meant I have trouble writing really short stories.
Good luck!
Cindy